No.1 Issue64 第4篇拍我必回大砖头

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Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it.
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Many people hold the viewpoint that people know to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it. Retrospect back to the development of human history, personally, I agree with this idea. It is common for everyone to attain all forms of success in his daily life, however, many of them do not know how to make the best use of it.

To begin with, in human society, with right mind and good way, people know how to attain success. With the advancement of science and technologies as well as the popularization of advanced education, people can receive basic education required for success. To a student, there is no doubt behaving perfectly in the class and winning the first place in the exam is his success in school and we believe that he has the ability to win it if he studies hard and thinks more than others. The teacher will also impart them some merits such as assiduity, erudition and persistence to the success of future. Scientist, he should both make some innovations in his research field and create new research theory, that is also the way of walking to success. We have to admit that many people know the means to success in their field, and by this means, they can achieve it to some extent.

However, it is a pity that few of the people really know how to make the best use of the success. Someone who attains the success would easily be immersed into the joy and exciting. Facing with the smile and claps, he would lose himself and forget what he should do next, without motivation and stimulus, there is only failure following him. I can still remember one of my classmates in the middle school. He won the first place in one exam, gradually, he began to be proud of his grade and contempt with his students. We can imagine the final result he never win good grade in the exam. In contrast, few of them after the achievement can keep calm and accept the success in a well-balanced heart. Success and knowledge is endless in the world. Only treating with success with a normal attitude can he attain further achievement.

Therefore, people should not only know how to attain success but also know how to make the best use of it. People should bear a positive and modest attitude to their success. They can share it with his friends happily, what is more important, they should put his success into effect and do great contributions for human, moreover, with a positive mode, they should go on striving to work hard and achieve more success. That is the best use of success.

To sum up, though many people know the meanings of success, few of them get the true meanings how to make the best use of it, in my opinion, facing your success calmly and utilizing it to do contributions for the development of human is the best use.

郁闷，速度提高不了啊

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Many people hold the viewpoint that people know ((There is always a belief among a great many people that one knows) to attain success, but few know (seldom does anybody know) how to make the best use of it. Retrospect back to the development of human history, personally, I agree with this idea (I am convinced there is a great deal of truth in this idea). It is common for everyone to attain all forms of success in his daily life , however, many of them do not know how to make the best use of it(how to make best use of it is always open to question).

To begin with, in human society, with right mind and good way, people know how to attain(attain 用太多拉，可以换成achieve) success. With the(加一个swift) advancement of science and technologies as well as the popularization of advanced education, people can receive basic education required for success. To a student (when it comes to a student), there is no doubt behaving perfectly in the class and winning the first place in the exam is his success in school and we believe that he has(has 换成acquire) the ability to win it if he studies hard(if he strive for it) and thinks more than others. The teacher will also impart them some merits such as assiduity, erudition and persistence (which is considerably bound up with the success of future) to the success of future. Scientist, he should both make some innovations in his research field and create new research theory(both and换成not only but also 比较好哦，还可以倒装), that is also the way of walking to（leading to） success. We have to admit that many（many 别用太多 换成countless 或者a great number of ） people know the means to success in their field, and by this means, they can achieve it to some extent.

However, it is a pity that few of the people really know  (it is a pity that hardly does anyone really know) how to make the best use of the success. Someone who attains the success would easily be immersed into(不错啊，这个短语，和be absorbed in 是可以替换的) the joy and exciting. Facing with the smile and claps, he would lose himself and forget what he should do next, without motivation and stimulus（不错，就是要多用伴随状语）. There is only failure following him(what ensues is the complete failure). I can still remember one of my classmates in the middle school. He won the first place in one exam, gradually, he began to be proud of his grade and contempt with his students. We can imagine the final result he never win good grade in the exam. In contrast, few of them after the achievement can keep calm and accept the success in a well-balanced heart. Success and knowledge is endless in the world. Only treating with success with a normal attitude can he attain further achievement.（倒装结尾，要记得多用）

Therefore, people should not only know how to attain success but also know how to make the best use of it.（not only but also 用成倒装比较好） People should (are supposed to ) bear (both) a positive and modest attitude to their success. They can share it with his friends happily, what is more important, they should put his success into effect and do great contributions for human, moreover, with a positive mode, they should go on striving to work hard(they should strive to work hard on end) and achieve more success. That is the best use of success.

To sum up, though many people know the meanings of success, few of them get the true meanings how to make the best use of it, in my opinion(as far as I am concerned), facing your success calmly and utilizing it to do contributions for the development of human is the best use.


搂住多注意用词的变换啊

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fengli408UID: 195844

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In our modern society, technology has come to pervade into more than one aspect of our daily lives. With the progress of the society and the increase of living standard, we are confronted with a great many of increasingly perplex and complicated problem, feeling at a loss and out our wits more than often. Under this circumstance, what we are supposed to possess is the ability to simplify the things and problems as possible as we could.

To begin with, it is the development of technology and the progress of human beings that make our earth more and more small, which is considerably regarded as a globe village. For this reason, the relation among people dramatically become anfractuous and reticular in highest measure. E-mail, for examination, frees people from the tremendous affliction in the past to wait for a long time when send a letter. And the emergence of internet proves to be another miracle in human history. Only with a computer can anybody know of the thing both important and trivial all over the world, less about the mobile phone, which considerably makes two friends at a large distance feel as if they were together. Taking into consideration all of this advanced technology, the correlation of people inevitably is showing the complexity of itself.

In addition, such is the tendency that all the world is coming into a unification, from the living to the work, from the technology to the politics. And also with the development of the science, it is more and more difficult for only one person to complete a task or a research. However, facing the variety of problem, the ingenious humans never fail to cease their step leading to progress. Nowadays, not only do people achieve their goal by the assistance of some useful implement but also turn to the predecessors for experience of reference. I want to take the current automobile production as a example. Hardly can other producer manufacture a automobile without a cooperation with others. Maybe a whole car is made by a American company, but it is possible some of its accessories come from Japan or China. Besides, a myriad of labors is also replaced by the robot to complete heavy and complicated task, which can commit fewer mistake and tremendously enhance the effect. When it comes to the lawyer in this society, what invariably happen is that they inquiry the past same cases as a reference. So all of these remarkably suggest that people now willingly tend to simplify the things and the problems.

Furthermore, with the disappearance of some old distinguished versatile person such as Churchill and Vinci, the current science has become special little by little. Seldom can a person be possession of a wide variety of knowledge, as in the past, now what usually happens is scientists engage in merely one or two sphere and when the problems engender that involve different aspects of knowledge, maybe cooperation is the best solution, for it not only can find the answers to the problem at the fast speed but also boost the communication among people. In this point, what the scientists rely on is also the ability to simplify the perplexity of the things.

To sum, I can draw a conclusion that it is a necessary result that the development will give rise the complicacy and the variety, and it is also the gauge that technology is developing and the society and civilization is progressing. As a result, if we can possess a good state of mind and attitude to face these problem, if we can learn the ability to make things more simple, if we can find a better approach to solute the complicated problem. It is a certain that human’s knowledge will be considerably boarded and it is also a tendency that our society and civilization will acquire more progress.

ponponUID: 181304

In our modern society, technology has come to pervade into more than one aspect of our daily lives. With the progress of the society and the increase of living standard, we are confronted with a great many of increasinglyincreaing perplex and complicated problem, feeling at a loss and out our wits more than often. Under this circumstance, what we are supposed to possess is the ability to simplify the things and problems as possible as we could.

To begin with, it is the development of technology and the progress of human beings that make our earth more and more smallsmaller and smaller, which is considerably regarded as a globe village. For this reason, the relation among people dramatically become anfractuous and reticular in highest measureto highly extent. E-mail, for examination, frees people from the tremendous affliction in the past to wait for a long time when send a letter. And the emergence紧急情况appearacne of internet proveswas supposed to be another miracle in human history. Only with a computer can anybody know of the thing both important and trivial all over the world, less about the mobile phone能否跟我说一下你句话的意思, which considerably用的次数过多 makes two friends at a large distance feel as if they were togetherclose. Taking into consideration all of this advanced technology, the correlation of people inevitably is showing the complexity of itself.

In addition, such is the tendency that all the world is coming into a unification, from the living to the work, from the technology to the politics.在这点出联合和把事情简单化的联系 And also with the development of the science, it is more and more difficult for only one person to complete a task or a research. However, facing the variety of problem, the ingenious humans never fail to cease their step leading to progress. Nowadays, not only do people achieve their goal by the assistance of some useful implement but also turn to the predecessors for experience of reference. I want to take the current automobile production as a example. Hardly can other producer manufacture a automobile without a cooperation with others. Maybe a whole car is made by a American company, but it is possible some of its accessories come from Japan or China. Besides, a myriad of labors is also replaced by the robot to complete heavy and complicated task, which can commit fewer mistake and tremendously enhance the effect. When it comes to the lawyer in this society, what invariably happen is that they inquiry the past samesimilar cases as a reference. So all of these remarkably suggest that people now willingly tend to simplify the things and the problems.

Furthermore, with the disappearance of some old distinguished versatile person such as Churchill and Vinci, the current science has become special little by little. Seldom can a person be possession of a wide variety of knowledge, as in the past, now what usually happens is scientists engage in merely one or two sphere and when the problems engender that involve different aspects of knowledge, maybe cooperation is the best solution, for it not only can find the answers to the problem at the fast speed but also boost the communication among people. In this point, what the scientists rely on is also the ability to simplify the perplexity of the things.能把问题升华

To sum, I can draw a conclusion that it is a necessary result that the development will give rise the complicacy and the variety, and it is also the gauge that technology is developing and the society and civilization is progressing. As a result, if we can possess a good state of mind and attitude to face these problem, if we can learn the ability to make things more simple, if we can find a better approach to solute the complicated problem. It is a certain that human’s knowledge will be considerably boarded and it is also a tendency that our society and civilization will acquire more progress.
你的句式很不错，但必然带来的问题就是用错的地方过多，注意修改，提高