argument4 各位斑斑~~兔兔完了该我啦~

so猫UID: 148633

4.The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.

"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."


In this argument, the arguer concludes that Adams Realty, of the two leading real estate firms in the town is superior to the other one, Fitch Realty. Furthermore, the speaker suggests us choosing Adams to sell home instead of Fitch Realty. Detailed comparison and contrast were illustrated above clearly; however, the process commits several fallacies.

First of all, the argument is based on a false analogy. The arguer simply lists the number concerned about the peripheral situation of these two firms, such as the number of estate agents, revenue and the average price of home sales last year; but he/she does not provide any evidence that these data are the component to determine the capability for them to sell house successfully. The factors which are more important to standard the strength of the firms are overlooked. It is possible that the Fitch corporate with less agents but high efficiency; also, the orientation of marketing of Fitch is focused upon the smaller, less modern houses in suburban areas compared with Adams.

Secondly, the arguer commits a fallacy of unfair generalization. Even if it spent only one month for him/her to sell home through Adams last year, while it cost more than four months to sell another one through Fitch ten year ago, there is no implication that the efficiency of Fitch is worse than Adams. There lies so much time of elapse between these two purchases that many indeterminate factors may change: the prices of houses themselves, the environments of the homes and the policies and restriction the government towards house trading. Besides, the arguer doesn't provide any information about these two homes such as the areas, the location, and the extent of decoration inside. These all, are important elements that could determine the time selling the homes to great extent.

Last but no the least, even though Adams does perform better in most cases compared with Fitch, one cannot arbitrary draw the conclusion that all houses could be vented out quickly and at good price in Adams. As mentioned in the above paragraph, it is the home itself that determines whether it can be classified into the documentary of homes that would be vented satisfyingly. Moreover, Adams is absolutely not perfect, as everyone has to admit; thus there surely exist some kinds of homes that Adams cannot deal with successfully. At this moment, is it wiser to turn to other experienced firms which could solve this problem better, such as, the Fitch? Actually, there may lie more choices offered except these two options.

In conclusion, the arguer fails to establish a convincing conclusion that Adams is superior to Fitch in selling homes; and the suggestion of choosing Adam instead of Fitch lacks careful consideration. To be more persuasive, the arguer should offer more data and detail about these two firms as well as taking other smaller firms into the range of option to sell homes.

没限定时间 连想带写差不多40分钟
汗~~~

billkaoUID: 9349

https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251491

鬼谷子UID: 159645

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so猫UID: 148633

鬼鬼怎么扔下一句话就跑了?

鬼谷子UID: 159645

回来了回来了，猫猫别急嘛:D

4.The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.

"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."


In this argument, the arguer concludes that Adams Realty, of the two leading real estate firms in the town is superior to the other one, Fitch Realty. Furthermore, the speaker suggests us choosing Adams to sell home instead of Fitch Realty. Detailed comparison and contrast were illustrated above clearly; however, the process commits several fallacies. 【开头有点模板化，关于反驳的原因可以具体一点】

First of all, the argument is based on a false analogy. The arguer simply lists the number concerned about the peripheral situation of these two firms, such as the number of estate agents, revenue and the average price of home sales last year; but he/she does not provide any evidence that these data are the component to determine the capability for them to sell house successfully. The factors which are more important to standard 【这个可不是动词啊】the strength of the firms are overlooked. It is possible that the Fitch corporate with less agents but high efficiency; also, the orientation of marketing of Fitch is focused upon the smaller, less modern houses in suburban areas compared with Adams. 【感觉这几点你只是列出来了，但是没分析完整】

Secondly, the arguer commits a fallacy of unfair generalization. Even if it spent only one month for him/her to sell home through Adams last year, while it cost more than four months to sell another one through Fitch ten year ago, there is no implication that the efficiency of Fitch is worse than Adams. There lies so much time of elapse between these two purchases that many indeterminate factors may change: the prices of houses themselves, the environments of the homes and the policies and restriction the government towards house trading. Besides, the arguer doesn't provide any information about these two homes such as the areas, the location, and the extent of decoration inside. These all, are important elements that could determine the time selling the homes to great extent. 【这一点驳斥的还不错】

Last but no the least, even though Adams does perform better in most cases compared with Fitch, one cannot arbitrary draw the conclusion that all houses could be vented out quickly and at good price in Adams. As mentioned in the above paragraph, it is the home itself that determines whether it can be classified into the documentary of homes that would be vented satisfyingly. Moreover, Adams is absolutely not perfect, as everyone has to admit; thus there surely exist some kinds of homes that Adams cannot deal with successfully. At this moment, is it wiser to turn to other experienced firms which could solve this problem better, such as, the Fitch? Actually, there may lie more choices offered except these two options.

In conclusion, the arguer fails to establish a convincing conclusion that Adams is superior to Fitch in selling homes; and the suggestion of choosing Adam instead of Fitch lacks careful consideration. To be more persuasive, the arguer should offer more data and detail about these two firms as well as taking other smaller firms into the range of option to sell homes.
【总体来说还是不错的，基本达到了argu的要求，题目的问题都给出了分析和反驳，逻辑顺序上也比较合理。关于这个题目我觉得Billkao的分析相当的透彻，可以去学习一下https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251491】

jorgeUID: 108878

为什么说兔兔啊。:D

流浪的失魂者UID: 177646

斑斑偏心，为什么给so猫改，不给我改呢？不照顾新人。5555555555~~~~~~

so猫UID: 148633

这个 偶觉得有必要解释一下
上面的这位同学
斑斑的原则不是照顾新人 而是
优先照顾给别人改过很多作文的人

偶改过多少作文 楼上的同学实在有兴趣知道的话可以去搜索看看
这个赛季偶是改得不多 但偶以前没考的时候还是有改很多的

所以请楼上的同学表怪罪鬼鬼偏心
斑竹之所以酱紫做就是强迫大家自己活跃起来 主动给别人改~

多的也没必要说
实在要怪就怪我自己
鬼鬼表见怪啊~~~~

流浪的失魂者UID: 177646

偶没有怪斑斑的意思啦！so猫误会了……
我也想给别人改，可是水平实在是太烂呢，自己写的不好，别人的文章也看不出不足，所以才诚恳请求帮助的……

so猫UID: 148633

最初由 流浪的失魂者 发布
[B]偶没有怪斑斑的意思啦！so猫误会了……
我也想给别人改，可是水平实在是太烂呢，自己写的不好，别人的文章也看不出不足，所以才诚恳请求帮助的…… [/B]

没怪你的意思啦
就是怕你怪鬼鬼

呵呵 你上面的论断正好是个argu的topic

1. 你怎么知道你水平烂呢? 谁证明? 拿什么证明? 你AW不是还没考吗? 你怎么知道你烂呢? 而且今天烂 不代表明天就烂啊 而且你烂说不定有人比你还烂呢~
2. 你看不出别人的不足吗? 看不出结构有文法 没文法有句法 没句法有语法 没语法有拼写, 大家都是这样过来的, 改得不对又不会要你去撞墙 就是要有comparison才能有discussion最后达到双win的局面 你都不改你怎么知道看不出呢?
3. 最重要的 你都不给别人改 别人凭什么帮你呢 斑斑都很辛苦的 自己都要有课上 我们这些要考的自己都忙不过来 时间都少~~~

好就说这么多 我复习去了
希望你自己能走出这一步帮别人改改就好了~~~

不过i'm sorry我帮不到你 我自己都快忙疯了~