Issue185 ,多谢指教，必回拍

龙非UID: 193190

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Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
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Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no
speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. So, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the "academic crime". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.

zhoulin00001UID: 189304

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no
speaker or reformer ever could.开头挺好

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. So,去掉 scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the "academic crime". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored这句放在这里不太好，有点和本段主题相孛.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.
总体感觉不错，思路很清晰，语言也很好，要是限时完成的话，考的时候肯定没问题了，佩服啊！！

zhoulin00001UID: 189304

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no
speaker or reformer ever could.开头挺好

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. So,去掉 scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the "academic crime". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored这句放在这里不太好，有点和本段主题相孛.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.
总体感觉不错，思路很清晰，语言也很好，要是限时完成的话，考的时候肯定没问题了，佩服啊！！
颜色选的不好，有点晃眼睛，请看这个

victoriazhizhiUID: 163135

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing problems in ways that no
speaker or reformer ever could.简洁清晰

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform,and henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced.这句有些不明白，请赐教 So,so 换个别的吧，什么hence, thus, therefore都比这个强 scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing, we enhanced our supervision level to purify the academia. In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the "academic crime". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.这段例子的描述有些太细致，分析的比重少了点

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored.最后一句和前面连贯，忽然冒出来，想加强你的观点，可以慢慢的转移分析一下，一个even so就过来了，有些太突然

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.

一直都觉得龙非GG对题目的把握都比较好，思路也很清楚，今天好容易上坛子就看见你的作文拉，哈哈。总的来说，思路很清晰，论述的也比较到位，例子也很丰富，只是有的地方对例子的描述有些太详尽了，而缺乏剖析，这样显得论证停在表面上，最好在例子附近加以推理和分析。语言上很通顺，不过要是能丰富多变一些会更好。也许改的不够仔细，简单提些意见，这几天我耽误了很多我也很着急，有空去拍拍我的

龙非UID: 193190

首先，感谢两位的鼎力支持:D
其次，两位都提出了同样的问题
1)"So,去掉 scandals can be useful sometimes in political area."中的so用得不好
2)"Even so, the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored."用得太突兀
分析得都很好，俺照单全收。

龙非UID: 193190

to zhoulin：
对于语言，俺只能说有苦说不出，这是第一篇issue，明显感觉到自己的词汇匮乏，严重影响俺思想的表达，改了好久才有这个效果，苦～～。

龙非UID: 193190

to 吱吱：
将近一个星期没有碰着你，我还以为你失踪啦:D，我也潜了好久的水，今天才开始自己的issue。不要着急进度，顺其自然，同时要积极调整计划，不要因为现在的进度跟原计划不符就拼命赶，适得其反。
1)

Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced.这句有些不明白，请赐教

这句话回应题目，意思是在这两件丑闻之前，没有任何speaker和reformer提醒我们注意总统的不当行为。
2)B2对于例子的描述那么长是因为一方面这个例子并不是让人那么如雷灌耳，怕老米不知道，所以概要地介绍了一下，一方面是凑字数，嘿嘿:D，看来效果不是很理想
3)关于语言的建议，sigh，头疼。逻辑应该是俺的强项，但语言是偶的痛脚。。。有没有什么好的建议？我是准备通过背些文章但有没有得提高

龙非UID: 193190

厚着脸皮顶上来 :p，
参与大家同主题的讨论

goldenrockUID: 122870

Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealing [unrevealed] problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems which harm the public interest and focus public attention on them so that we can take some remedies and reform, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the happening again of this kind of problem. [语序不大对] In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increased the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. [280 :)] Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. So, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise. Similarly, after these scandals revealing [being revealed] , we enhanced [have enhanced] our supervision level to purify the academia. [没转则？] In the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. To some extent the academic scandals restrain the \"academic crime\". That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance. [挺不错的]

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role [roles] . After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Besides, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas. [例子真多]

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day [为什么分开？] , a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandal become headline news. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper. Even so [???] , the benefit of some scandals should not be ignored.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.


语言不行，例子挺好，有拼凑感，老外280太明显。
加油！！

帮我看看：
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=252164

ivyshoulUID: 195537

好多例子...都是查了记下來的么? 考试的时候遇到没准备过的怎么办. 用词有点可以修饰的感觉诶.
第一篇就这样很厉害啊,我是只求4分就可以了,呵呵

龙非UID: 193190

谢谢goldenrock的砖头

apolloxpUID: 156355

占座。明天有空就看

龙非UID: 193190

555,怎么大家都看俺的初始版本呀，本来因为它已消失在风雨中，就修改了发个同主题写作修改版，结果大家反而看这个了，sigh，修改版贴到下面吧。


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Nowadays, we are imparted all kinds of scandals in various areas such as politics, academia and other domains every day. Among these endless scandals, we find that some of them can be useful, which focus our attention on some unrevealed problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Scandals can reveal some unbeknown political problems that harm the public interest and lead to their solution. Because of the curiosity nature of mankind, scandals can focus public attention on the problems only after which are exposed to the sun can the public have possibility to take some remedies and reform to them, henceforth keep our weather eyes open to avoid the reemergence of this kind of problem. In this way, scandals exert their use. For supporting examples we need look no further than the Watergate cover-up with President Nixon. This scandal urged us to increase the level of scrutiny and accountability the public officials held to, thereby working a lasting benefit to our society. Also consider the Clinton-Gore fundraising scandal that sparked a call for campaign-finance reform of which our society will be the dear beneficiary. Surely, no public speaker and reformer could have called our attention to the president misconduct unless the two scandals had surfaced. Therefor, scandals can be useful sometimes in political area.

In academia, scandals can also expose many problems that we will neglect otherwise and help to purify the academia. Before, we all consider academia as immaculate realm, but along with the ever-happening academic scandals these recent years, we wake up to the problems so-called “academic crimes” and try to solve them. For instance, in the end of 2002, a panel of Bell labs found that one of their excellent scientist -- Jan Hendrik Schon, who had released more than one hundred papers on Science Journal and Nature Journal, guilty on 16 out of 24 charges of misconduct. When this finding was starting to filter through the physics community, The American Physical Society, for instance, had released a set of statements on professional conduct. Besides, the whole academia increased the level of scrutiny into academic papers. Without these scandals, we might never give our attention to the sort of “academic crime” and take some actions to prevent it. That is to say, scandals can be also useful in academic area under some circumstance.

Not only in politics and academia but also in most areas such as economy, sport, education and so forth, scandals have their role. After the Enron scandal and the WorldCom scandal, we gave our attention to “finance black hole” of corporations and found that many corporations had some finance problems more or less. The series of scandals leaded to the reform of the nation finance system. And the endless drug scandals of athletes remind us all the time that the anti-drug battle has not finished yet. Aside from those, the education briberies scandals in China focused the Chinese attention on the education system and resulted in an extensive reform of education. Because of the special effect on attracting public attention, scandals can be useful in many areas.

Admittedly, scandals might distract our attention from something we should care about indeed sometimes. Every day, a lot of scandals serve little useful purpose such as star-sex scandals become headline. These scandals do not result in any sort of useful reform and distract our attention from far more important issues such as peace, safety that are relegated to the second page of the newspaper.

In sum, although scandals sometimes will distract our attention, they can be useful whether in politics, academia, or other areas because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could so that we can solve these problems to some extend.