Issue64 第4篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！必回拍！！！

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Issue64  第4篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户        510 words

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Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it.
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Two things constitute a wonderful life to every people who would like to achieve their own goal in the world, attaining success and knowing how to take completely advantage of it. While this contention of speaker sounds plausible, I could not full support his statement at all. Because it is not a relaxed thing to grab the champion in hand, and not all will abuse the advantage they receive from the final.

As we all know, many factors, such as the ability, fortune, diligence even opportunity, are required in a process of success as the indispensable elements which might determinate destination you acquired or facilitate the process you experienced. Many good examples standing for my view are the Presidents Lincoln who prepared several times for a lawyer, then the governor of a state, and finally the president, an achievement of all American respected and admired for his unique experience from a child in poverty through self-struggle and his good characteristics, the generally acknowledged honest, diligence, clever, to become a great man in history who survive the whole nation from separating by the paradox attitude to slavery. What's more, another case involving the Chinese great man, CongZi, born in thousands years ago, not appreciated by the seven emperors, what they concerned about is the land, treasure, and labors, at that time in China, he merely advocated his theory in governing the country through mercy to people, rather than power, by walking to everywhere all through the continent. In spite the fact all the people honor him the greatest man, he still could not exert his theory at that time. Thus achieving a success would not be as easy as we designed in minds.

Another issue concerned about the using of achievements. A principle like many argued and I paraphrased shows: the more power you have, the more responsibility you take. Few entrepreneurs, high officers forgot this principle in this modern society, a society that a vast majority of people need help for lives and search for the opportunity to thrive.

However, numerous people who own the ability to offer a hand to others are willing to do so. Among them, Bill Gates, the owner of Microsoft in charge of the whole world through Window operations in computers, is the best example. After became a billionaire, he donated enormous of his prosperity to the society in the place where are need, such the medical research, poverty family, education, and so forth. And, of course, our society offers them this opportunity to do so and encourages the following to learn as a good example. It is a mature mechanism so that not only the lower might receive the opportunity to acquire skills for living in society, but also our entrepreneurs could be praised by government in exchange for better development.

To sum up, I would like to say that both sides are difficult to make if we do not put all efforts to try, after all, success is favorable goal to everyone. This deserves the people and society to think it together.

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我占下了，改完再发上来！！

这是我的新文章，请帮我看看，谢谢！！
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=252057 issue154
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Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the best use of it.
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Two things constitute a wonderful life to every people who would like to achieve their own goal in the world, attaining success and knowing how to take completely（我觉得不是completely 而是the best更好地） advantage of it. While this contention of speaker sounds plausible, I could not full support his statement at all. Because it is not a relaxed thing to grab the champion in hand, and not all will abuse the advantage they receive from the final.

As we all know, many factors, such as the ability, fortune, diligence even opportunity, are required in a process of success as the indispensable elements which might determinate destination you acquired or facilitate the process you experienced. Many good examples standing for my view are the Presidents Lincoln前部分好像有点不太通顺 who prepared several times for a lawyer, then the governor of a state, and finally the president, an achievement of all American respected and admired for his unique experience from a child in poverty through self-struggle and his good characteristics, the generally acknowledged honest, diligence, clever, to become a great man in history who survive the whole nation from separating by the paradox attitude to slavery. What's more, another case involving the Chinese great man, CongZi, born in thousands years ago, not appreciated by the seven emperors, what they concerned about is the land, treasure, and labors, at that time in China, he merely advocated his theory in governing the country through mercy to people, rather than power, by walking to everywhere all through the continent. In spite the fact all the people honor him the greatest man, he still could not exert his theory at that time. Thus achieving a success would not be as easy as we designed in minds.
这段写得不错，例子也挺好的。
Another issue concerned about the using of achievements. A principle like many argued and I paraphrased shows: the more power you have, the more responsibility you take. Few entrepreneurs, high officers forgot时态对吗 ？ this principle in this modern society, a society that （直接用which,行吗？ ） a vast majority of people need help for lives and search for the opportunity to thrive.

However, numerous people who own the ability to offer a hand to others are willing to do so. Among them, Bill Gates, the owner of Microsoft in charge of the whole world through Window operations in computers, is the best example. After became a billionaire, he donated enormous of his prosperity to the society in the place where are need, such the medical research, poverty family, education, and so forth. And, of course, our society offers them this opportunity to do so and encourages the following to learn as a good example. It is a mature mechanism so that not only the lower might receive the opportunity to acquire skills for living in society, but also our entrepreneurs could be praised by government in exchange for better development.

To sum up, I would like to say that both sides are difficult to make if we do not put all efforts to try, after all, success is favorable goal to everyone. This deserves the people and society to think it together.
写得不错，很有条理。

这是我的新文章，请帮我看看，谢谢！！
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread....threadid=252057 issue154
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread....threadid=252058 argu57