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Issue186  第n篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分17秒     434words
从2005年2月2日18时11分到2005年2月2日19时49分
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Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world.
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There is a growing public concern over practicality, the speaker in the title statement advocates that all powers and talents should serve the practicality. By contrast, some people may argue that we should also pay attention to unpractical things.  I am inclined to the later opinion.

To begin with, in this practical age, practicality has indeed become a great idol in every field of our life. A case in point is the use of computer. The first computer named ENIAC was invented in Feb.14.1964. Using areas of 1,500 square kilo feet, weighted 30 tons. This computer was rather an elephant than a machine. Experiencing four generations, today's computer can be made as small as the one put in one adult's palm. Therefore, the size of computer promoted the widely use of information technology and of course more practical. The same examples include the betterment of light lamp, telephone, automobile and the like. Practicality improved the standard of our daily life, thus improving our efficiency of working and studying. If the implements around us were all unpractical but ponderous, then we probably wouldn't live in such a comfortable and convenience life today.

Meanwhile, unpractical things are not necessarily useless, in some sense, they play a significant role in human development. Let us take science for example, while scientific theory and technology can not be immediately put into practice, we should never undermine their values in that neither the possibility of putting them into practice in later time nor the interconnection between these theories and technology can be rule out. The early steam engine was laughed at by many people since it is heavy and insufficient. After Watt refined the steam engine, it can used in every field of industry. This illustrate these so-called unpractical things may turn out to be practical someday. Even if they never turn to be practicality, one still cannot regard it as little value. ChengJingrun's contribution to mathematics serves as a typical example. People called him madman because he worked on calculation day and night, and it useless for making no food, drink and money. But ChenJingrun prove the suppose of Goethe Bach and became world famous. Even if the number '1+1=2' was absolutely no use, his spirits of persistence and tolerance have influenced us profoundly.

To sum up, the practicality and impracticality both affect our society profoundly and mutually, thus we can not put either of them aside in order to pay more attention to another. Both of them should be served with powers and talents, and it is unfair to say unpractical things have little value in today's world.
总算限时成功，但字数少了，不知道有没有4分？

hardbeaverUID: 197443

------题目------
Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world.
------正文------
There is a growing public concern over practicality, the speaker in the title statement advocates that all powers and talents should serve the practicality. By contrastcontrarily, some people may argue that we should also pay attention to unpractical things. I am inclined to the laterlatter opinion.

To begin with, in this practical age, practicality has indeed become a great idol in every field of our life. A case in point is the use of computer. The first computer named ENIAC was invented in Feb.14.1964. Usingtaking areas of 1,500 square kilo feets, weighted 30 tons. This computer was rather an elephant than a machine. Experiencing four generations, today's computer can be made as small as the one put in one adult's palm. Therefore, the size of computer promoted the widely use of information technology and of course more practical. The same examples include the betterment of light lamp, telephone, automobile and the like. Practicality improved the standard of our daily life, thus improving our efficiency of working and studying. If the implements around us were all unpractical but ponderous, then we probably wouldn'twould not live indelete such a comfortable and convenience life today.

Meanwhile, unpractical things are not necessarily useless, in some sense, they play a significant role in human development. Let us take science for example, while scientific theory and technology can not be immediately put into practice, we should never undermineunderestimate their values in that neither the possibility of putting them into practice in later time nor the interconnection between these theories and technology can be ruled out. The early steam engine was laughed at by many people since it is heavy and insufficient. After Watt refined the steam engine蒸汽机是瓦特发明的吧, it canbe used in every field of industry. This illustrates these so-called unpractical things may turn out to be practical someday. Even if they never turn to be practicality, one still cannot regard it as little value. ChengJingrun's contribution to mathematics serves as a typical example. People called him madman because he worked on calculation day and night, and itis useless for making nodelete food, drink and money. But ChenJingrun prove the suppose of Goethe Bach and became world famous. Even if the numberequation '1+1=2' was absolutely no use, his spirits of persistence and tolerance have influenced us profoundly.

To sum up, the practicality and impracticality both affect our society profoundly and mutually, thus we can not put either of them aside in order to pay more attention to another. Both of them should be served with powers and talents, and it is unfair to say unpractical things have little value in today's world.
总算限时成功，但字数少了，不知道有没有4分？
论点清晰明确，例子合适，比较条理，但小错误多了一些。
45分钟已经很不错了，字数少吗，那你准备写多少字，500？
继续加油！！

龙非UID: 193190

挖个坑，待会填。

指向大海UID: 158737

谢谢二楼，把你的文章发给我我回改

蒸气机不是瓦特发明的哦！是无名氏，但瓦特改良了才能用于工业的

指向大海UID: 158737

不希望这么快就沉呢，自己顶

rsrsUID: 146479

自己也刚写过这篇呢，来拍拍:P
条理分明，论述集中，赞
有些关于例子的意见：
不知道老美是否熟悉陈景润，而且他证明的是1+2不是1+1
我觉得这个例子本身没有体现unpractical things 的重要性，如果说明一下这个problem是困扰数学家N久的著名的哥德巴赫猜想，无数天才的数学家为它鞠躬尽瘁死而后已。陈景润证明1+2之后，引得中国无数优秀的青少年投身数学事业，那么这个例子就显出unpractical things 的value了；而且字数也多起来了
还有就是你说every field,但无论正面例子还是反面例子都集中在科学领域。这样似乎稍欠力度
我现在还没有开始限时写啊，感觉如果要把一个题目充分展开考虑全面的话的确要写500+,但是可能45分钟内搞定还是太难。你还有不到两周考呢，+U啦

zhangqiang928UID: 188538

昨天有点忙，贴晚了晚见谅
There is a growing public concern over practicality, the speaker in the title statement advocates that all powers and talents should serve the practicality. By contrast, some people may argue that we should also pay attention to unpractical things. I am inclined to the later opinion.

To begin with, in this practical age, practicality has indeed become a great idol in every field of our life. A case in point is the use of computer. The first computer named ENIAC was invented in Feb.14.1964. Using areas of 1,500 square kilo feet, weighted 30 tons. This computer was rather an elephant than a machine. Experiencing four generations, today's computer can be made as small as the onething put in onean adult's palm. Therefore, the size of computer promoted the widelyfar-flung use of information technology and of course is more practical. The same examples include the betterment of light lamp, telephone, automobile and the like. Practicality improved the standard of our daily life, thus去掉好不好 improving our efficiency of working and studying. If the implements around us were all unpractical but ponderous, then we probably wouldn't live in such a comfortable and convenience life today.
这如果建一段：If all powers and talents serve the practicality will lead to go extreme. Take the realty for example, with the development of the society we need more building. But if we put all powers and talents to build house, which will lead to invest badly…….

Meanwhile, unpractical things are not necessarily useless, in some sense, they play a significant role in human development. Let us take science for example, while scientific theory and technology can not be immediately put into practice, we should never undermine their values in that neither the possibility of putting them into practice in later time nor the interconnection between these theories and technology can be rule out.ruled out The early steam engine was laughed at by many people since it is heavy and insufficient. After Watt refined the steam engine, it can used in every field of industry. This illustrate these so-called unpractical things may turn out to be practical someday. Even if they never turn to be practicality, one still cannot regard it as little value. ChengJingrun's contribution to mathematics serves as a typical example. People called him madman because he worked on calculation day and night, and it useless for making no food, drink and money. But ChenJingrun prove the suppose of Goethe Bach and became world famous. Even if the number '1+1=2' was absolutely no use, his spirits of persistence and tolerance have influenced us profoundly.

To sum up, the practicality and impracticality both affect our society profoundly and mutually, thus we can not put either of them aside in order to pay more attention to another. Both of them should be served with powers and talents, and it is unfair to say unpractical things have little value in today's world.
总算限时成功，但字数少了，不知道有没有4分？

这是一道类似：当务之急于百年大计的题
关于百年大计的论点还可以举一些关于交通和资源的例子
第一个论点好
我的语言功底比你差远了，羡慕！
还有就是如果不加一段论述的话，就是你赞成一半，反对一半了，对支持你的论点不利
一点薄见：）



有时间帮我看一下这篇新写得https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=251898