Issue 136初来，问好！发个issue，请批！

walterechoUID: 198230

136, choice is an illusion. In reality, our lives are controlled by the society in which we live.

Whether the choice and individual responsibility are merely illusions or meaningful to people’s life lies as a controversy among the issues of modernity. It is true that in many cases one’s life is determined by other forces from the circumstances than individuality, yet, by self-consciousness and subjectivity and other human abilities, individuals can be independent to some degree from the society and other outside forces, and correspondingly control their life by making their own choice and be responsible for their actions.
        Admittedly, individual life is considered to be controlled by social forces especially in modern times, though in modernity the individuality is a dominant concept. The conditions “we are thrown into”, as Heidegger infers, have been established long before we become aware of them, and in many situations, it is difficult to be aware of the fact that the social circumstances place huge impact on us and even to change the circumstances. A person grows up, goes to university, and begins professional life, seemingly due to the choices she makes by her own. But this is a fiction. She grows up under the influences from her family, community and nationality, and the decisions of choosing colleges and jobs are largely limited in the scale of her social class, backgrounds and identities. Hence, the modern society that stresses the freedom and responsibility of individuals is actually controlled the life of people while providing them the illusion of choice.
        Moreover, the tendency of “the fear of freedom”, discovered by psychologist Fromm, is also widespread in modern life. Many people, though claiming that they are self-reliable, try subconsciously to escape from the freedom of choice and responsibility. Unwilling to take responsibility, they believe that the outside world is much powerful, the future is unknowable, as a result of the changeful overwhelming modern complexity, and resort to the social forces to control their life and accept the arrangement of “fate” and “destiny”. The examples of this kind of people are everywhere in reality. They prefer absence of choice, and, as a movie says, they “choose the life of no choice”. Accordingly, the society in which people live acts a more significant role to govern and dominate their life.
        However, the life determined by social forces, as Plato indicates, is the life of “a blind one living in cave”, which is common yet not desirable. Numerous thinkers of Western culture tradition hold the faith that the individual, by reaching self-consciousness, can be the true owner of her life. Self-consciousness distinguishes humans from animals controlled by outside drives. With it, human individuals become able to choose, to change, to make things different, and this ability, as a meaningful force of humanity, should not be under-evaluated. Almost all the progresses of humans are attributable to this ability, and the individual accomplishments large due to it. For example, Socrates made decision not to escape from the unfair death sentence placed on him in order to shoulder the responsibility as a citizen and to fulfill his ideas, in which hardly can it be concluded that taking responsibility for one’s 0wn life is illusory, and, this choice have showed the truly profound value of individual independence and responsibility.
        Further, to search, know and understand the inside “ego” and outside reality is the excluded ability and right of humans, in which lies the self-affirmation. Though it is difficult to live this way, it is favorable at least spiritually. Similarly, though the conditions individuals live in are preexistent, individuals can try to be aware of them thereby arriving at the independence of choice to some extent. Even when in the circumstances you can not change, your choice can be meaningful. Many Jew intellectuals put into prison by Nazi wrote down the words saying that in prison you can also choose to live seriously and positively, you can also live responsible life with human faith, because the self-consciousness is the path to self-affirmation, in which the personal responsibility become possible.
        Finally, this self-affirmation, if achieved through self-consciousness, can not only put individual responsibility and the true freedom to live into reality, but urge the individual to make their decisions according to the circumstances, and make efforts to turn these circumstances into better ones as well. Many illuminating examples have illustrated that one can change her fate and exceed the limitation and arrangement made by the society she lives in. Numerous African American strike for human rights and make efforts for individual success, and it is proved that they change their conditions and even history. Human individuals, thus, are creators of history in many situations, not only the slaves of the reality.
        To summarize, there exists two categories of individual tendencies: the individuals of subjectivity and the individuals of passivity. The latter tendency indicates the truth that individuals are large limited and dominated by other forces than themselves, yet the former tendency reinforce the human dignity and prove that choice is not necessarily a illusion and the individual responsibility can be reached and act as a major force of both humanity and individual life.

davidjackyUID: 135962

第一，和别人结队改文章

第二，注意发贴格式

walterechoUID: 198230

多谢提醒！以后会注意。
能否就这篇给点具体意见。再谢。

davidjackyUID: 135962

最初由 walterecho 发布
[B]多谢提醒！以后会注意。
能否就这篇给点具体意见。再谢。 [/B]

文章写的可以了，只是开头太浓了，有很大的压缩空间，另外，注意论证的层次和深度，有些拼写错误自己检查一下，抱歉，最近斑竹都在忙同主题写作的事情，希望你也能参与这个活动

晨曦UID: 177893

如果没人看，试试看多改两篇别人的，既是借鉴学习，也是熟悉人口，才能有人来帮你呢。

作文论坛强调的是互动，而不是义务啦。认真就会有进步哦，不管是改别人的还是写自己的

偶是局外人，说这个话可能方便些。勿见怪。错了算我的。

PS:可以利用页面下方的工具条来找 0回复 的文章的 —— 按照 “回复数量” 以 “降序” 排列......

walterechoUID: 198230

多谢大家！前几天由于学校原因，未上来。也希望多和大家，交流。另：精华区里东西真是给我不小帮助。

medwinUID: 189909

Whether the choice and individual responsibility are merely illusions or meaningful to people’s life lies as is a controversy among the issues of modernity. It is true that in many cases one’s life is determined by other forces from the circumstances than individuality, yet, by self-consciousness and subjectivity and other human abilities, individuals can be independent to some degree from the society and other outside forces, and correspondingly control their life by making their own choice choices and be responsible for their actions.

Admittedly, individual life is considered to be controlled by social forces especially in modern times, though in modernity the individuality is a dominant concept. The conditions “we are thrown into”, as Heidegger infers, have been established long before we become aware of them, and in many situations, it is difficult to be aware of the fact that the social circumstances place huge impact on us and even to change the circumstances后半句没看懂. A person grows up, goes to university, and begins professional life, seemingly due to the choices she makes by her own. But this is a fiction. She grows up under the influences from her family, community and nationality, and the decisions of choosing colleges and jobs are largely limited in the scale of her social class, backgrounds and identities. Hence, the modern society that stresses the freedom and responsibility这个文章没有提到 of individuals is actually controlled controlling the life of people while providing them the illusion of choice.我们有时受制于外界，无选择

Moreover, the tendency of “the fear of freedom”, discovered by psychologist Fromm, is also widespread in modern life. Many people, though claiming that they are self-reliable, try subconsciously to escape from the freedom of choice and responsibility. Unwilling to take responsibility, they believe that the outside world is much powerful, the future is unknowable, as a result of the changeful and overwhelming modern complexity, and resort to the social forces to control their life and accept the arrangement of “fate” and “destiny”. The examples of this kind of people are everywhere in reality. They prefer absence of choice, and, as a movie says, they “choose the life of no choice”. Accordingly, the society in which people live acts a more significant role to govern and dominate their life.我们有时候安于这种无选择

However, the life determined by social forces, as Plato indicates, is the life of “a blind one living in cave”, which is common yet not desirable. Numerous thinkers of Western culture tradition hold the faith that the individual, by reaching self-consciousness, can be the true owner of her life. Self-consciousness distinguishes humans from animals controlled by outside drives. With it, human individuals become able to choose, to change, to make things different, and this ability, as a meaningful force of humanity, should not be under-evaluated. Almost all the progresses of humans are attributable to this ability, and the individual accomplishments large 一般用largely吧 due to it. For example, Socrates made decision not to escape from the unfair death sentence placed on him in order to shoulder the responsibility as a citizen and to fulfill his ideas, in which hardly can it be concluded that taking responsibility for one’s 0wn life is illusory, and, this choice have showed the truly profound value of individual independence and responsibility. 自我意识的重要性

Further, to search, know and understand the inside “ego” and outside reality is the excluded ability and right of humans, in which lies the self-affirmation.这个主体好像绕远了吧 Though it is difficult to live this way, it is favorable at least spiritually. Similarly, though the conditions individuals live in are preexistent, individuals can try to be aware of them thereby arriving at the independence of choice to some extent. Even when in the circumstances you can not change, your choice can be meaningful. Many Jew intellectuals put into prison by Nazi wrote down the words saying that in prison you can also choose to live seriously and positively, you can also live responsible life with human faith, because the self-consciousness is the path to self-affirmation, in which the personal responsibility become possible.外界条件不能完全限制个人选择的自由

Finally, this self-affirmation, if achieved through self-consciousness, can not only put individual responsibility and the true freedom to live into reality, but urge the individual to make their decisions according to the circumstances, and make efforts to turn these circumstances into better ones as well. Many illuminating examples have illustrated that one can change her fate and exceed the limitation and arrangement made by the society she lives in. Numerous African American strike for human rights and make efforts for individual success, and it is proved that they change their conditions and even history. Human individuals, thus, are creators of history in many situations, not only the slaves of the reality.个人选择对外界的反作用

To summarize, there exists two categories of individual tendencies: the individuals of subjectivity and the individuals of passivity. The latter tendency indicates the truth that individuals are large limited and dominated by other forces than themselves, yet the former tendency reinforce the human dignity and prove that choice is not necessarily a illusion and the individual responsibility can be reached and act as a major force of both humanity and individual life
本文语言好的不必说，引用哲人的观点很准确，对问题思考的深入也令人佩服。
个人认为第四段不够集中，说个人意识的重要性其实就是在强调个人选择，而它在后面两段都有论述。另外这一段的例子Socrates似乎更侧重个人责任。诚然，个人选择和个人责任有很强的联系，但我个人觉得，可以从现代人强调没有选择从而逃避责任来论述。