Issue185 第1篇issue 555要来不及了怎么办，必回拍

chinhoiUID: 173262

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471 words
主要论点：同意丑闻能引起人们的注意，但是否真的有用，引用人们注意的问题是否深刻，则分情况而论

第一篇，所以超时n多也就放任自己了，尽量想写好些，于是边查google边写，汗
感觉限时肯定更加不知道怎么写
还有20多天要考了，不知道来得及不，唉
拍砖者请留下自己作文链接～

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Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
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I agree with the speaker that scandals in all areas can be used to draw our attention that speaker and reformer rarely can.  Public are always more interested in scandals than in normal events.  However, are scandals always useful in a good way, or do they focus our attention on problems that are really valuable?  This, as I will discuss below, varies from case to case.

On the one hand, scandals help reveal problems that we can rarely recognize otherwise and make the public be more aware of them.  They can disclose the truth, usually unknown to public, to help us to perceive the real world more insightfully from another perspective.  In politics, after the Gateway Case and the Clinton scandal, both exposed the presidents' immoral side to the public, we begin to be more aware that although total honesty is impossible for politicians, and even sometimes will be harmful for the country, leaders of a nation still have to conform to some basic moral standards.  The same is true in athletics.  Over years, the Olympic Games have been correlated to drug.  The inharmonic sound of drug kept playing throughout the whole Sydney's Olympic, and drug scandal began even before the Athens’s Olympic itself.  People start to meditate on the meaning of Olympics.  When winning, no matter what means has been taken to attain it, has become the only goal, does the original aims of Olympics, which is to challenge the limit of human beings, to promote friendship between countries, to display the beauty of sports and competition, still exist?  Similar cases prevail in academia, economics, and other areas.  As it stands, Scandals are useful to focus our attention on problems we can never notice by speaker or reformer.

On the other hand, scandals also distract our attentions to some untrue facts and sometimes even confound right and wrong.  Nowadays, entertainment news is flooded with scandals of the stars.  It has even been a rule that before a star releases his new movie or new album, there must be scandals about his privacy to draw people's attention and thus to attract them to watch the movie or purchase the CD.  These scandals are useful only to make profit, but by no means can call public's attention to problems that matter.  The same situation occurs before the election.  Large numbers of scandals, many with fake information, prevent people from making wise decisions, and from telling between the truth and the falseness.  These kinds of scandals, rather than to be useful, have been made use by some people to gain their own benefits.  

In sum, scandals do have the power to raise people's attention, usually not possessed by speaker or reformer.  Nevertheless, whether the scandal can be useful or raise valuable questions depends on whether the scandal itself reveals true and insightful facts.

chinhoiUID: 173262

看了下同主题的总结
果然，对于no speaker or reformer ever could的回应很重要
一开始审题不够啊
后来写着写着发现了这个问题，也改不过来了
最后只好在开头捎带一句算是敷衍一下
看了审题还是最重要啊

davidjackyUID: 135962

471 words
主要论点：同意丑闻能引起人们的注意，但是否真的有用，引用人们注意的问题是否深刻，则分情况而论

第一篇，所以超时n多也就放任自己了，尽量想写好些，于是边查google边写，汗
感觉限时肯定更加不知道怎么写
还有20多天要考了，不知道来得及不，唉
拍砖者请留下自己作文链接～

------题目------
Scandals—whether in politics, academia, or other areas—can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
------正文------
I agree with the speaker that scandals in all areas can be used to draw our attention that speaker and reformer rarely can. Public are always more interested in scandals than in normal events. However, are scandals always useful in a good way, or do they focus our attention on problems that are really valuable? This, as I will discuss below, varies from case to case.

On the one hand, scandals help reveal problems that we can rarely recognize otherwise and make the public be more aware of them. They can disclose the truth, usually unknown to public, to help us to perceive the real world more insightfully from another perspective[【这句话是不是有些问题，因为不揭示scandals是不会有more insightfully的说法，而且从another perspective，是不是这样？】]. In politics, after the Gateway Case and the Clinton scandal, both exposed the presidents' immoral side to the public, we begin to be more aware that although total honesty is impossible for politicians, and even sometimes will be harmful for the country, leaders of a nation still have to conform to some basic moral standards. The same is true in athletics. Over years, the Olympic Games have been correlated to[shade by] drug. The inharmonic[【unharmonious】] sound of drug kept playing throughout the whole Sydney's Olympic, and drug scandal began even before the Athens’s Olympic itself. People start to meditate on the meaning of Olympics. When winning, no matter what means has been taken to attain it, has become the only goal, does the original aims of Olympics, which is to challenge the limit of human beings, to promote friendship between countries, to display the beauty of sports and competition, still exist? Similar cases prevail in academia, economics, and other areas. As it stands, Scandals are useful to focus our attention on problems we can never notice by speaker or reformer.

On the other hand, scandals also distract our attentions to some untrue facts and sometimes even confound right and wrong. Nowadays, entertainment news is flooded with scandals of the stars. It has even been a rule that before a star releases his new movie or new album, there must be scandals about his privacy to draw people's attention and thus to attract them to watch the movie or purchase the CD. These scandals are useful only to make profit, but by no means can call public's attention to problems that matter. The same situation occurs before the election. Large numbers of scandals, many with fake information, prevent people from making wise decisions, and from telling between the truth and the falseness. These kinds of scandals, rather than to be useful, have been made use by some people to gain their own benefits.

In sum, scandals do have the power to raise people's attention, usually not possessed by speaker or reformer. Nevertheless, whether the scandal can be useful or raise valuable questions depends on whether the scandal itself reveals true and insightful facts.

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zhangqiang928UID: 188538

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I agree with the speaker that scandals in all areas can be used to draw our attention that speaker and reformer rarely can. Public are always more interested in scandals than in normal events. However, are scandals always useful in a good way, or do they focus our attention on problems that are really valuable? This, as I will discuss below, varies from case to case.看的出来是不同意，可没说是什么呵呵！

On the one hand, scandals help reveal problems that we can rarely recognize otherwise and make the public be more aware of them. They can disclose the truth, usually unknown to public, to help us to perceive the real world more insightfully from another perspective. In politics, after the Gateway Case and the Clinton scandal, both exposed the presidents' immoral side to the public, we begin to be more aware that although total honesty is impossible for politicians, and even sometimes will be harmful for the country, leaders of a nation still have to conform to some basic moral standards. The same is true in athletics. Over years, the Olympic Games have been correlated to drug. The inharmonic sound of drug kept playing throughout the whole Sydney's Olympic, and drug scandal began even before the Athens’s Olympic itself. People start to meditate on the meaning of Olympics. When winning, no matter what means has been taken to attain it, has become the only goal, does the original aims of Olympics, which is to challenge the limit of human beings, to promote friendship between countries, to display the beauty of sports and competition, still exist? Similar cases prevail in academia, economics, and other areas. As it stands, Scandals are useful to focus our attention on problems we can never notice by speaker or reformer.

On the other hand, scandals also distract our attentions to some untrue facts and sometimes even confound right and wrong. Nowadays, entertainment news is flooded with scandals of the stars. It has even been a rule that before a star releases his new movie or new album, there must be scandals about his privacy to draw people's attention and thus to attract them to watch the movie or purchase the CD. These scandals are useful only to make profit, but by no means can call public's attention to problems that matter. The same situation occurs before the election. Large numbers of scandals, many with fake information, prevent people from making wise decisions, and from telling between the truth and the falseness. These kinds of scandals, rather than to be useful, have been made use by some people to gain their own benefits.

In sum, scandals do have the power to raise people's attention, usually not possessed by speaker or reformer. Nevertheless, whether the scandal can be useful or raise valuable questions depends on whether the scandal itself reveals true and insightful facts.

赞斑竹的说法，我说一下文章的结构，看了侯觉得加一些过渡的语言会好一点的
不是论证不充分而是却连词和总结性的语言
如：第一段加上明确的观点，就是提纲中说的那句，可能会感觉好一点，
还有结尾也有点问题，
总而言之：一句话 缺一个核心的观点，不能引领全文


我改过了这篇才看到你让我改的不是这篇，明天有时间给你补上