Issue50 高频 教育类

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

50,In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.
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There is a prevailing discuss existing in contemporary society that in order to improve the quality of instruction,whether it is a wise choice for the college and university to require all their faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. In my point of view,it is better for the faculty to spend some time working outside the academic but in professions relevant properly.

To begin with,through working in relevant professions,the faculty are able to promote their ability.As it is known to all that knowledge from books merely is rather different from practical experience.A sound example is that according to the Chinese history,during the Spring-Autumn period,in the kingdom of Zhao,there was a Mr Zhao Kuo,a son of a famous general,who had read a large number of books on military,was proud of himself in that whoever talked with him about military could not surpass him.Consequently,after his father'death,he took  over and become a general.However,when he came to command the real war,what he had learned from the books was not useful enough  in practice and thereby,he lost the war and also his and thousands of soldiers’ lives.The story suggests that there is a distance from book to the application. Only through practice can one solve the problems with the knowledge from the books.   

In the second place,being taught by a teacher with a large quantity of working experience is beneficial for the students.Because having done much work of the relevant courses,the teacher will get a deeper and more practical understanding,the students will,therefore,receive a kind of knowledge which is much closer for the need of the contemporary society,my professors included.Every time they show us what they have studied for the companies outside,the students will not only reveal an apparent interest but also have a better understanding of the knowledge from the books.In conclusion,it is good for the students' studying if their teachers have much practical experience.

On the other hand,spending too much time working rather than teaching will to some extent weaken the quality of instruction.Almost every teacher with a great responsibility will spend a lot of time preparing.However,if they have to do much work while teaching,their attention will be obviously attracted.As a result,teachers should arrange their time properly in order to have both their own ability and the teaching quality improved.

To sum up,to pursue a more excellent quality of instruction,the faculty could be required to practice some new steps,with the guarantee of the contemporary satisfaction of the students.

kkytUID: 188814

好,偶也在准备教育类

kkytUID: 188814

50,In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.
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There is a prevailing discuss existing in contemporary society that in order to improve the quality of instruction, whether it is a wise choice for the college and university to require all their faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. In my point of view, it is better for the faculty to spend some time working outside the academic but in professions relevant properly.

To begin with, through working in relevant professions, the faculty are [is] able to promote their ability. As it is known to all that knowledge from books merely is rather different from practical experience. A sound example is that according to the Chinese history, during the Spring-Autumn period, in the kingdom of Zhao, there was a Mr Zhao Kuo, a son of a famous general, who had read a large number of books on military, was proud of himself in that whoever talked with him about military could not surpass him. Consequently, after his father's death, he took over and become a general. However, when he came to command the real war, what he had learned from the books was not useful enough in practice and there by, he lost the war and also his and thousands of soldiers’ lives. The story suggests that there is a distance from book to the application. Only through practice can one solve the problems with the knowledge from the books. [少了一点，最重要的，老师能力增加的目的是什么？In order to improve the quality of instruction 使学生更贴近社会]

In the second place, being taught by a teacher with a large quantity of working experience is beneficial for the students .Because having done much work of the relevant courses, the teacher will get a deeper and more practical understanding, the students will,[什么意思？] therefore, receive[receiving] a kind of knowledge which is much closer for the need of the contemporary society, my professors[这个句子有问题] included. Every time they show us what they have studied for the companies outside, the students will not only reveal an apparent interest but also have a better understanding of the knowledge from the books. In conclusion, it is good for the students' studying if their teachers have much practical experience.

On the other hand, spending too much time working rather than teaching will to some extent weaken the quality of instruction. Almost every teacher with a great responsibility will spend a lot of time preparing [their classes]. However, if they have to do much work while teaching, their attention will be obviously attracted. As a result[结果？应该是因此吧], teachers should arrange their time properly in order to have both their own ability and the teaching quality improved.

To sum up, to pursue a more excellent quality of instruction, the faculty could [should] be required to practice some new steps, with the guarantee of the contemporary satisfaction of the students.
[全文总体还可以，思路挺清晰的从老师，学生两方面展开的]

goldenrockUID: 122870

There is a prevailing discuss existing in contemporary society that in order to improve the quality of instruction,whether it is a wise choice for the college and university to require all their faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. In my point of view,it is better for the faculty to spend some time working outside the academic but in professions relevant properly.

To begin with,through working in relevant professions,the faculty are able to promote their ability.As it is known to all that knowledge from books merely is rather different from practical experience.A sound example is that according to the Chinese history,during the Spring-Autumn period,in the kingdom of Zhao,there was a Mr Zhao Kuo,a son of a famous general,who had read a large number of books on military,was proud of himself in that whoever talked with him about military could not surpass him.Consequently,after his father'death,he took over and become a general.However,when he came to command the real war,what he had learned from the books was not useful enough in practice and thereby,he lost the war and also his and thousands of soldiers’ lives.The story suggests that there is a distance from book to the application. Only through practice can one solve the problems with the knowledge from the books.
[这一段有点偏，用在学生要参加课外活动的例子中更好一些，放在这儿没说明quality of instruction为什么会提高，而且老师的ability提高并不一定quality of instruction也会提高，还有可能影响教学。]
In the second place,being taught by a teacher with a large quantity of working experience is beneficial for the students.Because having done much work of the relevant courses,the teacher will get a deeper and more practical understanding,the students will,therefore,receive a kind of knowledge which is much closer for the need of the contemporary society,my professors included.Every time they show us what they have studied for the companies outside,the students will not only reveal an apparent interest but also have a better understanding of the knowledge from the books.In conclusion,it is good for the students' studying if their teachers have much practical experience.
[这段还不错]
On the other hand,spending too much time working rather than teaching will to some extent weaken the quality of instruction.Almost every teacher with a great responsibility will spend a lot of time preparing.However,if they have to do much work while teaching,their attention will be obviously attracted.As a result,teachers should arrange their time properly in order to have both their own ability and the teaching quality improved.

To sum up,to pursue a more excellent quality of instruction,the faculty could be required to practice some new steps,with the guarantee of the contemporary satisfaction of the students.

总体感觉，语言还不是太fluent,
我觉得可以驳一下all faculty。

请帮我看看issue185

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

谢谢各位的帮助，一起努力吧！

bluebirdcstonyUID: 197396

不好意思,我不会变颜色


Issue50 高频　教育类
50,In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.
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There is a prevailing [discuss]是动词，改[discussion] existing in contemporary society that in order to improve the quality of instruction, whether it is a wise choice for the college and university to require all their faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach. In my point of view, it is better for the faculty to spend some time working outside the academic but in professions relevant properly.

To begin with, through working in relevant professions, the faculty are这好像主谓不太对，还是我自己错了？ able to promote their ability. As it is known to all that knowledge from books merely [感觉MERELY是放FROM 前边的]is rather different from practical experience. A sound example is that according to the Chinese history, during the Spring-Autumn period, in the kingdom of Zhao, there was [a Mr Zhao Kuo]可以这样说吗？感觉怪怪的, a son of a famous general, who had read a large number of books on military, [AND]was proud of himself in that whoever talked with him about military could not surpass him. Consequently, after his father' death, he took over [his position] and become a general. However, when he came to command the real war, what he had learned from the books was not useful enough in practice and thereby, he lost the war and also his and thousands of soldiers’ lives. The story suggests that there is a distance from book to the 把THE去掉可以吗？application. Only through practice can one solve the problems with the knowledge from the books.

In the second place, being taught by a teacher with a large quantity of working experience is beneficial for the students. Because having done much work of the relevant courses, the teacher will get a deeper and more practical understanding, the students will, therefore, receive a kind of knowledge which is much closer [for]CLOSER后边不是跟TO吗？ the need of the contemporary society, my professors included. Every time they show us what they have studied for the companies outside, the students will not only reveal an apparent interest but also have a better understanding这个好像不能显示啊？ of the knowledge from the books. In conclusion, it is good for the students' studying [还是用STUDY？]if their teachers have much practical experience.

On the other hand, spending too much time [加ON]working rather than teaching will to some extent weaken the quality of instruction. Almost every teacher with a great[不知道责任可不可以用GREAT修饰] responsibility will spend a lot of time preparing. However, if they have to do much work while teaching, their attention will be obviously attracted. As a result, 有因果关系吗？teachers should arrange their time 感觉你前边意思是想说让老师不能在外做太多工作，后边又说要安排好时间，如果工作很多怎么安排都不行啊properly in order to have both their own ability and the teaching quality improved.

To sum up, to pursue a more excellent quality of instruction, the faculty could be required to practice some new steps, with the guarantee of the contemporary satisfaction of the students.

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深谷幽兰UID: 196550

最初由 bluebirdcstony 发布
[B]不好意思,我不会变颜色

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谢谢拍砖！

变色很简单：回贴时，上方有一彩色工具条，先将鼠标放在要你要输入文字的地方，然后在你选中的色彩处点一下，就会出现类似“{color=#0000ff}{/color}”的控制符（实际上{}是[]），你在"] ["之间输入文字就可以了。

r0tUID: 202195

After a general view, it seems to me that several points weaken your issue should be mentioned.

First, the following paragraphs do not serve as a good response to your beginning paragraph. In other word, in your topic paragraph, there should be some brief sentences that indicate what you are going to argue next. However, in fact you just restated the author's claim and simply expressed your stance.

Second, I think involving a chinese examples is not a good illustration. After all, ETS are all square head and know nothing about chinese culture. Thus, no one can ensure you that they really know what you said. Consider more western instances.

Last but not least, I am afraid your sentences severely suffer from lacking of a diversity of form and vocabulary. Try to rote some model issues and templates would might benefits you a lot.