issue36 同主题 超时9分钟,改了拼写错误

ivyshoulUID: 195537

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The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.
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When we look back into the history, we'll see lots of examples of great figures being misunderstood by their contemporaries. Sometimes people may not judge the greatness of individuals of their same age. Moreover, bearing a historical view, posterities may evaluate the greatness of their forefathers more systematically and precisely. However, the speaker goes too far to an extreme in the statement that the greatness of individuals cannot be decided by their contemporaries, which I think is not the case.

In some situations, the greatness of some superior talented, genius people may far beyond common people's imagination and eyesight. They may achieve accomplishments far beyond their time. History like this mostly frequently repeats in the science and art field. When Einstein firstly published the relativity, few people understand him and even this small proportion cannot imagine how the theory has affected modern society. The great Chinese literate Cao Xue Qin wrote the "A Dream of the Red Mansions", a major masterpiece of high value highly admired by latter people, back in the Qing Dynasty hundreds of years ago. However, few people of his time had noticed how great his great work was and even fewer people had heard of it. The great literate was end up in poverty.

Further, we also see in history that due to the specific condition of certain times, some great people were intentionally debased by a few powerful persons and were greatly ill treated by the uncultivated public. Back in middle age Europe, while religion dominated the majority, the great achievements of scientists and other individuals against theology were intentionally made heterodoxy by the rulers, thus most people treat them as witches or demented freaks. There is no hope for the great figures of that severe time to be judged fairly by their contemporaries.

Additionally, as some thoughts and ideas of the great ones are so great that though people of the same age regarded them as galaxy, they are still not fully admired to the extent they deserved. Again in Ancient China, there once was a great man named Sun-Tzu whose great Art of War are highly admired by modern people. Nowadays not only in the pure military field but also in economy, business and other fields people find that his military theory is very practical. However, back to his own time, he was mainly admired as a great captain and his contemporaries people had no idea how great he was as a thinker and that his Art of War was not only applicable in battle fields.

Although I deem that latter people may do a better judgment of the greatness of individual, I cannot concede that people cannot rightly decide the greatness of the noble figures of their same time. There are achieves of some great people that can be easily perceived by common people of the same time. For instance, President Mao of China is admired as one of the greatest political leader of China and the main founder of the PRC. He successfully led his people through wars and pains and showed them the light of a new independent life. Other great political leaders as well as uncultivated peasants of his nation in his time spared their praises and admirations of this great man.

TO sum up, in some situation, people may not well understand the greatness of individuals of the same age while the later generation could fulfill the request. But still they have the ability to judge the greatness of some galaxy rightly based on their knowledge and experiences.

xuding_godUID: 179213

占坐,明天回你,你也替我看看呢

龙非UID: 193190

嘿嘿，同学，俺来占位子啦。

龙非UID: 193190

When we look back into the history, we'll see lots of examples of great figures being misunderstood by their contemporaries. Sometimes people may not judge the greatness of individuals of their same age. Moreover, bearing a historical view, posterities may evaluate the greatness of their forefathers more systematically and precisely. However, the speaker goes too far to an extreme in the statement that the greatness of individuals cannot be decided by their contemporaries, which I think is not the case. 主题跟你下面的论证不是很匹配，你下面的论证主要是侧重于当代人评不了，但是你这里用了however，语气下会变成强调的是当代人可以评，改一下应该好一点

In some situations, the greatness of some superior talented, genius people may far beyond common people's imagination and eyesight. They may achieve accomplishments far beyond their time. History like this mostly frequently repeats in the science and art field. When Einstein firstly published the relativity, few people understand him and even this small proportion cannot imagine how the theory has affected modern society. The great Chinese literate Cao Xue Qin wrote the "A Dream of the Red Mansions", a major masterpiece of high value highly admired by latter people, back in the Qing Dynasty hundreds of years ago. However, few people of his time had noticed how great his great work was and even fewer people had heard of it. The great literate was end up in poverty. TS没有跟题目靠，decide，如果点出来因为超出想象，所以不能decide会更好


Further, we also see in history that due to the specific condition of certain times, some great people were intentionally debased by a few powerful persons and were greatly ill treated by the uncultivated public. Back in middle age Europe, while religion dominated the majority, the great achievements of scientists and other individuals against theology were intentionally made heterodoxy by the rulers, thus most people treat them as witches or demented freaks. There is no hope for the great figures of that severe time to be judged fairly by their contemporaries. 这一段个人感觉并不能很好地为你的主题服务，不能公平地判断和不能评断应该是两码事


Additionally, as some thoughts and ideas of the great ones are so great that though people of the same age regarded them as galaxy, they are still not fully admired to the extent they deserved. Again in Ancient China, there once was a great man named Sun-Tzu whose great Art of War are highly admired by modern people. Nowadays not only in the pure military field but also in economy, business and other fields people find that his military theory is very practical. However, back to his own time, he was mainly admired as a great captain and his contemporaries people had no idea how great he was as a thinker and that his Art of War was not only applicable in battle fields.

Although I deem that latter people may do a better judgment of the greatness of individual, I cannot concede that people cannot rightly decide the greatness of the noble figures of their same time. There are achieves of some great people that can be easily perceived by common people of the same time. For instance, President Mao of China is admired as one of the greatest political leader of China and the main founder of the PRC. He successfully led his people through wars and pains and showed them the light of a new independent life. Other great political leaders as well as uncultivated peasants of his nation in his time spared their praises and admirations of this great man.

TO sum up, in some situation, people may not well understand the greatness of individuals of the same age while the later generation could fulfill the request. But still they have the ability to judge the greatness of some galaxy rightly based on their knowledge and experiences 与开头一样的问题，头尾看起来都是强调当代人可以决定，建议开头和结尾段重新整理一下


总的来说不错，又是限时，这篇文章应该有4分以上，但是个人感觉例子太多是国人的，当然能借机扬我国威，让老米知道我们也是伟人辈出挺好的。但是毕竟文章是要说服人，而要说服读者，首先是要引起读者的共鸣，相信弱弱的老米对于这些国牛应该没有太多的认识，能换一下应该更好。

ivyshoulUID: 195537

反正我是中国人,外国人的例子我不知道那么多,名字也写不来,他们不懂就算了,哼

我觉得这样至少比所有人都是Von Gough, Bill Gates,Martin Luther King, Beethevon要好

sblbaslerUID: 175229

我觉得你的例子倒是不错，尤其是曹雪芹那个，最起码不重复，为了防止老美过低的文化底蕴，影响了对文章内涵的理解，是不是可以考虑加大一点对主人公或其作品重要性的描述，最起码让米国人知道，这是很重要的！其次，写例子的时候不要单独的罗列，最好把相关的几个例子用排比的句子写出来，这样看起来比较有气势！个人愚见！

ivyshoulUID: 195537

就是就是,不要罗列,我还很菜啊要加强训练

mythztUID: 162409

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When we look back into the history, we'll(we will最好分开写，比较规范) see lots of examples of great figures being(为什么用being?) misunderstood by their contemporaries. Sometimes people may not judge the greatness of individuals of their same age. Moreover, bearing a historical view, posterities may evaluate the greatness of their forefathers more systematically and precisely. However, the speaker goes too far to an extreme in the statement that the greatness of individuals cannot be decided by their contemporaries, which I think is not the case.

In some situations, the greatness of some superior talented, genius people may far beyond common people's imagination and eyesight. They may achieve accomplishments far beyond their time. History like this mostly frequently repeats in the science and art field. When Einstein firstly published the relativity, few people understand him and even this small proportion cannot imagine how the theory has affected modern society.(后半句感觉跟前面时态不一致) The great Chinese literate Cao Xue Qin wrote the "A Dream of the Red Mansions", a major masterpiece of high value highly admired by latter people, back in the Qing Dynasty hundreds of years ago. However, few people of his time had noticed how great his great(换个词，outstanding、excellent等) work was and even fewer people had heard of it. The great literate was end up in poverty. (例子很好，不像我的那么粗俗，只是感觉结尾再扣一下TS会更好些？)

Further, we also see in history that due to the specific condition of certain times, some great people were intentionally debased by a few powerful persons and were greatly(这个词不合适) ill treated by the uncultivated public. Back in middle age Europe, while religion dominated the majority, the great achievements of scientists and other individuals against theology were intentionally(deliberately) made heterodoxy by the rulers, thus most people treated them as witches(eccentrics会不会好点呢？) or demented freaks. There is no hope for the great figures of that severe time to be judged fairly by their contemporaries.

Additionally, as some thoughts and ideas of the great ones are so great that though people of the same age regarded them as galaxy, they are(were) still not fully admired to the extent they deserved. Again in Ancient(ancient) China, there once was(was once) a great man named Sun-Tzu whose great Art of War are(is) highly admired(appreciated) by modern people. Nowadays not only in the pure military field but also in economy, business(economy是否也包含business?) and other fields people find that his military theory is very practical. However, back to his own time, he was mainly admired as a great captain and his contemporaries people had no idea how great he was as a thinker and that his Art of War was not only applicable in battle fields. (好例子，赞一个！)

Although I deem that latter people may do a better judgment of the greatness of individual, I cannot concede that people cannot rightly decide(evaluate) the greatness of the noble figures of their same time. There are achieves(accomplishments) of some great people that can be easily perceived by common people of the same time. For instance, President(Chairman吧？) Mao of China is admired as one of the greatest political leader of China and the main founder of the PRC. He successfully led his people through wars and pains and showed them the light of a new independent life. Other great political leaders as well as uncultivated peasants of his nation in his time spared their praises and admirations of(to) this great man.

TO(To) sum up, in some situation(under some circumstances), people may not well understand the greatness of individuals of the same age while the later generation could fulfill the request. But still they have the ability to judge the greatness of some galaxy rightly based on their knowledge and experiences.
看你的文章很爽，限时写成这样很成功，举的例子都很新颖(至少对我来说)。我的水平很菜，只能鸡蛋里挑骨头，见谅啊！谢谢你帮我改文章！ :)

ivyshoulUID: 195537

看我的文章很爽?
嗯嗯果然跟我GG说的一样: 一看就知道是中国人写的(与例子无关), 句子是英文,思维和精神透出来都是中式的!
没办法,偶是土产中国人:)))