Issue138 学习类高频 在线等拍

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Issue138:  645 words 55 minutes
Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress.
观点：mistakes, to some extent, can lead to discoveries or progress, while mistakes do not equal to those.
提纲：1 获得发现和进步路上，错误不可避免。由于未知因素，会犯错误；即使已经熟练，仍然会犯错误
      2 从错误中学习有助于发现和进步
      3 虽然理论上可以不犯错误就有发现或进步，但实际上是不可能的；虽然人人想成功，没人喜欢总犯错误，没有必要害怕错误
In the contemporary world, most people regard mistakes as obstacles to discoveries or progress. Actually, they are both products of the same process. As the famous Chinese Ping Pang ball player Deng yaping said, "An activity which produces a hit may also generate a miss.”In my point of view, mistakes, to some extent, can lead to discoveries or progress, while mistakes do not equal to those.

First of all, on the way to discoveries or progress, to mistake is almost inevitable. In the realms of science, before a well-presented theory is founded, hardly can one assure that one can achieve the goal without any tiny mistakes. Take the invention of light bulb for example, after numerous mistakes, Edison ultimately finds the appropriate material for the lighting. Due to the unpredictable factors, there is nearly no probability that one can obtain the success at one's first attempt. That is why Edison has to make thousands of mistaken choices. In the realms of arts, when a writer begins to create literatures, his first work may not be well accepted by readers because of a few mistakes in writing which the author may not realize then. Wang peng, a well-known editor in China Daily, told his students a story that his first 10 reports were all rejected by the chief editor because he had made some fatal mistakes in reporting news. So, if a beginner has a desire to make important discoveries or get progressed, he or she should prepare to make mistakes first. Even for experts, who may not worry about some stupid or meaningless mistakes, mistakes are not strange to them unless they are careful enough at every detail and in every second. Unfortunately, almost no one can manage that. For instance, Beckham, the shining soccer star in the world, who has an outstanding shooting skill, makes an unforgivable mistake during the match with Argintina, which prevents England from the champinship of the world cup. Thus, it is not overrating that mistakes are always around us whether we like them or not.

More over, learning from the mistakes contributes to discovery or progress. At most cases, mistakes help us find out what is unworkable and hence we can approach the right solution. It is reported that among the 56 Nobel Price gainers surveyed, 96.4% of them admitted that they have ever made mistakes when they are on their way to the innovations. As Yang zhenling who won the Physics Nobel Price several years ago said (and I paraphrase) "During our first experiment, we make a lot of mistakes. After we review our methods, conclude the reasons and try another way, the results are far better. Thanks to the lessons of the mistakes. "Therefore, mistakes are precious experience which would certainly pave a way for our discovery or progress instead of a stumbling stone.

Admittedly, if one is lucky enough, one may probably success at the first attempt and this would seem impossible according to common sense and experience. Also, there is no denying that it is a human being’s nature that one would pursue fame and profit. After all, undoubtedly, no one is always a mistake-lover. Thus, most people abhor or even fear making mistakes. It is completely unnecessary. What is significant is not mistake itself but the attitude one cherishes when confronting mistakes. A wise man would make best use of mistakes and would not drop in the same trap twice. Only dull men fear mistakes and stop advancing so as not to make so called “undesirable mistakes”.

To sum up, "To err is human." We may make various kinds of mistakes during our daily life and there are no necessities to fear them. We should better bear in mind that mistakes would not turn into any discovery or progress automatically. What makes sense is what we would act after we have realized the mistakes. No reasonably treating mistakes, no discovery or progress.

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Issue138: 645 words 55 minutes
Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress.
观点：mistakes, to some extent, can lead to discoveries or progress, while mistakes do not equal to those.
提纲：1 获得发现和进步路上，错误不可避免。由于未知因素，会犯错误；即使已经熟练，仍然会犯错误
2 从错误中学习有助于发现和进步
3 虽然理论上可以不犯错误就有发现或进步，但实际上是不可能的；虽然人人想成功，没人喜欢总犯错误，没有必要害怕错误
In the contemporary world, most people regard mistakes as obstacles to discoveries or progress. Actually, they are both products of the same process.这句不爽，代词用的不明白 As the famous Chinese Ping Pang ball player Deng yaping said, "An activity which produces a hit may also generate a miss.” In my point of view, mistakes, to some extent, can lead to discoveries or progress, while mistakes do not equal to those.后半句又没明白，为啥要说equal的问题呢？不过整个开头方式还不错，只是语句上有些不够清晰

First of all, on the way to discoveries or progress, to mistake is almost inevitable. In the realms of science, before a well-presented theory is founded, hardly can one assure that one can achieve the goal without any tiny mistakes. Take the invention of light bulb for example, after numerous mistakes, Edison ultimately finds the appropriate material for the lighting. Due to the unpredictable factors, there is nearly no probability that one can obtain the success at one's first attempt. That is why Edison has to make thousands of mistaken choices. In the realms of arts, when a writer begins to create literatures, his first work may not be well accepted by readers because of a few mistakes in writing which the author may not realize then. Wang peng, a well-known editor in China Daily, told his students a story that his first 10 reports were all rejected by the chief editor because he had made some fatal some vital mistakes 给我的感觉是工作不认真，汗，而且和后面的的make important discovery and progress 连接不上，你要说的是通过这些错误如何更深刻的认识问题避免以后犯错才能成功。还有这个算art么？mistakes in reporting news. So, if a beginner has a desire to make important discoveries or get progressed, he or she should prepare to make mistakes first.汗，这个结论的推理像是阿狗的题目（表介意，今天开始看阿狗了呵呵。）不是should prepare to make mistakes啊，是要expect可能会有mistakes。关键是这里说的远了点，要说通过错误才能进步，不是为了进步就要犯错 Even for experts, who may not worry about some stupid or meaningless mistakes,无论什么形式，这不还是mistakes么？说他们比正常人认真比较严谨些 mistakes are not strange to them unless they are careful enough at every detail and in every second. Unfortunately, almost no one can manage that. For instance, Beckham, the shining soccer star in the world, who has an outstanding shooting skill, makes an unforgivable mistake during the match with Argintina, 错,Argentinawhich prevents England from the champinship of the world cup. Thus, it is not overrating that mistakes are always around us whether we like them or not.感觉第一个例子之后的论述都有些跑远了，只说错误不可避免，没说对discovery progress的意义，或者说你分领域说明通过错误才能进步的现象非常普遍，但是也只是说了人人都会犯错误，进步啊进步啊！表现在哪里？

More over,一个词 learning from the mistakes contributes to discovery or progress. 谓语捏？At most cases, mistakes help us find out what is unworkable and hence we can approach the right solution. It is reported that among the 56 Nobel Price gainers surveyed, 96.4% of them admitted that they have ever made mistakes when they are on their way to the innovations.这里的论据不错，调查研究，不过感觉要说这些人都认为错误帮助他们发现问题促进了他们寻找正确的方法更好（sigh看阿狗后遗症，犯过错误和有成果得奖两个现象没有因果吧，我这个挑刺了，诶） As Yang zhenling 杨振宁？…哼！who won the Physics Nobel Price several years ago said (and I paraphrase) "During our first experiment, we make a lot of mistakes. After we review our methods, conclude the reasons and try another way, the results are far better. Thanks to the lessons of the mistakes. "噢，界个引用不错不错Therefore, mistakes are precious experience which would certainly pave a way for our discovery or progress instead of a stumbling stone.这段总体来说不错，论的比较到位，把错误在进步过程中的作用说的很明白，论据也不错

Admittedly, if one is lucky enough, one may probably success at the first attempt and this would seem impossible according to common sense and experience. Also, there is no denying that it is a human being’s nature that one would pursue fame and profit.嗯？also这句要说虾米意思？赐教 After all, undoubtedly, no one is always a mistake-lover. Thus, most people abhor or even fear making mistakes. It is completely unnecessary. What is significant is not mistake itself but the attitude one cherishes when confronting mistakes. A wise man would make best use of mistakes and would not drop in the same trap twice. Only dull men fear mistakes and stop advancing so asso as的后面是果前面是因吧，反了 not to make so called “undesirable mistakes”.

To sum up, "To err is human." We may make various kinds of mistakes during our daily life and there are no necessities to fear them. We should better bear in mind that mistakes would not turn into any discovery or progress automatically. What makes sense is what we would act after we have realized the mistakes. No reasonably treating mistakes, no discovery or progress.
总的说，回到开头再看你的观点，1：同意题目错误可以促进进步和突破，那么B1个人认为是跑了一大半，没有很好的扣题。我认为重点在于错误对于进步和突破的作用上，你花了全文最重点的笔墨只说了错误不可避免，并没有说到为虾米错误会对进步有促进。B2说的不错，是论证的重点，和B1一起看比重太少了，虽然也论的不错。开头2：但是错误不等于进步。这样B3的让步应该是针对这个观点的吧，但是你开头的TS很有问题，像是回应题目的那个only于是举出特例情况。后面当然也说道了个人态度很重要，但是前面看起来很别扭。 其实我个人认为这里的让步应该紧扣题目的“通过错误才能进步”，于是结论是“不一定只有通过错误才能进步”于是举出其他原因，这样才最直接

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In the contemporary world, most people regard mistakes as obstacles to discoveries or progress. Actually, they are both products of the same process. As the famous Chinese Ping Pang ball[pingpong] player Deng yaping said, "An activity which produces a hit may also generate a miss.”In my point of view, mistakes, to some extent, can lead to discoveries or progress, while mistakes do not equal to those[后半句的意思是：犯错误并不等于一定会有discoveries or progress,是吧？但我觉得后面的阐述中没有有效地支持这后半句].

First of all, on the way to discoveries or progress, to mistake is almost inevitable. In the realms of science, before a well-presented theory is founded, hardly can one assure that one can achieve the goal without any tiny mistakes. Take the invention of light bulb for example, after numerous mistakes, Edison ultimately finds the appropriate material for the lighting. Due to the unpredictable factors, there is nearly no probability that one can obtain the success at one's first attempt[感觉one用得多了点].That is why Edison has[had] to make thousands of mistaken choices. In the realms of arts, when a writer begins to create literatures, his[or her严谨些] first work[works] may not be well accepted by readers because of a few mistakes in writing which the author may not realize then. Wang peng, a well-known editor in[of] China Daily, told his students a story that his first 10 reports were all rejected by the chief editor because he had made some fatal mistakes in reporting news. So, if a beginner has a desire to make important discoveries or get progressed, he or she should prepare to make mistakes first. Even for experts, who may not worry about some stupid or meaningless mistakes, mistakes are not strange to them unless they are careful enough at every detail and in every second. Unfortunately, almost no one can manage that. For instance, Beckham, the shining soccer star in the world, who has an outstanding shooting skill, makes[made] an unforgivable mistake during the match with Argintina[Argentina], which prevents[prevented] England from the championship[champion] of the world cup. Thus, it is not overrating that mistakes are always around us whether we like them or not.

More over, learning from the mistakes contributes to discovery or progress. At most cases, mistakes help us find out what is unworkable and hence we can approach the right solution. It is reported that among the 56 Nobel Price gainers surveyed, 96.4% of them admitted that they have ever made mistakes when they are on their way to the innovations. As Yang zhenling who won the Physics Nobel Price several years ago said (and I paraphrase) "During our first experiment, we make a lot of mistakes. After we review our methods, conclude the reasons and try another way, the results are far better. Thanks to the lessons of the mistakes. "Therefore, mistakes are precious experience which would certainly pave a way for our discovery or progress instead of a stumbling stone.[“为什么犯错误可以导致成功”说理不清，例子倒还可以]

Admittedly, if one is lucky enough, one may probably success at the first attempt and this would seem impossible according to common sense and experience. Also, there is no denying that it is a human being’s nature that one would pursue fame and profit[这个强调句的语法有错]. After all, undoubtedly, no one is always a mistake-lover. Thus, most people abhor or even fear making mistakes[fear后好象不能接V-ing吧]. It is completely unnecessary. What is significant is not mistake itself but the attitude one cherishes[possesses比较好] when confronting [with] mistakes. A wise man would make best use of mistakes and would not drop in the same trap twice. Only dull men fear mistakes and stop advancing so as not to make so called “undesirable mistakes”.

To sum up, "To err is human." We may make various kinds of mistakes during our daily life and there are no necessities to fear them. We should better bear in mind that mistakes would not turn into any discovery or progress automatically. What makes sense is what we would act after we have realized the mistakes. No reasonably treating mistakes, no discovery or progress.