Issue 186 感觉后面有点跑题了

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Issue186  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分4秒     514 words
从2005年2月13日15时38分到2005年2月13日16时45分
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Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world.
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Practicality to a large extent contains the pursuit of creature comfort and convenience, physical satisfaction rather than spiritual level. In this case, I indeed disagree that practicality is now our great idol. Although we cannot give up seek better physical life, we do not absolutely neglect something with great value in arts, technology, human's sustainable development etc.

People are often of enough knowledge to understand the new theory and new ideas which thus are considered as the one with no practicality. However, when these new theories was tested in long times, people increasingly recognized the value of them, and apply them into practical uses. Let us take Einstein's story as an example. When Einstein won his Nobel Prize due to his achievement setting forth the principle of photoemission, there indeed exist many people doubt the practicality of the achievement. However, time has proved that this work has been used to the serious energy crisis, in that scientists are utilizing nuclear energy, which is based on the principle of photoemission, to generate electricity. Another work of Einstein, theory of relativity, which was also considered unpractical, help current scientists to solve some difficult problem about the relation between time and space. Accordingly, we have no reason to criticize those works, which are judged as unpractical ones with currant perspective.

As for some masterpieces, which is usually considered with no practical value, we have to attach complete and objective evaluation. In fact, great masterpieces play an important role in our society, which cannot be instead. Many works in arts have immortal values for ever. The eternal and mystery smile of Da vinci's famous Mona Lisa makes us easy and comfortable; the affection story of Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet brings us romance and real love; the natural performance of Monet's Sunrise gives us light and willingness; the exciting rhythms of Beethoven's nine symphonies bear us energy and confidence. Although there works is not obviously practical, we cannot say that they have little value in today's world.

Another point worth considering is that over pursuit of practicality will make people swamp in the mud of practicality. For example, if we individuals only require the practicality of clothes, we would give up the requirement for fashion and diversity. And in this case, it is very likely that all the people in the street seem as the same, which is so terrible that no body want that.

How about other respects? If all the industries over pursue practicality, which often means more profits for them, they may neglect environmental pollution they often raise. For example, if car industries paid all attention to produce more cars to satisfy people's requirement for traveling, moreover government encouraged citizens to purchase cars that will bring about more tax, as a result, human beings would confront more pollution problem or other serious effect.

To sum up, if all the powers and talents served practicality, we would loss more values of arts and meanings of life. Therefore, we should remember that we are human beings that need unpractical spiritual enjoying and long-term concerning about future.

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lunaticUID: 150745

没事，没人愿意讨论就算了：），我就快考试了，没时间再帮别人改了，等考完试再回来做点贡献吧

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我来占坐了
明天给你答复哦

另：我举报鬼鬼兄占了我的坐没给改:D（不过可能是我的太差都不好评价的呵）

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Practicality to a large extent contains the pursuit of creature comfort and convenience, physical satisfaction rather than spiritual level. In this case,为什么说在这种情况下就不同意了呢？ I indeed disagree that practicality is now our great idol. Although we cannot give up seek符合语法么？我记得好象是V+ing吧 better physical life, we do not absolutely neglect something with great value in arts, technology, human's sustainable development etc.

People are often of enough knowledge to understand the new theory and new ideas我觉得这个立论不好说，因为对于新鲜的东西人们并不是很容易就理解和接受的 which thus are considered as the one with no practicality. However, when these new theories was可以用一般现在时吧，而且也应该是复数啊 tested in long timesfor a long time?, people increasingly recognized the value of them, and apply them into practical uses. Let us take Einstein's story as an example. When Einstein won his Nobel Prize due to his achievement setting forth the principle of photoemission, there indeed exist many people doubt你看这里不就优点像是不懂么 the practicality of the achievement. However, time has proved that this work has been used to the serious energy crisis, in that scientists are utilizing nuclear energy, which is based on the principle of photoemission, to generate electricity. Another work of Einstein, theory of relativity, which was also considered unpractical, help current scientists to solve some difficult problem about the relation between time and space. Accordingly, we have no reason to criticize those works, which are judged as unpractical ones with currant perspective.这里的结论就和段首优点不一致了，不过文中的例子还是用得很好的

As for some masterpieces, which is usually considered with no practical value, we have to attach complete and objective evaluation. In fact, great masterpieces play an important role in our society, which cannot be instead. Many works in arts have immortal values for ever. The eternal and mystery smile of Da vinci's famous Mona Lisa makes us easy and comfortable; the affection story of Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet brings us romance and real love; the natural performance of Monet's Sunrise gives us light and willingness; the exciting rhythms of Beethoven's nine symphonies bear us energy and confidence. Although there works is not obviously practical, we cannot say that they have little value in today's world.这段8错

Another point worth considering is that over pursuit of practicality will make people swamp in the mud of practicality. For example, if we individuals only require the practicality of clothes, we would give up the requirement for fashion and diversity. And in this case, it is very likely that all the people in the street seem as the same, which is so terrible that no body want that. 很新颖，

How about other respects? If all the industries over pursue practicality, which often means more profits for them, they may neglect environmental pollution they often raise. For example, if car industries paid all attention to produce more cars to satisfy people's requirement for traveling, moreover government encouraged citizens to purchase cars that willwould？ bring about more tax, as a result, human beings would confront more pollution problems or other serious effects.既然说了other aspects, 我觉得应该可以再展开点。

To sum up, if all the powers and talents served practicality, we would loss more values of arts and meanings of life. Therefore, we should remember that we are human beings that need unpractical spiritual enjoying and long-term concerning about future.
我觉得后面的两三段有些仓促，可能是时间的问题吧导致说的不够充分，所以整篇文章到后来就感觉没什么力量了，对于practicality的认识就少了些。我现在有点晕，刚上完一天的课，一点拙见，见谅了。
另：要考试了，加油哦