从今天开始每天一篇作文，晚上我会发上来接受大家批斗，在批斗中成长

playbearleeUID: 198693

我会从04年1月10日的真题开始写，请大家指教
希望各位能从文章结构，遣词造句等方面提出你宝贵的意见

我在写的时候主要发现了以下问题：1是老是用join in the army，也没有找到其他好的表达，2是老是觉得单复数很让我为难，3是文章不够绚


1月10日TOPIC:

In many countries, women are not able to join in the army to share equal basis with men , but some people think that men should be a member of army, navy and air force only. To what extend do you agree or disagree?


Nowadays, being a member of soldier is the men’s privilege only. Women have no qualification to join in the army while men have. It is becoming a sensitive and hot-debated issue. I believe this will depend on specific situation.

Broadly speaking, men are more suitable for the army. The life of army, with poor accommodation, terrific diet is detrimental to women. And also, it has no enough medical skills and facilities. In addition, only some social responsibilities should women take such as pregnancy and feed child. Having considered its danger and men’ strong physicality relatively, men should take the largest proportion of the soldier.

However, only under rare circumstance, women also are able to join in the army. For example, women are more qualified for the logistic servicers due to their carefulness. Women also play a crucial role in the field of literature and art in army.

To sum up , men are more favorable than women to join in the army in general .But it is not absolute, it lays on different factors. It is flexible in various circumstances.[/SIZE]

bqianaUID: 193168

鼓励！字数够吗？句子还不错，有一定功底

playbearleeUID: 198693

确实呀,2楼的真是有经验呀，这篇文章就是字数也不够呀,才190个字左右,下次会注意的啦

upstudioUID: 124777

我有个问题,IELTS有作文题库吗?
那里有?

bqianaUID: 193168

只有机井，没有见过题库
3G雅思有机井，51不行了

flyflyspiritUID: 27889

关于内容我想说一些，
我觉得现在的军队逐渐科技话，战术和科技含量很高，WOMEN应该可以参加技术含量高的作战

不知道能不能多打开你的思路！

playbearleeUID: 198693

谢谢楼上的，我会继续改的，我继续写了一篇1月17日的，等下就发上来，有兴趣的帮我看看