issue130 [color=#00ff5b]同主题5 教育社会化问题~

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130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
1除去社会化,我们更应该鼓励个性化多元化,鼓励对不同的东西容忍
2让步承认社会化的优点,但过度的强调社会化会带来负面影响
3教育应该是社会化和多元化的结合,我们虽然在学习教育孩子,但是这不等于不成功
:(  这次反而超时了十多分钟~我要崩溃了~~~5555
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In the ceaseless history of mortal, education ushers in an inescapable continuity, which influence in every aspect in our life. Wedged in person's life and existing in awareness, education sometimes is considered the target of divine as much as devil, socializing our thought but devastating our unique features. Notwithstanding, there are a myriad of people still under the delusion that the destiny of future society depend on the education of how to socialize children. From my point of view, educational diversity is more than important to socialize, to unify our offspring.

True, it is education of the children that decide our future society and socialization inevitably play an import role in it. But the sweet misery is that because of the different individuality, if we too much emphasize socializing our children, the results will be bitter. There are a great many children who are in possession of marvel idea and always behave dramatically strange, some of which are potential painters, promising poets, and even talent scientists. Some of the prodigies in our society, Einstein for instance, behave weird in their childhood or even adulthood, and not willing to involve in our seemingly ordered, but inner chaos society, repulsing to be socialized. Thus, should we overwhelmingly emphasize our socializational education, they would adapt to the environment and become common people or not adapt and be treated as geeks or crazy guys, and this kind of socialization will eventually lead to a world unified devoid of any diversity, even sowing the seed of hatred of culture difference for the reason that distinctive culture will irresistibly influence children's unique feature. What is more, chances are dim that we can socialize all of our descendents, why? It is ipso facto; none government or society can be qualified to boast that their education is perfect to socialize students and socialization is merely a daydream for some of socialist and extreme educationist.

Nonetheless, we must confess that substantiality of the socialization, without which most our ordinary people cannot thrive or even fail to survive. So significant of socialization that lacking of it, we hardly know how to behave in light with invisible social regulation, how to rightly deal with our private affair and the rest, how to connect other people and act like a gentleman. But still, if we require all of our children to behave in one way, our education will reduce into a factory of robot, identical and formulary mind with different faces but the coequal expression. Isn’t that our tragedy of education? Sadly, but yes.

As a consequence, not only our education requires students to behave accurately but also aim to encourages them to pursue their distinct belief and innate needs, making this world colorful. It has long been said that our education fail to raise our children, but this is not the case hook, line and sinker. Hardly any can education system be regarded as immaculate, and the educational theories vary a lot, which all assert their rightness and rich fruit, but the wise way for the sake of our offspring is to mix them and to endeavor to make full use of them. We are learning to educate, and we educate our children to learn, indoctrinating knowledge and encouraging them to equip goodness, braveness and all the merits inherited from our civilization and culture, moreover endowing them with the acceptance of discrepancy. That is enough.

Retrospectively, socializing is import, but of what value is education if it is reduced to be a tool to restrain our children's imagination, if it only manufacture students behaving the same way and deprive of our humanity diversity, if our socializing eventually stain our offspring's naive heart and soul as well as make them greed and become social creatures only craving for success. Albeit we are learning to raise our child, we never fail. (637)

anthraxUID: 176473

哎呀遇见你咯。写完作文就帮你看。你也帮我拍吧

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那天帮你拍了拉~你比我强的多~你那题那么难写~

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No.1 issue130 同主题5 教育社会化问题~
130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
1除去社会化,我们更应该鼓励个性化多元化,鼓励对不同的东西容忍
2让步承认社会化的优点,但过度的强调社会化会带来负面影响
3教育应该是社会化和多元化的结合,我们虽然在学习教育孩子,但是这不等于不成功【提纲中没有看到对于社会命运的论述啊，看了后面再说】
这次反而超时了十多分钟~我要崩溃了~~~5555
正文-----------
In the ceaseless history of mortal, education ushers in an inescapable continuity, which influence in every aspect in our life. Wedged in person's life and existing in awareness, education sometimes is considered the target of divine as much as devil, socializing our thought but devastating our unique features. Notwithstanding, there are a myriad of people still under the delusion that the destiny of future society depend on the education of how to socialize children. From my point of view, educational diversity is more than important to socialize, to unify our offspring. 【把socialize定义为unify，反对的观点】

True, it is education of the children that decide our future society and socialization inevitably play an import role in it. But the sweet misery is that because of the different individuality, if we too much emphasize socializing our children, the results will be bitter. There are a great many children who are in possession of marvel【marvelous？】idea and always behave dramatically strange, some of which are potential painters, promising poets, and even talent scientists. Some of the prodigies in our society, Einstein for instance, behave weird in their childhood or even adulthood, and not willing to involve in our seemingly ordered, but inner chaos society, repulsing to be socialized. 【觉得你对socialization的理解不正确】Thus, should we overwhelmingly emphasize our socializational 【没查到这样的词】education, they would adapt to the environment and become common people or not adapt and be treated as geeks or crazy guys, and this kind of socialization will eventually lead to a world unified devoid of any diversity, even sowing the seed of hatred of culture difference for the reason that distinctive culture will irresistibly influence children's unique feature. What is more, chances are dim that we can socialize all of our descendents, why? It is ipso facto【强！】; none government or society can be qualified to boast that their education is perfect to socialize students and socialization is merely a daydream for some of socialist and extreme educationist. 【最终的结果，destiny of society的问题呢？我担心的问题发生了】

Nonetheless, we must confess that substantiality of the socialization, without which most our ordinary people cannot thrive or even fail to survive. So significant of socialization【so significant the socialization is】 that lacking of it, we hardly know how to behave in light with invisible social regulation, how to rightly deal with our private affair and the rest, 【and】 how to connect other people and act like a gentleman. But still, if we require all of our children to behave in one way, our education will reduce into a factory of robot, identical and formulary mind with different faces but the coequal expression. Isn’t that our tragedy of education? Sadly, but yes. 【论述的不错，不过还是没有谈到destiny of society的问题】

As a consequence, not only our education requires students to behave accurately but also aim to encourages them to pursue their distinct belief and innate needs, making this world colorful. It has long been said that our education fail to raise our children, but this is not the case hook, line and sinker. Hardly any can education system be regarded as immaculate, and the educational theories vary a lot, which all assert their rightness and rich fruit, but the wise way for the sake of our offspring is to mix them and to endeavor to make full use of them. We are learning to educate, and we educate our children to learn, indoctrinating knowledge and encouraging them to equip goodness, braveness and all the merits inherited from our civilization and culture, moreover endowing them with the acceptance of discrepancy. That is enough. 【似乎不是在论述我们是否能够教育好儿童，而是在说我们应该怎么做】

Retrospectively, socializing is import, but of what value is education if it is reduced to be a tool to restrain our children's imagination, if it only manufacture students behaving the same way and deprive of our humanity diversity, if our socializing eventually stain our offspring's naive heart and soul as well as make them greed and become social creatures only craving for success. Albeit we are learning to raise our child, we never fail. (637)
【语言还是那么好，赞一个！不过，如果说，你这篇文章的题目是socialization在教育中的作用，或者是否socialization是教育儿童的唯一方法的话，你写的是很成功的。但是，题目并非仅仅如此的。最根本的考虑是社会。而这一点被你忽视了。所以，重新组织一下吧。】

boyjimUID: 125249

刚才看你的帖子的时候看到好几个说到destiny~我写的时候没考虑这一点~只考虑到了对社会的影响~影响我觉得发展一下就可以引申到destiny~事不宜迟~现在就改

还有就是我把socialize理解为unify主要是因为我把社会化~体现在我查韦伯socialize是1regulate according to the theory and practice of socialism 2adapt to cocial needs or uses这个含义~我觉得社会化就是在规范人民的道德行为~这样就是在统一assimilation大家的行为~使之不会超越行为规范~但是我想说的是有些人是社会化不了的~他们的行为古怪~思想奇异~满足不了社会化的需求~
不过socialize我把它引申到unify如果放在一般人群的话~这确实有点过了头~

鬼谷子UID: 159645

如果对于一般人群可能还好。
但是如果对于儿童的话，我觉得socialization还是一个学习的过程，尤其是学习一些必要的交往交流行为的知识的过程。而unify我觉得还是更高一点的，社会政府等对于成年人的作用。

boyjimUID: 125249

130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
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1承认社会化的优点,但他和社会命运的关系甚少
2社会多元化对社会的命运有更多的好处,与社会化对比之后的坏处
3我们已经尽力教育我们儿童~相信会能够教育好地~
改了两个多小时~其实也就是不断的缝缝补补~重新的把句子排列组合~添加大词~:D~~糟了都成爱好了~改完都七百六十多字了~靠~
In the ceaseless history of mortal, education ushers in an inescapable continuity, which influence in every aspect in our life. Wedged in person's life and existing in awareness, education sometimes is considered the target of divine as much as devil, socializing our thought but devastating our unique features. Notwithstanding, there are a myriad of people still under the delusion that the destiny of future society depend on the education of how to socialize children. From my point of view, educational diversity is more than important to socialize, to unify our offspring.

True, we must confess that substantiality of the socialization, without which most our ordinary people cannot thrive or even fail to survive. It is education of the children that decide our future society and socialization inevitably play an import role in it. So significant of socialization is that lacking of it, we hardly know how to behave in light with invisible social hand, how to rightly deal with our private affair and the rest, how to connect other people and act like a gentleman. But they would only become persons whose behavior attain the gauge of society and against crime, were our children properly socialized and guided. Hence, the socialization, though looks like an elixir, possess seldom any connection with our destiny of society. Nonetheless, the sweet misery is that because spectrum of human individuality is so colorful, if we too much emphasize socializing our children, the results will be bitter. What is more, if we require all of our children to behave in one way overwhelmingly, our education will ultimately reduce into a factory of robot, generating identical and formulary mind with different faces but still, the coequal expression. Isn't this a tragedy rather than a destiny? Sadly, but yes.

As far as I am concerned, there lies a more significant belief in education. There are a great many children who are in possession of marvelous idea and always behave dramatically strange, some of which are potential painters, promising poets, and even talent scientists. Some of the prodigies in our society, Einstein for instance, behave weird in their childhood or even adulthood, and not willing to involve in our seemingly ordered, but inner chaos society, repulsing to be assimilation. Consequently, a wiser way to cultivate our children is to encourage their individuality to boost their own development as well as guide their behavior, fulfilling our humanity diversity and making the society more flowery destiny. This may be drastically superior to socialization and this zeitgeist may more qualified nourish our future. On the contrary, should we extremely emphasize our socialization education, they would adapt to the environment and become common people otherwise not adapt and be treated as geeks or crazy guys, and this kind of socialization will eventually lead to a world unified devoid of any diversity, even sowing the seed of hatred of culture difference for the reason that distinctive culture will irresistibly influence children's unique feature. What is more, chances are dim that we can socialize all of our descendents, why? It is ipso facto; none government or society can be qualified to boast that their education is perfect to socialize students and socialization is merely a daydream for some socialists and extreme educationists.

As a consequence, not only our education requires students to behave accurately but also aim to encourages them to pursue their distinct belief and innate needs, making this world colorful. It has long been said that our education fail to raise our children, but this is not the case hook, line and sinker. Hardly any can education system be regarded as immaculate, and the educational theories vary a lot, which all assert their rightness and rich fruit, but the wise way for the sake of our offspring is to mix them and to endeavor to make full use of them. We are learning to educate, and we educate our children to learn, indoctrinating knowledge and encouraging them to equip goodness, braveness and all the merits inherited from our civilization and culture, moreover endowing them with the acceptance of discrepancy. That is enough because we have attempted our best.

Retrospectively, socializing is import, but what will happen in the future destiny if our education is reduced to be a tool to restrain our children’s imagination, if socialization only manufacture students behaving the same way and deprive of our humanity diversity, if our socializing eventually stain our offspring's naive heart and soul as well as make them greed and become social creatures only craving for success. Albeit we are learning to raise our child, we never fail.

指向大海UID: 158737

难怪你叫我改，原来修改稿没人改

语言是不错，你给吱吱就改的很到位啊，不过以前我发了那么多篇你怎么不帮我改改呢？

修改稿和原稿我看不出很大的差别，感觉这种1＋1的题目你好像还是主要讲教育的目的，但题目是说我们没有教会我们的孩子社会化，这是一项社会发展的重要措施，个人这么理解，应该因果都讲，尽可能扣题。
还有尽早限时

boyjimUID: 125249

大海哥~你别看我注册的早俺以前一直在sub泡~然后再托福泡~前一段时间去xdf上课~然后又是试验~到最近才来作文这里涅~

指向大海UID: 158737

你的头像很熟悉啊，考过SUB了么？

boyjimUID: 125249

考了拉~不咋么好~也不准备再考拉~想发文~

suruo 2004UID: 188584

资料四：儿童的社会化

适用题目：130 How children are socialized today determined the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
我觉得最首要的问题是弄明白socialize到底是什么意思，我最开始就弄错了。讨论孩子的社会化是否与社会的命运有关。第二个就是要讨论我们是否有能力培养出能建设出更好社会的孩子。算是1＋1的题目吧。

Socialization, process by which people, especially children, learn acceptable and unacceptable behaviors for a given environment.社会化的定义。


我刚看到的资料，好像可用