Issue87 高频跟风，小弟第一篇练笔，望猛拍

GrowlywolfUID: 200584

第一篇练笔，未限时，514 words，已经word校对拼写。

不行了，提笔就忘字，一个“观点”居然要想半分钟才能想起来idea，亏得老板平时总在骂我们没有own idea。

个人感觉论证形式有些单薄，三段都是举例，没有其他的论证方式。



Issue87  "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."

提纲：
观点：论题太绝对
1、新手不受什么已有框架的限制，的确可能做出重要的发现。eg. 德布罗意发现波粒二象性
2、但是新手固有的缺陷是缺乏系统训练和对该领域全面的了解，因此更多的时候还是专家做出的发现更多。eg. 中科院数学所每年收到几百封号称解决哥德巴赫猜想的信。
3、现在的学科分类越来越细，很多某领域的专家在其他领域也是新手。这样的新手可以利用原领域的背景做出重大发现来。eg. 发现核酶的Cech，1989年诺贝尔化学奖。
结论：不论是新手还是专家，想做出重大发现都需要有坚实的基础以及保持创新的精神。

The speaker asserts that the beginner can make more important discoveries than the expert in an field of inquiry.  In my opinion, this statement is unilateral and over-absolute.

The beginner who does not hold the conventional viewpoints, of course, is not limited by the existed frames.  When he/her enters into a new field, he/her can offer his own ideas, even which seem like daydreams.  Sometimes, these new ideas may be never flashed in the brains of expert, but they often exploit a new domain.  Louis de Broglie, who was an aristocrat and a master of literature at his twenties, came into the field of modern physics.  When he wrote his thesis of Ph. D, he argued that any elementary particle, besides photon, has wave-particle dualism.  This opinion, which was never dared to think about by physicists, burst like a shell over the domain of quantum theory, and few people would believe it.  Paul Langevin ---- de Broglie's teacher, a famous physicist, brought de Broglie's thesis to Einstein, and get a confirmed reply.  As a result, the de Broglie's equation is one of the most important basic equations in quantum theory.  What is interesing is that De Broglie imagined this equation upon nothing!  This example is used to point out that beginner can gain significant achievement indeed.

However, not all beginners can make great successes, because the beginners have their inherent shortcomings that they have not be well trained by systematical education and can not understand the whole field deeply.  The institute of mathematics of Chinese Science Academy receives hundreds of letters every year, each of them claims that the author has proved Goldbach's conjecture.  But the mathematicians find that most of these demonstrations lack the elementary knowledge of the number theory.  After all, the geniuses like de Broglie, to some extent with enough luck, are fewness in the world.  Ordinarily, most production is still maken by expert.

In recent years, academic disciplines have become so specialized that even an expert can only research through a narrow direction, and the expert in one field is probably a beginner in another field.  Nowadays many experts entered into the unacquainted domains as beginners.  This kind of “beginners” usually accepts good training, and can make use of their former knowledge to the unknown domain, so they are able to make significant achievements frequently.  Thomas R. Cech, who discovered catalytic RNA (ribozyme), was a chemist at first.  But he was attacted by biology and became a biochemist.  When he began his first faculty, he found that RNA can catalyze biochemical reaction like enzyme, and he soon make clear the machnism of catalysis.  For his discovery of catalytic properties of RNA, he won the 1989's Nobel Prize of chemistry, which was attributed to his chemical background to some extent.  

In sum, it is presumptuous to assert that in "any" field of inquiry, the beginner can make more important discoveries than the expert.  The advantage of beginner is only the creativity.  Whatever beginner and expert want to gain achievement must establish a solid foundation of professional knowledge and keep creativity forever.

GrowlywolfUID: 200584

自己先厚颜拍一下，^_^
1、三段的论点自我感觉比较到位，不过每段论述不够深入，有靠例子凑字数的嫌疑。
2、结尾段总结不够严谨，通篇基本都在讲beginner，expert讲得比较少，结尾最后一句强行把beginner和expert拉在一起了。
3、最大的问题：词汇和语言。偶最怕背单词了，从高中到现在，都是单词拖后腿。现在提笔就忘词～～～～ 而且很久没写东西，句式也很单调。

自拍完毕，哪位大虾再拍拍？

zhu317UID: 169246

The speaker asserts that the beginner can make more important discoveries than the expert in anany field of inquiry. In my opinion, this statement is unilateral and over-absolute.

The beginner who does not hold the conventional viewpoints, of course, is not limited by the existed frames. When he/her enters into a new field, he/her can offer his own ideas, even which seem like daydreams. Sometimes, these new ideas may be never 好像应该是never be比较通flashed in the brains of expert, but they often exploit a new domainthey指代的变成new ideas了，你的意思是指代beginner吧，不够清楚. Louis de Broglie, who was an aristocrat and a master of literature at his twenties, came into the field of modern physics. When he wrote his thesis of Ph. D, he argued that any elementary particle, besides photon, has wave-particle dualism. This opinion, which was never dared to think about by physicists, burst like a shell over the domain of quantum theory, and few people would believe it. Paul Langevin ---- de Broglie's teacher, a famous physicist, brought de Broglie's thesis to Einstein, and get a confirmed reply. As a result, the de Broglie's equation is one of the most important basic equations in quantum theory. What is interesing is that De Broglie imagined this equation upon nothing! 例子里关于爱因斯坦的确认我觉得不用提及，理论正确就是正确了，要用专家鉴定一下，然后才As a result, the de Broglie's equation is one of the most important basic equations in quantum theory吗？个人以为没这个必要了，专家跟新手混在一起，有些不明确了。What is interesing is that De Broglie imagined this equation upon nothing!这句话好像也是应用于theorize before enough data 那道题比较合适。应再强调一下他没有任何经验是个新手比较切题。This example is used to point out that beginner can gain significant achievement indeed.

However, not all beginners can make great successes, because the beginners have their inherent shortcomings that they have not bebeen well trained by systematical education 加个may更好，因为不是新手就一定没经过系统训练的and can not understand the whole field deeply. The institute of mathematics of Chinese Science Academy receives hundreds of letters every year, each of them claims that the author has proved Goldbach's Gold Bach’s conjecture. But the mathematicians find that most of these demonstrations lack the elementary knowledge of the number theory. After all, the geniuses like de Broglie, to some extent with enough luck, are fewness in the world. Ordinarily, most production is still maken made by expert.

In recent years, academic disciplines have become so specialized that even an expert can only research through a narrow direction, and the expert in one field is probably a beginner in another field. Nowadays many experts entered into the unacquainted domains as beginners. This kind of “beginners” usually accepts good training, and can make use of their former knowledge to the unknown domain, so they are able to make significant achievements frequently. Thomas R. Cech, who discovered catalytic RNA (ribozyme), was a chemist at first. But he was attacted by biology and became a biochemist. When he began his first faculty, he found that RNA can catalyze biochemical reaction like enzyme, and he soon make clear the machnism of catalysis. For his discovery of catalytic properties of RNA, he won the 1989's Nobel Prize of chemistry, which was attributed to his chemical background to some extent. 这段看不出你是在赞expert，so 不如如我下面所说，换一个论点-新老结合的好处和必然性，可以从这个例子看出来

In sum, it is presumptuous to assert that in "any" field of inquiry, the beginner can make more important discoveries than the expert. The advantage of beginner is only the creativity. Whatever beginner and expert want to gain achievement must establish a solid foundation of professional knowledge and keep creativity forever. 其实你的第三分论点可以在扩充成你这句话的意思，新老结合会更好。
你的例子很新，比我的新多了，呵呵。可分析的确少了些，你看高分范文都不是靠例子取胜的。分析应更深入些，如一段中分析新手究竟优势在哪儿--不受禁锢，勇气等等，思路要打开
PS：加油，你也看到了我是十五天玩命才有一些想法的，所以，意见仅供参考一下吧。你一定行的。

GrowlywolfUID: 200584

偶现在只是会举例子，不会分析了。
还有10天考试，希望来得及

mondiaUID: 193825

第一篇练笔，未限时，514 words，已经word校对拼写。

不行了，提笔就忘字，一个"观点"居然要想半分钟才能想起来idea，亏得老板平时总在骂我们没有own idea。

个人感觉论证形式有些单薄，三段都是举例，没有其他的论证方式。



Issue87 "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."

提纲：
观点：论题太绝对
1、新手不受什么已有框架的限制，的确可能做出重要的发现。eg. 德布罗意发现波粒二象性还是觉得例子是否会被人认为不是"新手"

2、但是新手固有的缺陷是缺乏系统训练和对该领域全面的了解，因此更多的时候还是专家做出的发现更多。eg. 中科院数学所每年收到几百封号称解决哥德巴赫猜想的信。
3、现在的学科分类越来越细，很多某领域的专家在其他领域也是新手。这样的新手可以利用原领域的背景做出重大发现来。eg. 发现核酶的Cech，1989年诺贝尔化学奖。结论：不论是新手还是专家，想做出重大发现都需要有坚实的基础以及保持创新的精神。这不错

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The beginner who does not hold the conventional viewpoints, of course, is not limited by the existed frames. When he/her enters into a new field, he/hershe can offer his own ideas, even尽管?even if which seem like daydreams. Sometimes, these new ideas may be never flashed in the brains of expert, but改一下结构吧，句子成分不对了；为什么but? they often exploit a new domain. Louis de Broglie, who was an aristocrat and a master of literature at his twenties, 去掉逗号，前后合并吧came into the field of modern physics. When he wrote his thesis of Ph. D Ph. D.  , he argued that any elementary particle, besides photon, has wave-particle dualism. This opinion, which was never dared to think about by physicists, burst like a shell over the domain of quantum theory, and fewa few people would believe it. Paul Langevin ---- de Broglie's teacher, a famous physicist, brought de Broglie's thesis to Einstein, and getgot a confirmed reply. As a result, the de Broglie's equation is becomesone of the most important basic equations in quantum theory. What is interesting is that De Broglie imagined this equation upon nothing! This example is used to point out that beginner can gain significant achievement indeed.

However, not all beginners can make great successes, because the beginners have their inherent shortcomings that they have not bebeen well trained by systematical education and can not understand the whole field deeply. The institute of mathematics of Chinese Science Academy receives hundreds of letters every year, each of them claims that the author has proved Goldbach's conjecture. But the mathematicians find that most of these demonstrations lack the elementary knowledge of the number theory. After all, the geniuses like de Broglie, to some extent with enough luck这个表述。。, are fewness in the world. Ordinarily, most production复数？ is still maken madeby expert.

In recent years, academic disciplines have become so specialized that even an expert can only research through a narrow direction, and the expert in one field is probably a beginner in another field. Nowadays many experts entered into the unacquainted domains as beginners. This kind of "beginners" usually accepts good training, and can make use of their former knowledge to the unknown domain, so they are able to make significant achievements frequently. Thomas R. Cech, who discovered catalytic RNA (ribozyme), was a chemist at first. But he was attacted? by biology and became a biochemist. When he began his first faculty, he found that RNA can catalyze biochemical reaction like enzyme, and he soon make clear the machnismmechanism? of catalysis. For his discovery of catalytic properties of RNA, he won the 1989's Nobel Prize of chemistry, which was attributed to his chemical background to some extent.

In sum, it is presumptuous to assert that in "any" field of inquiry, the beginner can make more important discoveries than the expert. The advantage of beginner is only the creativity. Whatever beginner and expert want to gain achievement must establish a solid foundation of professional knowledge and keep creativity forever.可以再展开写一下各自的优势，为什么新手能有大发现


大言不惭：
还是那句话：例子是否会被人认为不是"新手"
因为例子在分析中被委以重任。
不过从一个领域专家的是另一个领域的新手来"破阵"，
没有想到的说……疏漏了…
语言有很多问题的说….


好累啊.....

GrowlywolfUID: 200584

根据历史记载，德布罗意在量子力学上是个彻头彻尾的新手，在他读他的Ph.D之前，他对物理学基本是一窍不通，波粒二象性也是这位亲王大人一时心血来潮想出来的。可能是偶表述得有问题。

语言是偶滴大问题，555555，现在还在练SILENTWINGS大大的GRE句子。

peipei_fayUID: 163182

提一下意见:语法方面楼上的两位已经修改的已经差不多了.
论证方面:
第二段论证的不错,
第三段你说中科院每年都收到数百封信,但没点明这些信都来自何人,但你的文中都暗示他们都来自新手,让人有点费解.
第四段论点有点混乱,因为没有阐明到底同一个人在不同的领域新分别是新手老手,但到底他们成功的本质如何?
语言方面:你的主语大多相同，可以换着改变主语的不同成分.

刚开始写第一篇,这样的水平还是不错啦,继续努力啊!