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playbearleeUID: 198693

TOPIC:
Some people think the university education is preparing students for employment, others think it has other function .Discuss and say what other functions you think it should have.

A hot-debate often heard these days is that which are the purposes of university education. Some people tend to consider the function of university education is employment . As far as I concerned, it is no denying that it is of great significance, but some other functions we should not ignore.

University , with a large number of high-level teachers and facilities, is a favorable place to get oneself to acquaint with the mental assets. Academic subjects represent the accumulated wisdom of our ancestors down through the ages such as Renaissance ,the law of gravity and the exploration of the outer space. Academic subjects give students great opportunities to get in touch with these best literatures and epoch-making scientific and geographical discoveries in the world.

In addition, it is also university education’s function that how to resist temptations well .With flexible timetables, students have to confront with some inducements, such as playing PC game, skipping classes. Not only the energy but also the time would be waste if someone indulged in these time fillers, The university education should guide students to be self-discipline persons.

Finally, as the old saying goes” Man does not live by bread alone”. University education devotes solely to academic matters will be not enough. To some extent, it is a extremely important function for university education to lead students to develop their appropriate outlook on life and world so that they are able to distinguish right from wrong in this complex society.
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playbearleeUID: 198693

这个都不能识别字母自动换行呀，看起来好丑的哦，呵呵

bqianaUID: 193168

不错！however，

（1）第二段，mental assets空洞了些
大学教育的实质是什么？和12年制的本质区别是什么？
（2）第三段，how to resist temptations well 论点论据缺乏力度
很多人读完大学还是抵制不住诱惑，知识教育并不等同于德育！
（3）university education is preparing students for employment 没有充分阐述分析该观点的利弊，有跑题的嫌疑，其实可结合上述思路一起分析之，上策也！
（4）开头结尾可以。

Estimation －Band 6

playbearleeUID: 198693

谢谢，我会努力的，一直到老大能够Estimation －＞Band 6
呵呵，再次感谢