ISSUE144 迟来的作业 构思了很久又写了很久的第一篇，期待大大的砖头！

nora0020UID: 104886

我的第一篇，边查字典边写，不管怎么样终于成文了，想就想了3天，又写了很久，还是写了个乱七八糟。
写的过程中才发现自己需要加强的是什么，以后还要多写才行
期待大家的砖，我也会经常上来拍砖，应该能偷学很多东西吧！ :D  ;)
I144  写了523个字，已经用word 修改过，没有限时，觉得语言实在很匮乏

In this morden world, there are a huge number of art works, ancient and contemporary, commended and criticized, surrounding people's lives. We could frequently catch the vision of critical articles that instructed new original art of works from the critics view. Nevertheless, the artists, the very persons, make their work the lasting value to the soiety which not only because the thinking from a specifical work being acceptable received is more probably influences others deeply and remains as long as
it could but because it has its own meanings show to us and could open our eyes to think  more about the world.


Comparing to the art works, critic's voice is extraordinary groundless that it could be changed every moment in any place and meanwhile impacted by so many situactions such as society environment, life experience and the like, which localized their mind to frustrate finding the authentical implication from the works. However the artists give us certain  thought even could continue lasting for centuries. In addition, takes "the statue of
liberty" which lies in the New York city for example, it is not merely a masterpiece of  sculptures in the past times, but even as a symbolization showed to later generations the liberity of American coming into a new era that may lasting forever in people's mind.


We also could obviously find another reason to warrant how deficiently this view is.  Although the critics put their opinions ostensibly seems meaningful to make useful  activities which could let others familiar with the significative and interesting works from the artists, the commonalty, in the same way, always have a misleading feals from the evaluate of cirtics toward a powerful works which originally meet people's will and expect to become a famous one then at last come to a frustrated ending. In other words, if Voltarie did not reject Shakespear's classics, if Dante's "Divine Comedy" had little chance to present as a bedlamite's ill mentality, and if Von Gogh's "sunflower" could be approved sometime earlier we may have hold more comfortable and larger influence lasting values for the society. Overall, analyses what is mentioned upward are apparantly indicate the invalidity and weak authority of critics' words.


On the other hand, we still cannot denied that the criticisms illustrated to recommending the works is not as useless as it looks and probably sometimes people could get available information which usually fast answer their needs. They even could tell us much crucial,  easy to be ignored phenomenon contained in a commen artwork which innovated people's  traditional thinkings. However, we still realize the final changing of people's ideas are from the artwork itself which gives the connoisseurs a eternal transformation to understand and motivate the society better.


To sum up, notwithstanding critics do make some effort to give the society something look like lasting values, judging from all evidence offered above, we could easily come to the conclusion that the society lasting value giver should not be the critic from he/she's uncertained, easy changed attitude to the works, also from the misleading possibilities
that guide people to the wrong situation and even bloke the progress of society.

nora0020UID: 104886

自己顶，砖头的来

nora0020UID: 104886

我等得花儿也谢了，好心人帮帮忙吧

深谷幽兰UID: 196550

In this morden world, there are a huge number of art works, ancient and contemporary, commended and criticized, surrounding people's lives. We could frequently catch the vision of critical articles that instructed new original art of works from the critics view. Nevertheless, the artists, the very persons, make their work the lasting value to the soiety which not only because the thinking from a specifical work being acceptable received is more probably influences others deeply and remains as long as
it could but because it has its own meanings show to us and could open our eyes to think more about the world.你的POSITION句好长啊!个人倾向于简洁明了的表达主旨


Comparing to the art works, critic's voice is extraordinary groundless that it could be changed every moment in any place and meanwhile impacted by so many situactions such as society environment, life experience and the like, which localized their mind to frustrate finding the authentical implication from the works. //However the artists give us certain thought even could continue lasting for centuries. In addition, takes "the statue of
liberty" which lies in the New York city for example, it is not merely a masterpiece of sculptures in the past times, but even as a symbolization showed to later generations the liberity of American coming into a new era that may lasting forever in people's mind.这一段你谈了两个方面,两个方面感觉都很薄弱,最好一段只谈一点


We also could obviously find another reason to warrant how deficiently this view is. 这句话感觉有点像ARGUAlthough the critics put their opinions ostensibly seems meaningful to make useful activities which could let others familiar with the significative and interesting works from the artists, the commonalty, in the same way, always have a misleading feals from the evaluate evaluationof cirtics toward a powerful works which originally meet people's will and expect to become a famous one then at last come to a frustrated ending. In other words, if Voltarie did not reject Shakespear's classics, if Dante's "Divine Comedy" had little chance to present as a bedlamite's ill mentality, and if Von Gogh's "sunflower" could be approved sometime earlier we may have hold more comfortable and larger influence lasting values for the society. Overall, analyses what is mentioned upward are 去掉apparantly indicates the invalidity and weak authority of critics' words.


On the other hand, we still cannot denied that the criticisms illustrated to recommending the works is not as useless as it looks and probably sometimes people could get available information which usually fast answer their needs. They even could tell us much crucial, easy to be ignored phenomenon contained in a commen artwork which innovated people's traditional thinkings. However, we still realize the final changing of people's ideas are from the artwork itself which gives the connoisseurs a eternal transformation to understand and motivate the society better.激发社会更好?搭配不太恰当吧!


To sum up, notwithstanding critics do make some effort to give the society something look like lasting values, judging from all evidence offered above, we could easily come to the conclusion that the society lasting value giver should not be the critic from he/she's uncertained, easy changed attitude to the works, also from the misleading possibilities
that guide people to the wrong situation and even bloke the progress of society.

总的来说，第一篇写成这样已经很不错了，我第一篇才挤了三百多个词呢：）
加油！

猫猫624UID: 171232

In this morden modern world, there are a huge large number of art works, ancient and contemporary, commended and criticized, surrounding people's lives. We could frequently catch the vision of critical articles that instructed new original art of works from the critics view. Nevertheless, the artists, the very persons, make their work the lasting value to the soiety society which not only because the thinking from a specifical work being acceptable received is more probably influences others deeply and remains as long as
it could but because it has its own meanings show to us and could open our eyes to think more about the world.


Comparing to the art works, critic's voice is extraordinary 有点绝对 groundless that it could be changed every moment in any place and meanwhile impacted by so many situactions situationsuch as society environment, life experience and the like, which localized their mind to frustrate finding the authentical autheticable implication from the works. However the artists give us certain thought even could continue lasting for centuries. In addition, takes "the statue of
liberty" which lies in the New York city for example, it is not merely a masterpiece of sculptures in the past times, but even as a symbolization showed to later generations the liberity liberty of American coming into a new era that may lasting forever in people's mind.


We also could obviously find another reason to warrant how deficiently this view is. Although the critics put their opinions ostensibly seems meaningful to make useful activities which could let others familiar with the significative significant  and interesting works from the artists, the commonalty, in the same way, always have a misleading feals feelsfrom the evaluate of critics critics toward a powerful works which originally meet people's will and expect to become a famous one then at last come to a frustrated ending. In other words, if Voltarie Voltaire did not reject Shakespear's Shakespeare’sclassics, if Dante's "Divine Comedy" had little chance to present as a bedlamite's ill mentality, and if Von Gogh's "sunflower" could be approved sometime earlier we may have hold more comfortable and larger influence lasting values for the society. Overall, analyses what is mentioned upward are apparently indicate the invalidity and weak authority of critics' words.


On the other hand, we still cannot denied deny that the criticisms illustrated to recommending the works is not as useless as it looks and probably sometimes people could get available information which usually fast answer their needs. They even could tell us much crucial, easy to be ignored phenomenon contained in a commen common artwork which innovated people's traditional thinkingsthoughts. However, we still realize the final changing of people's ideas are from the artwork itself which gives the connoisseurs a an eternal transformation to understand and motivate the society better.


To sum up, notwithstanding critics do make some effort to give the society something look like lasting values, judging from all evidence offered above, we could easily come to the conclusion that the society lasting value giver should not be the critic from he/she's uncertained uncertain, easy changed attitude to the works, also from the misleading possibilities
that guide people to the wrong situation and even bloke the progress of society.
文章逻辑有点乱，论证感觉不是很到位, 避免思维跳跃。前面说critics的负面用词有点绝对了，文章中拼写错误多，好像楼主说用word 修改过，郁闷。。。。。