Issue13 第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！

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Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.
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提纲
1语言的本质
2语言的内涵
3反说一下
With the demanding of communicating with outsider more requiring a same language to take on a bridge with different people, English stands on this position in which various countries could exchange their minds. Consequently another problem are raising out that should our government protect these lesser-known languages from extinction? As far as I am concerned, the answer is we have the responsibility to do it.

Although some argued that the protection of less-known languages is useless in that the main meaning of language is to communicating with each other. Since the requirement of exchanging the mind changed from local residents to world wide from all over, the language which could not served as its function should be replaced with the common used one. We need not to find further for the example that India and Vietnam, these two countries in Asia. Each of them has replaced, although influenced by force from foreigner, their own language respectively with English and France, the two that are more widely used ones. No one could deny that after doing that, the two countries have been more accepted by the world in that they acquire the basic right to propagandize their claims to the rest of world more easily than their own special ones that only used in restricted areas. In a word, using a widely used language might benefit themselves.

However we could not abandon these less-known languages in that special languages are the represents of local history and culture, the two that dominates the country. Without culture and history, people might ask the meaning of life and loss the religion in perceive. There are many reasons for government to protect it now. For example the two countries mentioned above still encourage the native language to be spoken except their official language in that their national spirits are represented in it and long time history was transmitted in this language. In addition, in Singapore and China, these multi-nationalities countries, except the official language, many dialects are preserved and encouraged to use in the local areas so that their customs and religions will be handed to next generation. In short the preservation of dialects of minority and local residents provides a way for them to keep their own culture in this modern society in which the world tend to become same.

On the contrary, if these lesser-known languages are lost and ruled out by modern people, not only the history and culture will disappeared, but also the relationship between people is diluted by the direct trend of profits and money. Just imagine you, alone, are on the other side of the planet, how happy you will be if a friend, growing with you together in the same, is beyond you. You, two, could spend this lonely time in sweet memory of childhood, school time and even a little quarrels between each other. Furthermore, the scholars in studying languages must also oppose the abandoning the lesser-known languages in order to find out the correlation ship of people hidden in the liberty. Thus we have to encourage the use of these languages in that more benefits will ornament our daily life.

In a conclusion, our government should take action to avoid the disappear of these lesser-known language. Only when these cherished languages are preserved and used in the proper time for the purpose of adding new elements into the widely spoken language, could the existence of them will not be difficult for our government.

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第二段没看明白，开头好像有语病。你的意思是不是这样：政府在保护less-known languages的同时，也应该重视大语种？
第三段感觉是全文最好的一段，最切题。
第四段开始的On the contrary似乎有点不合适，因为这段与上一段的意思是顺承关系。另外，这一段中的那个假设论证完全没看懂，是不是我理解有问题？

逻辑应该再加强一下。帮忙看看我的Issue
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=257302

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第二段是想说语言的本质及交流，而english满足了这一点所以英语占主导
第四段没话了，反说一下，不保护语言会有恶果，举两个例子，没逻辑
加强一下
谢谢，回拍去

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