Issue51 同主题education，强迫限时写作，仍有差距（一定回拍，请留下链接）

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Issue51  同主题education，强迫限时写作，仍有差距（一定回拍，请留下链接）
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：42分0秒     473words
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Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
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立场：部分赞同，即满足学生的需要和兴趣可以产生有效的教育，但只有同时兼顾社会的需要的时候，这个教育才是真正有效的！
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1．        Designing by students’ needs 可以为就业培养专门的人才；by students’ interests 可以激发学生的积极性来更好的吸收知识；
2．        但only by students’ needs 能造成学校的短视行为；而only by students’ interests 受到学生不成熟的影响；
3．        只有与此同时考虑到社会的需求，才能更好的创造一个高效的教育环境。
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It is probably true that for better educating our children, we should design our curriculum not only take students’ needs into consideration, but also concern their interests. Meeting their needs is to guarantee that students may have a good job opportunity for the future; meeting their interests is for their better understanding. Nevertheless, we should not just focus on these two factors to construct an effective education; and we must also design our education in the need of the society.

To begin with, designing education to meet students’ individual needs and interests may be effective in the terms of the students themselves. As we know, one important goal of education is to prepare students for jobs. That means, in the procedure of education, teachers should teach them knowledge and skills in some special fields, such as let students go some field trip into factories to help them gain some first-hand experiences for being skilled workers and furthermore help them choose some relevant books for their future worker-occupations. These training, I call, is job-oriented. In addition, the other purpose of education is to transit knowledge which allows our students to be equipped with basic capabilities to compete in the modern society. So how can we transit knowledge effectively? I think many educators will agree that (and I paraphrase) " interest is the best teacher for students." Not only can interests provoke the desire to pursue knowledge, but also guide them to better learn more by themselves and be more self-reliance in their daily lives.

However, we are about to lose some crucial envisions if we only design the class for students' needs and interests. Just image, if we design education by students’ needs, some schools may be shortsighted so that they probably provide the current most-needed skills, while they must forget to consider changes and uncertainness about the future. What if job-markets change their taste and needs? Undoubtedly, most of these "special-trained" students will find themselves unemployed. Meanwhile, students are immature and little-informed about their interests, so education systems designed by these interests are groundless and non-convincible.

Therefore in my opinion, we should not only consider students' needs and interests, but also our society's needs which are involved both the present and the future. As far as my country is concerned, our society is becoming increasingly dependent on international trades so that our education system should accordingly teach our students to have basic international knowledge and perspectives to treat this trend, that is, in order to improve our country economy, we should actively exchange our minds and goods with the whole world.

In sum, although designing education by students’ needs and interests is acceptable, it could cause some shortsighted and immature decisions at the same time. Thus to better construct an effective education system, we should also focus on our society’s needs to avoid the above shortcomings.


自我感觉这篇写得挺烂的，好多的论证都没展开，而且还喊了不少的口号。但我也略微了解到限时的真正含义，希望求得以后不断的加强。

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我来  ：）  占座～～ 是BIT耶～～呵呵

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No.1 Issue51 同主题education，强迫限时写作，仍有差距（一定回拍，请留下链接）
Issue51 同主题education，强迫限时写作，仍有差距（一定回拍，请留下链接）
------摘要------
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户 共用时间：42分0秒 473words
------题目------
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
――提纲――
立场：部分赞同，即满足学生的需要和兴趣可以产生有效的教育，但只有同时兼顾社会的需要的时候，这个教育才是真正有效的！
正文：
1． Designing by students’ needs 可以为就业培养专门的人才；by students’ interests 可以激发学生的积极性来更好的吸收知识；
2． 但only by students’ needs 能造成学校的短视行为；而only by students’ interests 受到学生不成熟的影响；
3． 只有与此同时考虑到社会的需求，才能更好的创造一个高效的教育环境。
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It is probably true that for better educating our children, we should design our curriculum not only take students’ needs into consideration, but also concern their interests. Meeting their needs is to guarantee that students may have a good job opportunity for the future; meeting[是deliberated repetition吗？focusing on] their interests is for their better understanding[understanding what]. Nevertheless, we should not just focus on『solely rely on』 these two factors to construct an effective education; and we must also design our education in the need of the society.[ 思路清晰还不错的，但是能感觉到限时所导致的句式和用词的束缚]

To begin with, designing education to meet students’ individual needs and interests may be effective in the 『get rid of “the ”』terms of the 『get rid of “the ”』students themselves. As we know, one important goal of education is to prepare students for jobs. That means, in the procedure of education, teachers should teach them knowledge and skills in some special fields, such as let students go some field trip[confused??internship?] into factories to help them gain some first-hand experiences for being skilled workers and furthermore help them choose some relevant books for their future worker-occupations. These training, I call, is job-oriented. In addition, the other purpose of education is to transit[transmit] knowledge which allows our students to be equipped with basic capabilities to compete in the 『get rid of “the ”』modern society. So how can we transit[transmit]  knowledge effectively? I think many educators will agree that (and I paraphrase) " interest is the best teacher for students." Not only can interests provoke the desire to pursue knowledge, but also guide them to better learn[learning] more by themselves and be more self-reliance in their daily lives.

However, we are about to lose some crucial envisions『错了？？』 if we only design the class【we design the class only for】 for students' needs and interests. Just image, if we design education by students’ needs, some schools may be shortsighted so that they probably provide the current most-needed skills, while they must forget to consider changes and uncertainness about the future. What if job-markets change their taste and needs? Undoubtedly, most of these "special-trained" students will find themselves unemployed. Meanwhile, students are immature and little-informed about their interests, so education systems designed by these interests are groundless and non-convincible.

Therefore in my opinion, [ last paragraph didn’t mention our society's needs,例子是说了只关注needs和interests导致的对学生的问题 尤其是interest那部分，学生的兴趣不成熟 相对的是education应该有强制的成分而不是依着学生，这个和依据社会需要好像跳跃了why therefore?] we should not only consider students' needs and interests, but also our society's needs which are involved both the present and the future. As far as my country is concerned, our society is becoming increasingly dependent on international trades so that our education system should accordingly teach our students to have basic international knowledge and perspectives to treat this trend, that is, in order to improve our country economy, we should actively exchange our minds and goods with the whole world. 【后面谈trade的；例子再编的具体点吧 这么看还是象论述，有点吹毛求疵了  ：】】

In sum, although designing education by students’ needs and interests is acceptable, 『according to it students’ needs 。。。is acceptable，否则就不对了 』it could cause some shortsighted and immature decisions at the same time. Thus to better construct an effective education system, we should also focus on our society’s needs to avoid the above shortcomings. 【 还是跳跃 our society’s needs 】
[不能完全按照学生需要和兴趣安排教学不仅是因为还要照顾社会的需要，和学生的不成熟的特点有关，教师针对学生特点，也是对学生负责，这个没体现社会需要哦`  /要么就爸例子改了，可是那样主题显得单薄了 只说不能完全按照学生需要和兴趣安排教学的原因是为了社会 总的说很好了 限制时间 思路还很很清楚的 但是语言有问题]