argument145 第一次记时，大家看能得4分不？谢谢！！

eddiejUID: 200626

In this argument, the arguer suggests that people who snore should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more, because these people are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. To substantiate his viewpoint, he points out that the many people who snore would undergo the well known sleep apnea which can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. However, this argument is untenable for several critical flaws.
First of all, since the arguer makes a claim about people who snore in general, the people sampled for the study should be able to representative all snorers. From the study, quoted in this argument, however, we find no sign of procedures for random sampling, and have good reason to doubt if the sample is representative enough to reflect the general situation of all snorers as a whole.
In addition, there is no guarantee that sleep apnea can leave person too tired during the day. The arguer fails to consider and rule out other factors that might account for the tire, such as great pressure or nervous emotion. Under these situation, it is difficult to be energetic even have abundant sleep. Similarly, even if anyone who snores is fatter than others, which is, of course, an unwarranted supposition, it does not follow that his fat is caused by the lack of exercise, because maybe he used to engorge. Thus it is unreasonable to conclude that this interruption of breathing can leave person too tired during the day and snorers’ fat is only caused by the lack of exercise.
Finally, even if anyone who snores is fatter than others and the cause is the lack of exercise. It is unwise to eat less while exercise more, because common sense tells us it is bad for health.
All in all, the argument is not well reasoned because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer would have to demonstrate that the sample of study is representative enough to reflect the general situation of all snorers as a whole.
Meanwhile, he would have to provide evidence that sleep apnea can really leave person too tired during the day and the fat of any snorer is caused by the lack of exercise. Additionally, we would need more information about the balance between diet and exercise.

beatleslwqUID: 178933

In this argument, the arguer suggests that people who snore should try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more, because these people are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. To substantiate his viewpoint, he points out that the many people who snore would undergo the well known sleep apnea which can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise. However, this argument is untenable for several critical flaws.还可以尽量简洁的
First of all, since the arguer makes a claim about people who snore in general, the people sampled for the study should be able to representativerepresent all snorers. From the study, quoted in this argument, however, we find no sign of procedures for random sampling, and have good reason to doubt if the sample is representative enough to reflect the general situation of all snorers as a whole.
In addition, there is no guarantee that sleep apnea can leave person too tiredleave a person tired during the day. The arguer fails to consider and rule out other factors that might account for the tireexhaustion, such as great pressure or nervous emotion. Under these situation, it is difficult to be energetic even have abundant sleep. Similarly, even if anyone who snores is fatter than others, which is, of course, an unwarranted supposition, it does not follow that his fat is caused by the lack of exercise, because maybe he used to engorge. Thus it is unreasonable to conclude that this interruption of breathing can leave person too tired during the day and snorers’ fat is only caused by the lack of exercise.
Finally, even if anyone who snores is fatter than others and the cause is the lack of exercise. It is unwise to eat less while exercise more, because common sense tells us it is bad for health.为什么不展开些呢？
All in all, the argument is not well reasoned because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To make it logically acceptable, the arguer would have to demonstrate that the sample of study is representative enough to reflect the general situation of all snorers as a whole.
Meanwhile, he would have to provide evidence that sleep apnea can really leave person too tired during the day and the fat of any snorer is caused by the lack of exercise. Additionally, we would need more information about the balance between diet and exercise.结尾和开头占的比例过大，可以把他们写得简洁写以有利于中间批驳的展开，逻辑没有什么问题，虽然语言的模板味很重，恕我直言，但四分我想还是没有问题的

gusuwuUID: 200419

应该能得4分，按照ets的标准。
不过建议也建议掐头去尾，留下多一点时间来组织中间部分。
头尾占100字完全足够了。
中间我想分两段的话也许更好，火力更集中，ets看重的是develop的能力
设想出再多的flaws 如果没有展开，也没有用。

eddiejUID: 200626

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