Argument214 Funding public schools in ...... 绝对值得驻足一看,不批后悔啊,虽

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Argument214  521 words

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In each city in the region of Treehaven, the majority of the money spent on government-run public school education comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the value they place on public education. For example, Parson City typically budgets twice as much money per year as Blue City does for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. It seems clear, therefore, that Parson City residents care more about public school education than do Blue City residents.

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In this argument, the author tries to convince us the view that Parson City residents care more about public school education than do Blue City residents in the region of Treehaven. The arguer's view seems to be sound and convincing at first glance that Parson City do budget twice as much money per year as Blue City does for its public schools. However, this view is indeed weakly supported by careful examination.

In the first place, no additional information is provided to substantiate what on earth could accurately stand for the residents' concern about public school education. In the author's opinion, the money spent on public education would surely take on this function. However, many other detailed factors would influence it a lot. It is entirely possible that Parson City only devote less percentage of its budget to public education, while Blue City has devoted its most budget to its public education. From this angle, the opposite conclusion would be also well supported. So, lacking such evidence, any other argues would be meaningless.

Secondly, a new component of education has been overlooked by the author. Nowadays, education is made up of several new elements. Take universities supported by nations and those operated by individuals for example: these two both contribute a lot to the development of education while their statuses in societies differ a lot. In the statement of author, only public education is involved in, which is only one respect of education. Maybe, in Blue City, residents pay more attention to the schools run by local people rather than public ones, because public education there has been well operated for a long time.

Admittedly, the author's view could be a reasonable one in such situation that the budgets in these two cities are nearly the same, and the need for public education from their own residents is apparently similar to each other. Only through comparison of the percentage they devote to their own public education, could we determine which one of them values public education more. So, at least, a accurate comparison should based the fact that other latent factors are ruled out.

Finally, the author has hastily concluded that money, especially money from the budget of government, is the only factor that contributes to the focus of government and its residents, while many more factors should be emphasized to draw a final conclusion. Such situations that in Blue City more individuals would donate money to support public education would better substantiate that its residents care more about public education. Besides, residents in Blue City would devote themselves more into public education through other ways such as donating new teaching equipments for schools and work for schools for free on weekends.

In sum, it's unwise to make rash decision that Parson City residents care more about public school education only taking the government-providing money into account. To draw a fully-evaluated conclusion about this problem, the total budget of these two cities and the composition of their public education should be posted before analysis. And, to better assess this argument, more factors should be included in to get a final evaluation.

向日葵的孩子UID: 162587

很不错了呀。
建议限时写

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

帮我砍砍吧,也让我超时超值了
3x

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

高手来啊

GlaglacierUID: 204412

第四段是想总结前两段吗？但给人感觉有点重复。感觉可以把这段的内容插到前面去。内容总的已经不错了呀，错误点都批了。另外，universities supported by nations and those operated by individuals -----没见过这样的说法呀，直接public schools and private schools不是更好吗？倒数第二段可以先列出一些除了money from the budget of government之外其它影响因素，然后从中挑两个具体说明。虽然内容还是差不多，但我感觉结构上更清晰。偶看得可能不是很仔细，你随便参考一下吧。呵呵

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

这几天在猛看提纲增加储备
没有来看
不好意思啊
考完拍你

GlaglacierUID: 204412

拍什么啊？晓得我是谁啊？

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

大虾？