issue 39

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"The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vastly overrated: most people could learn more by studying and reading on their own for four years than by pursuing a university or college degree."

40 minutes

Generally speaking, a man without education, especially higher-level education, is an unfortunate victim deprived of one of the greatest opportunities of the 21th century. In a large sense, the importance of attending a university or college can never be exaggerated or overrated. Although a vast number of people hold totally different opinion that an individual would acquire more knowledge without attending formal discipline of universities, I, as opposed to this standpoint, would like to present evidence to support the function of universities of colleges.
The last century, in which scientific and technological changes have progressed exponentially, has witnessed the importance of higher education. Streamlines, symbols of industrialization, could only be programmed or manipulated by staffs with skilled workers, which does not necessarily equate to traditional ones. In another word, they must master fundamentals of a certain technique which can only attained through 3-4 years' formal training. A recent survey conducted by authorative agent indicates that in GM alone, 80% or more employees own at least bachelor's degree. Because of complexity of technology, it becomes more and more difficult to overcome former simple technical problems only through discussion with counterparts, instead, well-devised training projects, aiming at enhancing ability of workers from virtually all aspects, are in great need correspondingly.
Certainly, university or college benefits us not only in practical aspects, but also in spiritual ones. Though it might seem very likely that a graduate will do nothing but niggling items at first, his or hers spiritual outlook would turn out to be utterly different from those without high-level education. For example, in any university dedicated to pluralism and universality, both arts and sciences constitute the most significant ingredients for the integrity of an individual. A student majored in physicist would be entitled the right to appreciate valuable or essential knowledge of music, which contribute greatly to the student's final success. Vice versa, professional painting students could savor each segment of beauty brought by physics if provided appropriately. Besides, mutual discussions with counterparts, such as fruitful seminars and workshops launched by various societies, and academic debates altogether forge a full man.
The importance of attending university is not limited to what discussed above. Universities are determined to be wells of wisdom, and consequently, bring the society with meritocracy and intellectuals, those immortal figures long remembered by posterities. Through history of university, university has served us as incubators or greenhouses for genius.Isac Newton, founder of modern physicist, attributed his achievement to nurture of University of Cambridge because his basic talent in science was developed under free academic atmosphere of this prominent university. What deserves a mention here is that university also provides every qualified students the ability to synthesis and relate, weigh cause and effect, and see things in historical perspectives. Mr. Tony Blair, current Premiere of UK, had remarked (I here paraphrase) that it was in Oxford, his alma mater, that he was trained to be superior.
Finally, it is undeniable that knowledge from other channels, such as experience, self-teaching, and practical account is extremely useful and valuable. However, it importance, to a large sense, cannot surpass that of attending university.
To conclude, intellectual and spiritual pursuit requires deep reflection about whether the importance of being enrolled in a university or a college and spending four years' time to study is overrated. Nonetheless, from what has been discussed above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that higher education is worthwhile under any circumstance.

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Generally speaking, a man without education, especially higher-level education, is an unfortunate victim deprived of one of the greatest opportunities of the 21th century. 有这么严重么？没上大学就这么unfortunate？In a large sense, the importance of attending a university or college can never be exaggerated or overrated. Although a vast number of people hold totally different opinion that an individual would acquire more knowledge without attending formal discipline of universities, I, as opposed to this standpoint, would like to present evidence to support the function of universities of colleges.开头稍微有些长，而且首句最好再严密点，上来就让我有一种想反驳你的感觉（不知道别人有没有），这样怕是很难继续被你说服

The last century, in which scientific and technological changes have progressed exponentially, has witnessed the importance of higher education. Streamlines, symbols of industrialization, could only be programmed or manipulated by staffs with skilled workers, which does not necessarily equate to traditional ones. In another word, they must master fundamentals of a certain technique which can only attained through 3-4 years' formal training.does 3-4 years formal training equal to higher education？ Or it is the intellectual benefit from college？ A recent survey conducted by authorative agent indicates that in GM alone, 80% or more employees own at least bachelor's degree. Because of complexity of technology, it becomes more and more difficult to overcome former simple technical problems only through discussion with counterparts, instead, well-devised training projects, aiming at enhancing ability of workers from virtually all aspects, are in great need correspondingly.

看了这段以及后面的TS们，觉得破题上有问题。看题目：回答两个问题。1，人们对进入大学学习的获益评价过高，而且着重是intellectual benefit，所以你要回答是不是overrate了？虽然你的开头提到了这个问题，但是在后面的论述中一直没有说有没有被overrate，而是一直在强调大学的重要性。尽管重要，但是人们夸大了么？如何证明它和人们描述的重要性一致？从你的B1看，即便是说重要性也存在很多问题，你的TS说工业生产之类的方面，这和intellectual benefit是一会事儿么？然后你的例子，有没有说明需要上大学？重要性上也没有强调出来。2，接着说题目的后半句，很多人在家可以比在学校学的多。注意有个比较关系，你的整篇没提到在家如何学吧？更不说两者相比利弊如何。这样你如何能得到结论，哪个学的多？进而你如何能得到大学的作用被夸大了没有？单纯强调重要性是不够的，因为题目并没有否认它的重要，只是在问你有没有被夸大？不上大学可以不可以学到很多东西？感觉对题目的理解上有偏差。
Certainly, university or college benefits us not only in practical aspects, but also in spiritual ones. Though it might seem very likely that a graduate will do nothing but niggling items at first, his or hers spiritual outlook would turn out to be utterly different from those without high-level education. For example, in any university dedicated to pluralism and universality, both arts and sciences constitute the most significant ingredients for the integrity of an individual. A student majored in physicist would be entitled the right to appreciate valuable or essential knowledge of music, which contribute greatly to the student's final success. Vice versa, professional painting students could savor each segment of beauty brought by physics if provided appropriately. Besides, mutual discussions with counterparts, such as fruitful seminars and workshops launched by various societies, and academic debates altogether forge a full man.

The importance of attending university is not limited to what discussed above. Universities are determined to be wells of wisdom, and consequently, bring the society with meritocracy and intellectuals, those immortal figures long remembered by posterities. Through history of university, university has served us as incubators or greenhouses for genius.Isac Newton, founder of modern physicist, attributed his achievement to nurture of University of Cambridge because his basic talent in science was developed under free academic atmosphere of this prominent university. What deserves a mention here is that university also provides every qualified students the ability to synthesis and relate, weigh cause and effect, and see things in historical perspectives. Mr. Tony Blair, current Premiere of UK, had remarked (I here paraphrase) that it was in Oxford, his alma mater, that he was trained to be superior.

Finally, it is undeniable that knowledge from other channels, such as experience, self-teaching, and practical account is extremely useful and valuable. However, it importance, to a large sense, cannot surpass that of attending university.

To conclude, intellectual and spiritual pursuit requires deep reflection about whether the importance of being enrolled in a university or a college and spending four years' time to study is overrated. Nonetheless, from what has been discussed above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that higher education is worthwhile under any circumstance.

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