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发表于 2005-4-6 10:56:07 |显示全部楼层
The speaker's claim is actually threefold:(1) the primary goal of technological advancement is to increase people's efficiency;(2)increased people's efficiency could give people more leisure time;(3)everyone could get more leisure time from the increased people's efficiency which is the technological advancement's main objective.

First of all, admittedly, people could get a lot of benefits from the technological advancement, of course, including the increased efficiency. For example, the goal of the company is make a lot of money at the expense of using least time and least cost, and then get more products. Efficiency is factor which is decrease the distance to their goal they should take into account. The higher efficiency they have, the less distance they go to their objective. But the efficiency is only the goal of the technological advancement, not the primary goal which is maximizing their company's benefits. When it comes to the society, the increased efficiency enriches the societies' material fortune, and let their member enjoy more adaptable products and lower price. However, the efficiency is merely the one goal of all the objective of technological. According to the society, the main goal of the technological advancement is make the people's life more convenient and adaptable.

Secondly, the speaker unfairly assumes that the technological advancement give people more leisure time. Common sense and experience informs me that this case is a poor one. When we judge the issue is right or wrong, we should know which factor determined the people's leisure time. Is the efficiency determined people's leisure time? Of course not. On the one hand, it is determined by the people's living form and their value. For instance, some workers which crazily like their work, and that they thought work is a enjoyment, and then they do not need leisure time, work is also the other definition of the leisure time according to them. On the other hand, it is determined by the objective societies. In the era of sharply development of technology, people should continually study in order to survive. Otherwise they might be washed out from the society. In short, we can not see that the increased efficiency could lead to people having more leisure time.

Finally, granted that many people get more leisure time from the increased efficiency, which is, of course, a unwarranted assumption, there is no guarantee that everyone has more leisure time. For supporting example, one needs look no further than the Silicon Valley. Undoubtedly, the technology of Silicon Valley is the most advanced of the whole world. However, their management worker may be the busiest of the world, and their work time is higher than the average work time in America. Everyday they should deal with many information which is sometime of no use to their company. At the same time, they should filtrate much same information which is come from the continually developed internet. So their leisure time is less rather than more.

In sum, we can not simply see that the technological advancement is attributable to people having more leisure time. It is no absurd that many people have more leisure time along with the technological advancement, but this conclusion is not satisfy everyone's situation. Meanwhile, the efficiency is the one goal of the technological advancement, and it may have many objectives, such as the computer give a lot of information, the advancement of medical lead to people's life more healthy and decrease many people's pain. In the final analysis, I fundamentally disagree with the speaker's claim.

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发表于 2005-4-6 23:09:52 |显示全部楼层
Life is full of drama.

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发表于 2005-4-7 15:09:12 |显示全部楼层
好的

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发表于 2005-4-8 10:38:48 |显示全部楼层
我觉得你写的更有点象A。。。似乎很多A的标准句型。。。而且一开始没有明确提出论点。。而在论证的主体部分才提出。。。似乎有些不妥。。。此外还有一些语法错误。。。不过结尾写的还是很不错的。。。。。。有时间看看我的。。就是楼上说的那篇
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