issue 159 人类和机器的，时间不多了，大家帮忙砸啊

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The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.
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Would human mind always gain ascendency over machines? Would machines always be the tools of us? I agree with the speaker insofar that human wisdom is superior to those manmade machines. Yet, that is not to say that human would always master those former "tools" in the unforeseeable future. Moreover, with rapid developments of science and technology, no one can conclude what would be bound to take place in the future.

Undoubtedly, human beings have won the superiority over machinery so far in the following two aspects. For one thing, machines have been created to highly increase social productivity and to largely improve human living conditions. The advent of the first powerful steam engine invented by Watt in 1760s has been regarded as a milestone in human modernization.By taking advantage of motorcars, trains, vessels and even space shuttles people can travel anywhere on earth or even to the moon, if necessary, in a limited time span. Especially after the invention of computers and the net, humans are tiptoeing in a new era of information explosion and high tech revolution. People follow the inspirations deep in their minds and then create those engines;with the help of which, human race has become intrepid confronting the nature and entitled themselves the ruler of the world till now.

For another, human minds are much more complicated and unfathomable than machines, which can not think by themselves today. Even the facts of the IBM Deep Blue's triumphs over world champion on chess, Gary Kasparov, could not indicate that the computer has been cleverer than humans. After all, it is human being who creates both chess and then the computer with the program imitating human players' hobbies and tactics. The computer, be it seemingly cute, suffers a chink in the armor--devoid of self-awareness. To some extent, Kasparov was defeated by himself and his congeners.Moreover, mankind is endowed with the creative and flexible intelligence. Otherwise, those "mechanical brains" could only comply with established directions instead of self-determination.

Nevertheless, the speaker's perception that the machines would be human instruments for ever underestimates the development of the machines and indeed undervalues the creativity of human beings. It is human's instinct to explore the unknown and to research the mysterious nature. That is the foundation all the human civilization built on. Continuing to investigate the nature of human thoughts and minds, people would probably find the key to human life, just as the discovery and deciphering of DNA chromosome as the first step. Nowadays we notice some kinds of high-tech robots which could imitate human expression vividly on exhibitions in Tokyo or New York; meanwhile we call them robots and I use the word "which" to represent them above. However, once we could "create" life to machines, they would be transformed into beings as a new race, enjoying the same entitlements as we do.

Furthermore, computers have shown fleet calculating qualification, and are likely to develop other superior ability to human's if they could have thought in their own favor. One can never foresee what would occur in the remote future, like our ancestors could hardly ever know or even imagine computers to have changed human's life that largely decades ago. Then how could we arbitrarily conclude that human would always control those "machines" in the future.

In conclusion, we could not tell what would likely happen in the future, so that it would be unconvincing to presume that mankind would retain the predominance over mechanism for ever. After all, human creates those machines and utilizes them for centuries to make a stride in the progress of human development. However, it is human nature to be creative and venturous, which insures the possibility of everything. nt. However, it is human nature to be creative and venturous, which insures the possibility of everything. That is why God created human and would not be willing to endow wisdom at the first place.While, people create machines and
are much likely to make them wiser.

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Would human mind always be predominant over machines? Would machines always be the tools of us? I agree with the speaker insofar that human wisdom is superior to those manmade machines. Yet, that is not to say that human would always to master to those former tools maybe. Moreover, with fast development of science and technology, no one could tell what might happen in the future.

【 I agree with the speaker insofar that human wisdom is superior to those manmade machines.  从首段看 感觉还是在强调后面的部分  我觉得这个题很头疼 是力量均分 还是强前弱后   或者vice versa 呢？ 讨论！！！我的这篇也是存在这个问题
Yet, that is not to say that human would always to master to those former tools】

Some might argue that a glance over the human civilized history would assure the human supremacy to those tools. Admittedly, man has used engines to bring out productivity and prosperity for centuries in the progress of human evolutions. The advent of the first stream machine has been regarded as a milestone in human modernization with the tool of machines. By the usages of motorcars, trains, vessels and even space shuttles people would be able to travel anywhere on earth or to the moon, if necessary, in a limited time span. Especially after the invention of computers and the net, humans are tiptoeing a new era of information explosion and high tech development. People follow the inspiration deep in their minds and then create those machines. With the help of the engines, human race has become much more intrepid confronting the nature and called themselves the host of the world. 【 machine是工具】

Undoubtedly, human minds are much more complicated and profound 【unfathomable 】 than machines, which can not think by themselves now. Even the story of the computer's defeats over world champions on chess could not tell that the kind of computer is cleverer than humans. Apparently, it is human beings who create the computer and then develop the chess program in which copying the human players' hobbies and tactics and "teach" them to follow the principles. 【两个让步段  人比machine superior 】

Nevertheless, the speaker's presumption that the machines would be always human tools underestimates the development of the machines and indeed undervalues the creativity of human beings. 【8错 】 It is human's instinct to explore the unknown and research the mystery of nature. That is the foundation all the human civilization built on. Continuing to investigate the nature of human thoughts and minds, people would probably find the key to human life, just as the discovery and deciphering of DNA chromosome as the first step. 【 例子没说完， people would probably find the key to human life, then。。。使得machine 具备人的能力 甚至超过人的能力 】

Otherwise, we could see some kinds of high-tech robots which could even imitate human features vividly on exhibitions in Tokyo or New York. Now we call them robots and I use the word "which" to represent them in the above sentence. However, once we could "create" life to machines, they would be transformed into beings as a new race, enjoying the same entitlements as we do. Then how can you call for your superiority, and shall you? 【人称乱了啊～～～而且语气严重侮辱ETS的reviewer！。。。 】After all, one can never foresee what would take place in the remote future, like our ancestors could hardly ever know or even imagine computers to have changed human's life that largely decades ago. Then how could we conclude that human would always control those "machines" in the future.  【 没有TS  但是说得还比较清楚  就是说one can never foresee what would take place in the remote future, 】

In conclusion, we could not tell what would likely occur in the future, so that it would be arbitrary to argue that mankind would retain the predominance over machines for ever. After all, human creates those machines and utilizes them for centuries to make a stride for the progress of human society. However, it is one's nature to be creative and venturous, which insures the possibility of everything. That is why God created human and would not be willing to endow wisdom at the first place.While, people create machines and are likely to make them wiser.
【这段也是强调后面的  你把两个让步写的那么persuasive  好像不好 另外虽然是强调后者 但是理由不充分 再深入一点 把火力集中强调后者 】

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谢谢天晴了 :)
我本来设计写成前弱后强，后来实际上把后面的字数加多了，但是论证上好像是不如前面透，因为事例少了，另外两个让步段本来是一个，最后被我分开了，现在考虑应该弱化一些词，另外增强后面的层次
另外，第四段实际上是没写完，没时间了……
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