Issue159 好象有不少战友在写这篇啊！

staralwaysUID: 193479

[B]"The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."[/B]

We are living in an era in which everyday there are new scientific discoveries and technological innovation taking place. Even from the birth of the third technology revolution, machines have been playing a more and more important role in our daily livings. Engines, TV sets, ATMs, computers and so on, without which we can hardly imagine what our lives would become, as they have impact on almost every aspects of our lives. Some people are worried about that someday the machines will be superior to human beings, but others claim the opposite. In my opinion, this question should be answered according to different situations.

There is no doubt that machines are invented to serve the purpose of being tools of human minds. This can be shown most clearly as we consider the computer. When first invented in the wartime during the 1940's, it invention was aiming at help people to calculate parameters about firing a bomb. When under the proper guidance from the scientists who were working on that machine, it can help figuring out more accurate parameters and as a result, much higher rate of the success in launching a bomb. Other machines, for example the small calculator, was invented to help people calculating the arithmetic problems more accurately and conveniently. Without such tools, we may still living in an ear in which manual work is predominant.

However, the fact that machines are tools of human minds cannot be exclusively used as the reason that human mind will always be superior to them. In fact, the term "superior to" should be carefully defined. Whether it focus on the amount of work those machines can be done during a given period of time and they can complete them more quickly and accurately, or it pays attention to the creativity or originality to give a possible solution when facing some kinds of problems? Without taking this into account, the question that which is superior to the other, human minds or machines, cannot be answered effectively. In fact, the two aspects are just the key questions when we are trying to define the superiority between human minds and machines.

When it comes to the focus on the ability to complete more work in a given amount of time more conveniently and accurately, it is clear that machines are superior to the human minds. When it costs several minutes for the human minds to work out the result of a polynomial, the computer can make tens of thousands time of calculation in just one second as therefore give out the result almost immediately. When we want to predict the possible pattern of the climate in about a few of coming days, without the calculation of those super computers on many relevant factors, such as geographical differences, amount of greenhouse gases that are emitted, former records on weather changes, and even the impact from the activity of the internal of the Sun. No simple human can work out this task, even if he succeeded, the intended weather forecast would probably ironically be obsolete. In a word, in the sense of the kind of work and the promptness such work is done, the machines shows the absolute superiority to the human minds.

However, if we concentrate our attention on handle potential problems creatively or originally, this time the human minds is no doubt the final winner. The machines are mechanically doing the jobs that the human minds tells them to do all the time. They do not possess the ability to think independently at the current time, under the current development of science and technology. Someone may infer the famous chess competition between the super computer "Deep Blue" made by IBM and the most competent chess play in the world as an example to contradict the view. However, what this example reveals is just the opposite. When playing chess, the super computer do not make the decision which step to take the next time upon its own thinking, it just take the possible steps proposed by chess fans all over the world through the Internet into its calculation to figure out which one would be the best one with the highest possibility. It does nothing more than collecting information and doing calculation upon them. At the same time, the world-class chess player makes the decision solely on his mind, tackling different consequences or problems he might encounter. In this sense, the human minds is superior to the machines.

As the science and technology developing at a ever increasing rapid speed, we are trying to make the machines more and more like a human being. Artificial Intelligence, is the field that focus on its whole attention to make machines to have their own thought. While now there is a clear division when we consider the question of who is superior, it is possible that in the future the machines may develop their ability to think independently equal to the human minds, just as some scientific fictions issue: when irrelevant pieces of programs meet together, valid new one could possibly occur, and that is the thought of the machines.

倒数第三天，战友们帮忙砍啊！

AlierUID: 159518

这么长，强！
占位先，明天来看

imjasonUID: 176604

这么长，5分应该没问题了哈

staralwaysUID: 193479

最初由 imjason 发布
[B]这么长，5分应该没问题了哈 [/B]

长并不代表写得到位啊。

刚才从学校回来的路上，突然想到前面so猫好象也有段时间写的很长，说是脑海中有debate，我就怕如果考场上写成这样会不会散了。

其实我最担心的问题是碰到难写的题目写不出来就糟了。


还有先谢谢Alier啊。

枫丹UID: 166492

好长啊!请问楼主,你速度这么快,敲的时候是不是错字很少??

staralwaysUID: 193479

最初由 枫丹 发布
[B]好长啊!请问楼主,你速度这么快,敲的时候是不是错字很少?? [/B]

其实我打字速度不快的。但是最近一个星期也不知怎么搞的，写的都这么长。你仔细看的话就知道我用的基本上都是那些四、六级的词汇，而且好些时候是有金山词霸帮忙的啦。

枫丹MM有空的话这篇帮我砍下吧：）

枫丹UID: 166492

最初由 staralways 发布
[B]其实我打字速度不快的。但是最近一个星期也不知怎么搞的，?.

以下省略...... [/B]

hehe, 好的
我现在是越写越少了,从700降到500了,不知道考试的时候还会不会降

staralwaysUID: 193479

最初由 枫丹 发布
[B]hehe, 好的
我现在是越写越少了,从700降到500了,不知道考试的时候还会不会降[/B]

:D 感谢ing！

呵呵，我想不会的啦。说不定遇到你熟悉的题目，也会写不少的。我倒是感觉自己的好象是长篇流水帐。

AlierUID: 159518

我来也～～～

"The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."

We are living in an era in which我觉得用when好些 everyday there are new scientific discoveries and technological innovations taking place. Even fromsince the birth of the third technology revolution, machines have been playing a more and more important role in our daily livingslife/lives. ，such asEngines, TV sets, ATMs, computers and so on, without which we can hardly imagine what our lives would become, as they have impact on almost every aspects of our lives.这句不必要。 Some people are worried about that someday the machines will be superior to human beings, but whileothers claim the oppositeoppositely. In my opinion, this question should be answered according to different situations.

There is no doubt that machines are invented to serve the purpose of being tools of human minds. This can be shown most clearly as we consider the computer. When first invented in the wartime during the 1940's, it invention跟前面重复，两处任意去掉一处invented，invention was aiming at helphelping people to不要to calculate parameters about？不太确定这个介词对不对 firing a bomb. When under the proper guidance fromof the scientists who were working on that machine, it can help figuring out more accurate parameters and as a result, much higher rate of the success in launching a bomb注意这句的主语是it，也就是机器，那么后面的rate处就应该改一下，还有前面的that machine 处也有点问题 . Other machines, for examplesuch as/say the small calculator, was invented to help people calculatingcalculate the arithmetic problems more accurately and conveniently. Without such tools, we may still living in an ear in which manual work is predominant.这段是在说明机器是用于服务人，但是没有任何句子或者叙述把这个跟题目－人和机器哪个优越联系起来，如果加一句稍微带下，并且引出下段就更好了。

However, the fact that machines are tools of human minds cannot be exclusively used as the reason that human mind will always be superior to them. In fact, the term "superior to" should be carefully defined. Whether it focus on the amount of work those machines can be done during a given period of time and they can complete them more quickly and accurately, or it pays attention to the creativity or originality to give a possible solution when facing some kinds of problems? Without taking this into account, the question that which is superior to the other, human minds or machines, cannot be answered effectively. In fact, the two aspects are just the key questions when we are trying to define the superiority between human minds and machines.这段中心是说superiority should be defined，展开得不错，但是问题在于最终也没有得出具体的结论――superiority到底该怎样定义？ 或者是用个if..if结构具体说明在什么situation下哪个更加优越，我觉得这段就比较完整了。――哦，看到了，原来你的if－if 在下两段啊，嘿嘿，那就差不多了，这里注意过渡就行了。

When it comes to the focus on the ability to complete more work in a given amount of time more conveniently and accurately, it is clear that machines are superior to the human minds. When it costs several minutes for the human minds to work out the result of a polynomial, the computer can make tens of thousands time of calculation in just one second as therefore give out the result almost immediately. When we want to predict the possible pattern of the climate in about a few of coming days, without the calculation of those super computers on many relevant factors, such as geographical differences, amount of greenhouse gases that are emitted, former records on weather changes, and even the impact from the activity of the internal of the Sun. No simple human can work out this task, even if he succeeded, the intended weather forecast would probably ironically be obsolete. In a word, in the sense of the kind of work and the promptness such work is done, the machines shows the absolute superiority to the human minds.

However, if we concentrate our attention on handle potential problems creatively or originally, this time the human minds is no doubt the final winner. The machines are mechanically doing the jobs that the human minds tells them to do all the time. They do not possess the ability to think independently at the current time, under the current development of science and technology.这类句子应注意稍微简化下 Someone may infer the famous chess competition between the super computer "Deep Blue" made by IBM and the most competent chess play in the world as an example to contradict the view. However, what this example reveals is just the opposite. When playing chess, the super computer do not make the decision which step to take the next time upon its own thinking, it just take the possible steps proposed by chess fans all over the world through the Internet into its calculation to figure out which one would be the best one with the highest possibility. It does nothing more than collecting information and doing calculation upon them. At the same time, the world-class chess player makes the decision solely on his mind, tackling different consequences or problems he might encounter. In this sense, the human minds is superior to the machines.这两段感觉都展开得很好，有说理有例子，而且例子也分析得很透，学习ing….

As the science and technology developing at a ever increasing rapid speed, we are trying to make the machines more and more like a human being. Artificial Intelligence, is the field that focus on its whole attention to make machines to have their own thought. While now there is a clear division when we consider the question of who is superior, it is possible that in the future the machines may develop their ability to think independently equal to the human minds, just as some scientific fictions issue: when irrelevant pieces of programs meet together, valid new one could possibly occur, and that is the thought of the machines.最后这段写法比较新颖，呵呵，不过我觉得最好还是要稍微总结下，照应首段。

总体感觉段内展开不错，各段也比较照应主题，有一点点问题就是可能要多花点功夫在介词的使用上和注意段间的过渡和衔接。
基础很好，语言也不错，大家一起加油咯～～

staralwaysUID: 193479

呵呵，谢谢Alier MM！

介词的问题，其实我写的时候不管的，如果是熟练的词组那最好不过了，如果遇上不清楚的，随便抓个感觉对的就用上了。估计这样一来错误连篇了。

过渡的问题，前面好几篇文章都有被提这样的问题。现在想来可能是受中文的影响了。比如这句：In fact, the two aspects are just the key questions when we are trying to define the superiority between human minds and machines.我写的时候故意放这么一句在这里，就是想当然这里这样说了，而并没有在这段展开，那么默认的就是会在接下来的段落里展开了。或许还是用上一些标志词比较好。（下午刚刚在想这个问题，其实标志词我是有一点disfavor的。）谢谢你的提示啊。

staralwaysUID: 193479

哈哈，刚刚又编辑过了，刚才那遍，呵呵，不说了。