Issue 144 艺术类 必回拍

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144. "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
艺术家而不是评论家带给了社会一些具有持久价值的东西。

Art, one of the key issues of human being's achievements, reveals a panorama of human spiritual world. In this world of profound treasure, both the artist, the one who professes and practices imaginative works of art, and the critic, the one who interprets and evaluates works produced by artists, contribute to giving society something of lasting value.

In the course of human civilizations through thousands of years, we are invariably moved and nourished by watching, by listening, or by reading works of eminent artists.

It is artists who view the world from a unique perspective, dig eternal beauties generally hidden in nature and individuals, thus enable us to rediscover the ordinary world as we previously thought and provoke our sensuous pleasure. No matter how many years have passed, we are still impressed by the peaceful scene in the countryside painted by Jean-Baptiste Camille Corot, and are still deeply touched by the devotion of love described by O.Henry in his famous novel "The Present Of The Magi".

It is artists who forever give us spiritual comfort and inspire our sympathy by deeply understanding human emotions and complexities or suffering of life, because we, as long as human beings, taste similar love, sadness, regret and all the complex feelings aroused from life. When listening to the harmonious tunes composed by Chopin we are soothed and realize that we are not alone. When watching the films directed by F.Truffaut, we are sensitive about the fleeting time and transient youth. When faced with disastrous adversity of life, we are encouraged by the words of Tempest, the play written by Shakespeare, in the same way Beethoven was encouraged after his deaf.  

Apart from emotionally striking us, artists also insightfully observe and rationally ponder over society and human nature. And then they reveal the absurdity in society and the dark underside of humanity in all kinds of forms of art. We are shocked at the first sight and then think it over for ourselves. Thousands of years later, we are still individuals and communities weak in all aspects criticized by earlier artists. We should blush when criticizing the prejudice in King Lear or suspicion in OthelloO in Shakespeare’s greatest plays. We should sigh when seeing the testimony of war in Pable Picasso's Guernica.

Not only does the content of art impress us, but also the artistic forms which are elegant in style and rich in sentiment arouse our aesthetic feelings. We can still understand the language of art used in our preceded centuries, such as the passionate tones of Van Gogh or humorous wit of Bernard Shaw.


Were there not artists, people's spiritual world would have been a totally deserted land. Because of the lasting values lie in artistic works, we share the consistent human culture. While at the same time critics also creat perpetual values in the field of writing and aesthetics.

Critics dig the eternal beauty which lies in the works of art and clearly show why and how so that we can not only taste beauty itself but the way it is generated. It is true that everyone of us can have our own point of views about those works, but critics offer many new ways and perspectives universally applied when we do the appreciating process beyond some specific work. In this way some critics develop certain evaluating theory system on the aesthetic ground which guide us find more pleasure and new enlightenment all the time. For example, the book "The Mirror and The Lamp: Romantic Theory and The Critical Tradition" written by the famous American critic M.H.Abrams is still wildly read and republished nowadays. The way he presented on how to analyze fictions by the interaction of four elements -- the writer, the world, the work and the reader is still well applied to literature study.

Also, the only way critics convey their ideas and capture attention is writing, and there are always times when the criticism itself becomes excellent work of art.  We are fascinated by the insightful observation and witful or elegant language showed in the paragraph. I still remember when reading Virginia Wolf's critical writing against Jane Eyre and Wuthering Height, I was totally attracted by her passionate words and read it again and again. That's how critics give us something of lasting value,  thought and artistry,  in literature.

Without Critics, we may lost lots of pleasure when appreciating art works. Both of artists and critics show us aesthetic elements invariably lie in nature and human. However, in the ocean of their works, most of them have deeply sinked to the bottom or washed away as time goes by, only those with insightful content and skilled techniques can still cause waves in modern world, some of which are works of art, some are writings of criticism. After all, true values lie in nowhere but excellent works regardless of the roles of individuals who create them, that is to say, no matter they are artists or critics.

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明天就考，但还是要学习学习

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144. "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
艺术家而不是评论家带给了社会一些具有持久价值的东西。

Art, one of the key issues of human being's achievements, reveals a panorama of human spiritual world. In this world of profound treasure, both the artist, the one who professes and practices imaginative works of art, and the critic, the one who interprets and evaluates works produced by artists, contribute to giving society something of lasting value.
开头尽量简练提出观点

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In the course of human civilizations through thousands of years, we are invariably moved and nourished by watching, by listening, or by reading works of eminent artists.

It is artists who view the world from a unique perspective, dig eternal beauties generally hidden in nature and individuals, thus enable us to rediscover the ordinary world as we previously thought and provoke our sensuous pleasure. No matter how many years have passed, we are still impressed by the peaceful scene in the countryside painted by Jean-Baptiste Camille Corot, and are still deeply touched by the devotion of love described by O.Henry in his famous novel "The Present Of The Magi".

It is artists who forever give us spiritual comfort and inspire our sympathy by deeply understanding human emotions and complexities or suffering of life, because we, as long as human beings, taste similar love, sadness, regret and all the complex feelings aroused from life. When listening to the harmonious tunes composed by Chopin we are soothed and realize that we are not alone. When watching the films directed by F.Truffaut, we are sensitive about the fleeting time and transient youth. When faced with disastrous adversity of life, we are encouraged by the words of Tempest, the play written by Shakespeare, in the same way Beethoven was encouraged after his deaf.

Apart from emotionally striking us, artists also insightfully observe and rationally ponder over society and human nature. And then they reveal the absurdity in society and the dark underside of humanity in all kinds of forms of art. We are shocked at the first sight and then think it over for ourselves. Thousands of years later, we are still individuals and communities weak in all aspects criticized by earlier artists. We should blush when criticizing the prejudice in King Lear or suspicion in OthelloO in Shakespeare’s greatest plays. We should sigh when seeing the testimony of war in Pable Picasso's Guernica.

篇幅太长，考场也不可能写这么多

Not only does the content of art impress us, but also the artistic forms which are elegant in style and rich in sentiment arouse our aesthetic feelings. We can still understand the language of art used in our preceded centuries, such as the passionate tones of Van Gogh or humorous wit of Bernard Shaw.


Were there not artists, people's spiritual world would have been a totally deserted land. Because of the lasting values lie in artistic works, we share the consistent human culture. While at the same time critics also creat perpetual values in the field of writing and aesthetics.

Critics dig the eternal beauty which lies in the works of art and clearly show why and how so that we can not only taste beauty itself but the way it is generated. It is true that everyone of us can have our own point of views about those works, but critics offer many new ways and perspectives universally applied when we do the appreciating process beyond some specific work. In this way some critics develop certain evaluating theory system on the aesthetic ground which guide us find more pleasure and new enlightenment all the time. For example, the book "The Mirror and The Lamp: Romantic Theory and The Critical Tradition" written by the famous American critic M.H.Abrams is still wildly read and republished nowadays. The way he presented on how to analyze fictions by the interaction of four elements -- the writer, the world, the work and the reader is still well applied to literature study.

Also, the only way critics convey their ideas and capture attention is writing, and there are always times when the criticism itself becomes excellent work of art. We are fascinated by the insightful observation and witful or elegant language showed in the paragraph. I still remember when reading Virginia Wolf's critical writing against Jane Eyre and Wuthering Height, I was totally attracted by her passionate words and read it again and again. That's how critics give us something of lasting value, thought and artistry, in literature.

Without Critics, we may lost lots of pleasure when appreciating art works. Both of artists and critics show us aesthetic elements invariably lie in nature and human. However, in the ocean of their works, most of them have deeply sinked to the bottom or washed away as time goes by, only those with insightful content and skilled techniques can still cause waves in modern world, some of which are works of art, some are writings of criticism. After all, true values lie in nowhere but excellent works regardless of the roles of individuals who create them, that is to say, no matter they are artists or critics.

重点不突出，文章虽好，但不一定满足要求，个人愚见

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开头尽量简练提出观点

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篇幅太长，考场也不可能写这么多

重点不突出，文章虽好，但不一定满足要求，个人愚见[/B]

非常感谢你耐心看完我的长文……的确写得太长了，不过因为是第一次练手艺术类文章，没有限时。我就放开来写，把想到的关于艺术家和批评家的方方面面都展开了。考场上肯定是不能这样写的，但是平时练习写一类题目时尽量展开思路，以后写同类应该会顺手一点吧。

至于开头和TS我已经尽量简洁明确了，并且我还是扣着主题写的，因为我写的是二者都重要，是不是因为这点所以显得重点不突出呢？不过我会继续修改的，多谢你的批评。

另外，你的作文有要拍的给个链接好吗？

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No.1 Issue 144 艺术类 必回拍
144. "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
艺术家而不是评论家带给了社会一些具有持久价值的东西。

Art, one of the key issues of human being's achievements, reveals a panorama 【这个词用的不错】of human spiritual world. In this world of profound treasure, both the artist, the one who professes and practices imaginative works of art, and the critic, the one who interprets and evaluates works produced by artists, contribute to giving society something of lasting value. 【两者都重要的观点，但是要注意在后面的论述中进行对比】

In the course of human civilizations through thousands of years, we are invariably moved and nourished by watching, by listening, or by reading works of eminent artists. 【这段你是做什么用呢？】

It is artists who view the world from a unique perspective, dig eternal beauties generally 【这个词不够准确】hidden in nature and individuals, thus enable us to rediscover the ordinary world as we previously thought 【the world as ordinary as we once thought】and provoke our sensuous pleasure. No matter how many years have passed, 【这句用的有点太简单了】we are still impressed by the peaceful scene in the countryside painted by Jean-Baptiste Camille Corot, and are still deeply touched by the devotion of love described by O.Henry in his famous novel "The Present Of The Magi". 【文学也算吗？】
【这段交代了一些现象，艺术家的作用，感觉单拿出做为一段的意义不大】

It is artists who forever give us spiritual comfort and inspire our sympathy by deeply understanding human emotions and complexities or suffering of life, because we, as long as human beings, taste similar love, sadness, regret and all the complex feelings aroused from life. 【上面说的是美感，这里是情感共鸣，感觉其实这样分有点太复杂了】When listening to the harmonious tunes composed by Chopin we are soothed and realize that we are not alone. When watching the films directed by F.Truffaut, we are sensitive about the fleeting time and transient youth. When faced with disastrous adversity of life, we are encouraged by the words of Tempest, the play written by Shakespeare, in the same way Beethoven was encouraged after his deaf.

Apart from emotionally striking us, artists also insightfully observe and rationally ponder over society and human nature. And then they reveal the absurdity in society and the dark underside of humanity in all kinds of forms of art. We are shocked at the first sight and then think it over for ourselves. Thousands of years later, we are still individuals and communities weak in all aspects criticized by earlier artists. We should blush when criticizing the prejudice in King Lear or suspicion in OthelloO in Shakespeare’s greatest plays. We should sigh when seeing the testimony of war in Pable Picasso's Guernica. 【似乎这个方面跟value就靠不上了，更何况lasting value】

Not only does the content of art impress us, but also the artistic forms which are elegant in style and rich in sentiment arouse our aesthetic feelings. We can still understand the language of art used in our preceded centuries, such as the passionate tones of Van Gogh or humorous wit of Bernard Shaw. 【form，content，感觉跟题目越来越远了】


Were there not artists, people's spiritual world would have been a totally deserted land. Because of the lasting values lie in artistic works, we share the consistent human culture. While at the same time critics also creat perpetual values in the field of writing and aesthetics. 【终于看到了对于lasting value的叙述，但是，在前面就应该对此作出定义和解释，然后把上面论述的种种方面归结到lasting value上面，其实你上面的论述还算不错，只是缺少了最重要的总结。所以总体上面不是很着力的感觉】

Critics dig the eternal beauty 【跟艺术家完全一样的表达，换一个】which lies in the works of art and clearly show why and how so that we can not only taste beauty itself but the way it is generated. It is true that everyone of us can have our own point of views about those works, but critics offer many new 【这里用professional之类的比较好，不是说他新是说他专业权威】ways and perspectives universally applied when we do the appreciating process beyond some specific work. In this way some critics develop certain evaluating theory system on the aesthetic ground which guide us find more pleasure and new enlightenment all the time. 【你把评论家的作用归结到了pleasure 和enlightenment上面了，那么lasting value呢？】 For example, the book "The Mirror and The Lamp: Romantic Theory and The Critical Tradition" written by the famous American critic M.H.Abrams is still wildly read and republished nowadays. The way he presented on how to analyze fictions by the interaction of four elements -- the writer, the world, the work and the reader is still well applied to literature study.

Also, the only way critics convey their ideas and capture attention is writing, and there are always times when the criticism itself becomes excellent work of art. 【这个论点不好的，我认为，因为实际上这样的critic就是artist了，跟你的论点正好反了，本来要支持，结果反对了】We are fascinated by the insightful observation and witful or elegant language showed in the paragraph. I still remember when reading Virginia Wolf's critical writing against Jane Eyre and Wuthering Height, I was totally attracted by her passionate words and read it again and again. That's how critics give us something of lasting value, thought and artistry, in literature.

Without Critics, we may lost lots of pleasure when appreciating art works. Both of artists and critics show us aesthetic elements invariably lie in nature and human. However, in the ocean of their works, most of them have deeply sinked to the bottom or washed away as time goes by, only those with insightful content and skilled techniques can still cause waves in modern world, some of which are works of art, some are writings of criticism. After all, true values lie in nowhere but excellent works regardless of the roles of individuals who create them, that is to say, no matter they are artists or critics.


  【两个主要问题，一个是，文章长形式散，这样的文章考试的时限无法写出，要学会简练的分析问题，形式上面因为缺乏对于每个分论点的总结和之间的衔接而显得松散，对于一篇议论文，这样的松散是不好的。另一个问题是，对于lasting value，题目考虑的重点问题的忽略，这个是大部分写这篇文章的同学的通病。语言还是不错的。加油！】