Issue7 第四篇 超高频 猛拍之：）

connieUID: 203382

7 The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records. 59分48秒写完的，好象还是严重超时呀，顺便求教一下怎么能提高速度呀？谢了

The speaker stated that video camera is a more important form of documentation than written records for its accuracy and reliability in recording contemporary life. I conceded that it is true to some extent. However, it is just unpersuasive without considering the advantages of written records.

Admittedly, video camera does have taken vivid pictures of modern life, from which one can visualize the events that he or she cannot go through. Since it provides the incidences caught by cameras, it offers greater chance for people to watch the things happening without on the spot in person. For example, the World Cup of Football, held every four year, is often at deep night where the show taken place on the other side of earth, though it is transferred live. Without video cameras most of the interesting sports contests showing in EPSN will be incapable of presenting in front of the audiences. Also without video cameras, people cannot enjoy the art performances while they are sitting home doing amounts of troublesome housework. Without video cameras, the famous painting works and sculptures will not be familiar for so many art lover who may hardly afford the bill of traveling all world.

Competing with written records, however, video camera has one problem that it often carried by single person who had his or her own opinion about the events on camera so that some of the vital scenes are excluded consciously or subconsciously. Consider how can a person who is a supporter of environmental protection record a video accurately about the processes of deforest? So the attitude decides the quality of the camera operator’s work. Besides, especially when some of the cases come to journalism, the people who are interviewed facing the camera, which is not so common for them, may get nervous and change their normal behavior. Showing no annotations for that condition, the audiences may be misleading. Accordingly, the video camera is not so accurate as the speaker thought and it just as precise as other forms of recording with the potentiality of preconception.

Another compelling reason for written records is that they are made in more concise forms. Some of the writers usually take 100 words to prescribe an event while the video cameras may use half an hour to depict it. It is obvious that the written records save time for the readers who may just want to know what happened at a certain time and a certain place. And the video cameras waste the time on much more details of the process people are not so interested. Sometimes, it is ridiculous to give the course when people intend to know the consequence of an event. Therefore, written records, to some extent, can solve this kind of problems that video cameras have.

In sum, the written records are one of the most important documentation forms, which cannot be replaced by any other form. As long as it is concise and as accurate as other forms, in my opinion, it may probably be the everlasting way of recording in the future.

connieUID: 203382

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SmiletoG&TUID: 205318

The speaker stated that video camera is a more important form of documentation than written records for its accuracy and reliability in recording contemporary life. I conceded that it is true to some extent. However, it is just unpersuasive without considering the advantages of written records.
个人觉得用I conceded that it is…倒不如用It seems … to some extent, however,..
Admittedly, video camera does have taken vivid pictures of modern life, from which one can visualize the events that he or she cannot go through. Since it provides the incidences caught by cameras, it offers greater chance for people to watch the things happening without on the spot in person. For example, the World Cup of Football, held every four year, is often at deep night where the show taken place on the other side of earth, though it is transferred live. 前面两个复杂句的结构似乎有问题 Without video cameras most of the interesting sports contests showing in EPSN will be incapable of presenting in front of the audiences. Also without video cameras, people cannot enjoy the art performances while they are sitting home doing amounts of troublesome housework. Without video cameras, the famous painting works and sculptures will not be familiar for so many art lover who may hardly afford the bill of traveling all world.

Competing with written records, however, video camera has one problem that it often carried by single person who had his or her own opinion about the events on camera so that some of the vital scenes are excluded consciously or subconsciously. Consider how can a person who is a supporter of environmental protection record a video accurately about the processes of deforest? So the attitude decides the quality of the camera operator’s work. Besides, especially when some of the cases come to journalism, the people who are interviewed facing the camera, which is not so common for them, may get nervous and change their normal behavior. Showing no annotations for that condition, the audiences may be misleading. Accordingly, the video camera is not so accurate as the speaker thought and it just as precise as other forms of recording with the potentiality of preconception.

Another compelling reason for written records is that they are made in more concise forms. Some of the writers usually take 100 words to prescribe describe an event while the video cameras may use half an hour to depict it. It is obvious that the written records save time for the readers who may just want to know what happened at a certain time and a certain place. And the video cameras waste the time on much more details of the process people are not so interested. Sometimes, it is ridiculous to give the course when people intend to know the consequence of an event. Therefore, written records, to some extent, can solve this kind of problems that video cameras have.

In sum, the written records are one of the most important documentation forms, which cannot be replaced by any other form. As long as it is concise and as accurate as other forms, in my opinion, it may probably be the everlasting way of recording in the future.
我也刚写了这篇，楼主的作文句式和词汇显然比我丰富许多，学习中。对于论点，我觉得楼主在第一段用了一个转折似乎是想强调written records 有许多优点是需要考虑的，但在文中对written records的positive views似乎不是很多。

connieUID: 203382

谢谢，我也觉得观点不是很突出，可是不是很知道该怎么下这个结论，所以整个感觉有点怪
3x again:)

点点滴滴走过UID: 195083

顶一个

connieUID: 203382

接受拍砖，改了改开头和第一段，不知道现在怎么样了？大家继续拍呀

The speaker stated that video camera is a more important form of documentation than written records for its accuracy and reliability in recording contemporary life. I agree with it because to some degree it is true. However, there is also advantage of written records that the speaker neglected.

Admittedly, video camera does have taken vivid pictures of modern life, from which one can visualize the events that he or she cannot go through. Since it provides the incidences caught by cameras, it offers greater chance for people to watch the things happening without them on the spot in person. For example, the World Cup of Football, held every four year, is often at deep night when the show takes  place on the other side of the earth, though it is transferred live. Without video cameras most of the interesting sports contests showing in EPSN will be incapable of presenting in front of the audiences. Also without video cameras, people cannot enjoy the art performances while they are sitting home doing amounts of troublesome housework. Without video cameras, the famous painting works and sculptures will not be familiar for so many art lover who may hardly afford the bill of traveling all world.

Competing with written records, however, video camera has one problem that it often carried by single person who had his or her own opinion about the events on camera so that some of the vital scenes are excluded consciously or subconsciously. Consider how can a person who is a supporter of environmental protection record a video accurately about the processes of deforest? So the attitude decides the quality of the camera operator’s work. Besides, especially when some of the cases come to journalism, the people who are interviewed facing the camera, which is not so common for them, may get nervous and change their normal behavior. Showing no annotations for that condition, the audiences may be misleading. Accordingly, the video camera is not so accurate as the speaker thought and it just as precise as other forms of recording with the potentiality of preconception.

Another compelling reason for written records is that they are made in more concise forms. Some of the writers usually take 100 words to describe an event while the video cameras may use half an hour to depict it. It is obvious that the written records save time for the readers who may just want to know what happened at a certain time and a certain place. And the video cameras waste the time on much more details of the process people are not so interested. Sometimes, it is ridiculous to give the course when people intend to know the consequence of an event. Therefore, written records, to some extent, can solve this kind of problems that video cameras have.

In sum, the written records are one of the most important documentation forms, which cannot be replaced by any other form. As long as it is concise and as accurate as other forms, in my opinion, it may probably be the everlasting way of recording in the future.

connieUID: 203382

刚改了别人的一篇，好累，突然想起别人改我的作文的时候的感觉，特地再进来谢谢好心的G友：）

lgh21cnUID: 189875

感觉第四段比较好些，开头和第三段有些问题。

开头是在复述原论点，这是不被提倡的，只有在很难开头的情况下才使用，平常应该注意多些变化。

关于第三段，我感觉是论证反了。一般认为video camera更客观，而书面记录更容易加入个人的情感。

个人意见，仅供参考，相互学习！

connieUID: 203382

其实第三段是差不多想说这两种方法都是会引入主观的东西，不好意思，好象没有说清楚，谢谢指教了