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Issue43  第6篇 我爱砖头
------题目------
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
------正文------
Does a public official have to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader? From my view of point, this is a complex issue and should be analyzed case by case. And the complexity comes from the definition of the word "effective".

On the one hand, under the condition that the leadership is effective, in my opinion, there is not too much relationship with the ethical and moral standards. Since effective is to describe the leadership produces some decided and desired effects, but not the leadership has accordance with the ethical and moral criteria. When ruled out the ethical factors in one's political action, for the sake of the greatest proceeds and the most efficient method, a effective public official will consider the utilitarian effect or something realistic of the leadership first in his/her activity, and ethical and moral standards will be not considered as important as the practicality. For instance, if some poor people have to steal or rob in order to survive, what an effective leader will done is definitely to set them into prison, but not to relief them first and then educate them stealing is not right, although the latter way is in accordance with the ethical and moral standards. In a realistic world full of earthy thoughts, few leaders can manage to be effective to solve problems through the highest ethical and moral ways.

On the other hand, if a public official want to be effective, he/she must behave with the ethical and moral standards. Even if the activity may not accord with the standards in the process of execution for the sake of effective action, the leader must claim that the ultimate purpose is for the ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, without the moral criteria, people will not support the public official, which will result in the ineffective political action. For instance, an unjust war will exasperate the people and in a democratic society the war may not be started because of the plenty of blackballs. And even if an unjust law is established, the people may be against it not publicly and actually baffle the execution of the law. Therefore, in order to be an effective leader, a public official must claim or behave or even if pretend that his/her action measure up the highest ethical and moral standards.

Furthermore, the public voice is critical when exerting influence on the political decision. If a society is highly civilized and the people are with high moral standards, the leader will be more effective when the political purpose and action is truly in accord with high moral standards. In such society, people are willing to put money and resource to help the poor people and areas, but not only pleased to see their money used for themselves. And the public official can do more commonweals without worrying the narrow and shallow consensus.

To sum up, to be an effective leader, the public official has to maintain ethical and moral standards as the purpose while the means of reach the purpose may not be the most ethical and moral. Anyway, when the political action is in accord with the public opinion and gets the support of the people, it is effective.
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发表于 2005-7-13 20:40:56 |只看该作者
列个提纲吧!
题目是这样的:一个官员要想成为一个有效的领导,他必须有极高的民族和道德标准

思路
1. effective这个词本身就有一定的功利性和实用性在里面,官员政治作为时不可
         能所有方法都符合道德标准
2. 但一定要打着道德的大旗,以道德为政治行为目的,才有人民拥护,领导才可能有
    效
3. 舆论会影响官员是否用道德标准进行政治活动,这与人民道德素质有关
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发表于 2005-7-13 20:44:33 |只看该作者
这个题我看了北美范文,
很奇怪,
他把leadership分了三类:商业的,政治的,和精神的,论证很透彻,
就是……不切题吧?
题目明明说的是public official啊,
那就应该是政治的,
还是我对public official理解有问题啊?

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发表于 2005-7-13 21:30:15 |只看该作者
注意语法,句法,错误有点多,我后来就没改了,自己多注意注意吧
分论点一的例子很有说服力
后面2个论点实在不敢苟同,可能是我首先心理上就排斥,感觉论证也没有充分展开,
总之,观点有点太个了吧,呵呵
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Does a public official have to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader? From my view of point, this is a complex issue and should be analyzed case by case. And the complexity comes from the definition of the word "effective".



On the one hand, under the condition that the leadership is effective这句不通?, in my opinion, there is not too much relationship with between the ethical and moral standards. Since effective这是adj吧,怎么当名词用了 is to describe the leadership produces some decided and desired effects, but not the leadership has accordance with the ethical and moral criteria. When ruled out the ethical factors in one's political action, for the sake of the greatest proceeds and the most efficient method, a effective public official will consider the utilitarian effect or something realistic of the leadership first in his/her activity, and ethical and moral standards will be not considered as important as the practicality. For instance, if some poor people have to steal or rob in order to survive, what an effective leader will done is definitely to set them into prison, but not to relief them first and then educate them stealing is not right, although the latter way is in accordance with the ethical and moral standards. In a realistic world full of earthy thoughts, few leaders can manage to be effective to solve problems through the highest ethical and moral ways.



On the other hand, if a public official want to be effective, he/she must behave with the ethical and moral standards. Even if the activity may not accord with the standards in the process of execution for the sake of effective action, the leader must claim that the ultimate purpose is for the ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, without the moral criteria, people will not support the public official, which will result in the ineffective political action. For instance, an unjust war will exasperate the people and in a democratic society the war may not be started because of the plenty of blackballs. And even if an unjust law is established, the people may be against it not publicly and actually baffle the execution of the law. Therefore, in order to be an effective leader, a public official must claim or behave or even if pretend that his/her action measure up {不能确定能否加谓语}the highest ethical and moral standards.



Furthermore, the public voice is critical when exerting influence on the political decision. If a society is highly civilized and the people are with high moral standards, the leader will be more effective when the political purpose and action is truly in accord with high moral standards. In such society, people are willing to put money and resource to help the poor people and areas, but not only pleased to see their money used for themselves. And the public official can do more commonweals without worrying the narrow and shallow consensus.



To sum up, to be an effective leader, the public official has to maintain ethical and moral standards as the purpose while the means of reach the purpose may not be the most ethical and moral. Anyway, when the political action is in accord with the public opinion and gets the support of the people, it is effective.  


Originally posted by css at 2005-7-13 17:41
Issue43  第6篇 我爱砖头
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To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
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Does a public official have to mai ...

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发表于 2005-7-13 21:58:55 |只看该作者
谢谢liuxb,我搜了一下,你还没发文章?

under the condition that the leadership is effective这句不通
是很别扭,我改成when we evaluate a leadership as effective

Since effective这是adj吧,怎么当名词用了
这个effective 是指这个词的意思,作主语来着;)

even if pretend that his/her action measure up {不能确定能否加谓语}the highest ethical and moral standards
可以加的,是一个从句的谓语,句式太乱了,以后多注意!

另外,大家知道那个public official到底有多大范围吗?讨论一下吧!
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发表于 2005-7-14 12:45:08 |只看该作者
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发表于 2005-7-14 13:07:42 |只看该作者
 只要是public 就可以了吧。
 好像这里对official没有什么限制。

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发表于 2005-7-14 13:37:27 |只看该作者
你这个提纲感觉挺怪的,呵呵,标新立异啊。

Does a public official have to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader? From my view of point, this is a complex issue and should be analyzed case by case. And the complexity comes from the definition of the word "effective".

On the one hand, under the condition that the leadership is effective, in my opinion, there is not too much relationship with the ethical and moral standards. whether the leadership is effective, in my opinion, is not too much related to the ethical and moral standardsSince effective is to describe the leadership produces producingsome decided and desired effects, but not the leadership has accordancewhich is accordant with the ethical and moral criteria.前面这个句子只有原因从句,主句呢? When ruled out the ethical factors in one's political action, for the sake of the greatest proceeds and the most efficient method, a effective public official will consider the utilitarian effect or something realistic of the leadership first in his/her activity, and ethical and moral standards will be not considered as important as the practicality. For instance, if some poor people have to steal or rob in order to survive, what an effective leader will donedo is definitely to set them into prison, but not to relief them first and then educate them stealing is not rightwrong, although the latter way is in accordance with the ethical and moral standards. In a realistic world full of earthy thoughts, few leaders can manage to be effective to solve problems through the highest ethical and moral ways.

On the other hand, if a public official want to be effective, he/she must behave with the ethical and moral standards. Even if the activity may not accord with the standards in the process of execution for the sake of effective action, the leader must claim that the ultimate purpose is for the ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, without the moral criteria, people will not support the public official, which will result in the ineffective political action. For instance, an unjust war will exasperate the people and in a democratic society the war may not be started because of the plenty of blackballs. And even if an unjust law is established, the people may be against it not publicly and actually baffle the execution of the law. Therefore, in order to be an effective leader, a public official must claim or behave or even if pretend that his/her action measure up the highest ethical and moral standards. 可以换个角度写,说有时不守道德会妨碍有效性,例如人民不支持不公正的法律

Furthermore, the public voice is critical when exerting influence on the political decision. If a society is highly civilized and the people are with high moral standards, the leader will be more effective when the political purpose and action is truly in accord with high moral standards. In such society, people are willing to put money and resource to help the poor people and areas, but not only pleased to see their money used for themselves. And the public official can do more commonweals without worrying the narrow and shallow consensus. 人们愿意花钱和主题有什么关系?可以说判断官员是否守道德的标准,还得依赖大众道德素质

To sum up, to be an effective leader, the public official has to maintain ethical and moral standards as the purpose while the means of reach the purpose may not be the most ethical and moral. Anyway, when the political action is in accord with the public opinion and gets the support of the people, it is effective.
作文失败,只好申请MIT了,谁让它不要GRE呢?

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发表于 2005-7-14 14:16:13 |只看该作者
多谢G10T5, 照你的思路小改了一下!

另:to G10t5,你的issue144帮你改了,拍的有点狠,不对的地方多担待!

Issue43  第6篇 我爱砖头
------题目------
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
------正文------
Does a public official have to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader? From my view of point, this is a complex issue and should be analyzed case by case. And the complexity comes from the definition of the word "effective".

On the one hand, whether the leadership is effective, in my opinion, is not too much related to the ethical and moral standards, since effective is to describe the leadership produces some decided and desired effects, but not the leadership which is accordant with the ethical and moral criteria. When ruled out the ethical factors in one's political action, for the sake of the greatest proceeds and the most efficient method, a effective public official will consider the utilitarian effect or something realistic of the leadership first in his/her activity, and ethical and moral standards will be not considered as important as the practicality. For instance, if some poor people have to steal or rob in order to survive, what an effective leader will do is definitely to set them into prison, but not to relief them first and then educate them stealing is ignominious, although the latter way is in accordance with the ethical and moral standards. In a realistic world full of earthy thoughts, few leaders can manage to be effective to solve problems through the highest ethical and moral ways.

On the other hand, if a public official want to be effective, he/she must behave with the ethical and moral standards. Even if the activity may not accord with the standards in the process of execution for the sake of effective action, the leader must claim that the ultimate purpose is for the ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, without the moral criteria, people will not support the public official, which will result in the ineffective political action. For instance, an unjust war will exasperate the people and in a democratic society the war may not be started because of the plenty of blackballs. And even if an unjust law is established, the people may be against it not publicly and actually baffle the execution of the law. Therefore, in order to be an effective leader, a public official must claim or behave or even if pretend that his/her action measure up the highest ethical and moral standards.

Furthermore, the public voice is critical when exerting influence on the political decision. If a society is highly civilized and the people are with high moral standards, the leader will be more effective when the political purpose and action is truly in accord with high moral standards. In such society, people are willing to put money and resource to help the poor people and areas, but not only pleased to see their money used for themselves. And the public official can do more commonweals without worrying the narrow and shallow consensus. Thus, the criteria to judge whether the official is with high moral standards somewhat depends on the public morality level.

To sum up, to be an effective leader, the public official has to maintain ethical and moral standards as the purpose while the means of reach the purpose may not be the most ethical and moral. Anyway, when the political action is in accord with the public opinion and gets the support of the people, it is effective.

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发表于 2005-7-14 14:20:07 |只看该作者
其实不是我思路怪阿,
我是觉得政治家不一定做什么事都要遵守道德的,
面子上好听点,人民支持就行

还有就是那个public official,
如果真像北美范文那么考虑,
商业的,精神的都可以
那范围就宽多了
可是我只理解为政治方面的
思路就比较局限

到底应该怎样考虑呢?
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Issue43  第6篇 我爱砖头
------题目------
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
------正文------
Does a public official have to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader? From my view of point, this is a complex issue and should be analyzed case by case. And the complexity comes from the definition of the word "effective".

On the one hand, under the condition that the leadership is effective, in my opinion, there is not too much relationship with the ethical and moral standards.(这句不太顺,改后的也不是很顺,when we evaluate an official as an effective one?) Since effectiveness(名词吧?) is to describe(这里你好象是要用从句?加个that吧?请出一些) the leadership produces(这句话语法有错误,看不出来你的谓语,好乱) some decided and desired effects, but not the leadership has accordance with the ethical and moral criteria. When ruled out the ethical factors in one's political action, for the sake of the greatest proceeds and the most efficient method, an effective public official will consider the utilitarian effect or something realistic of the leadership first in his/her activity, and ethical and moral standards will be not considered as important as the practicality. For instance, if some poor people have to steal or rob in order to survive, what an effective leader will do is definitely to set them into prison, but not to release them first and then educate them stealing is not right, although the latter way is in accordance with the ethical and moral standards. In a realistic world full of earthy thoughts, few leaders can manage to be effective to solve problems through the highest ethical and moral ways.觉得偷盗的例子不是很有说服力啊,什么是高的道德标准?具有同情心就是高的道德标准吗?难道秉公执法就不道德了吗?不能说服我

On the other hand, if a public official want to be effective, he/she must behave with the ethical and moral standards. Even if the activity may not accord with the standards in the process of execution for the sake of effective action, the leader must claim that the ultimate purpose is for the ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, without the moral criteria, people will not support the public official, which will result in the ineffective political action. For instance, an unjust war will exasperate the people and in a democratic society the war may not be started because of the plenty of blackballs. And even if an unjust law is established, the people may be against it not publicly and actually baffle the execution of the law. Therefore, in order to be an effective leader, a public official must claim or behave or even if pretend that his/her action measure up the highest ethical and moral standards.可以说道德有助于为人民树立榜样
Furthermore, the public voice is critical when exerting influence on the political decision. If a society is highly civilized and the people are with high moral standards, the leader will be more effective when the political purpose and action is truly in accord with high moral standards. In such society, people are willing to put money and resource to help the poor people and areas, but not only pleased to see their money used for themselves. And the public official can do more commonweals without worrying the narrow and shallow consensus. 这里觉得很乱,不知道想说什么,怎么又说到人民的道德上去了
To sum up, to be an effective leader, the public official has to maintain ethical and moral standards as the purpose while the means of reach the purpose may not be the most ethical and moral. Anyway, when the political action is in accord with the public opinion and gets the support of the people, it is effective.

自己写完应该好好改一下,起码一些明显的拼写及语法错误要改过来。
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发表于 2005-7-14 15:13:11 |只看该作者
谢谢conquer!

偷盗的例子,嗯,个人觉得法律上看是抓贼道德了,但你能保证法律就体现的是道德最高标准吗?
偶觉得,首先要尊重每个人的不同背景,以德治,这应该比较有道德了吧?
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Issue43  第6篇 我爱砖头
------题目------
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
------正文------
Does a public official have to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards to be an effective leader? (这个开头不是很好,如果要用问句开头,可以用点is it necessary, indispensable之类的)From my view of point, (point of view)this is a complex issue and should be analyzed case by case. And the complexity comes from the definition of the word "effective".(感觉开头整体感觉不是特别好啊,说了一堆,没什么意义的话,呵呵,个人意见,不过那么短的题目本来就没什么好说的,继续看)
On the one hand, whether the leadership is effective, in my opinion, is not too much related to the ethical and moral standards, since effective(effectiveness) is to describe(the competence which enable the leadership to~~~诸如此类的话,我就改改句型,一俟自己再看看吧 ) the leadership produces some decided and desired effects, (很晦涩啊,语法错误)but not the leadership which is accordant with the ethical and moral criteria.(太长了这句话,作为中心句不要那么长吧,让人理解半天,呵呵) When ruled out the ethical factors in one's political action, for the sake of the greatest proceeds(用benefits) and the most efficient method, a(an) effective public official will consider the utilitarian effect or something realistic of the leadership first in his/her activity, and ethical and moral standards will be not considered as important as the practicality. For instance, if some poor people have to steal or rob in order to survive, what an effective leader will(should) do is definitely to set them into prison, but not to relief them first and then educate them stealing is ignominious, although the latter way is in accordance with the ethical and moral standards.(不是吧,有点奇怪的看法) In a realistic(real) world full of earthy thoughts, (这么说不好)few leaders can manage to be effective to solve problems through the highest ethical and moral ways.(我能理解你的意思,不过看了好久才看懂得,呵呵,说理不太清楚,句子不要太长了,语法错误难免)说说我的观点吧,你举的例子好像给人感觉把小偷抓进监狱是不道德的了,这种观点是受了以德治国的影响吧,我觉得例子不是很好,观点很新的说)

On the other hand, if a public official want to be effective, he/she must behave with the ethical and moral standards. Even if the activity may not accord with the standards in the process of execution for the sake of effective action, the leader must claim that the ultimate purpose is for the ethical and moral standards. Otherwise, without the moral criteria, people will not support the public official, which will result in the ineffective political action. For instance, an unjust war will exasperate the people and in a democratic society the war may not be started because of the plenty of blackballs. And even if an unjust law is established, the people may be against it not publicly and actually baffle the execution of the law. (你举的例子与道德有什么关系呢)Therefore, in order to be an effective leader, a public official must claim or behave or even if pretend that his/her action measure up the highest ethical and moral standards.

Furthermore, the public voice is critical when exerting influence on the political decision. If a society is highly civilized and the people are with high moral standards, the leader will be more effective when the political purpose and action is truly in accord with high moral standards. In such society, people are willing to put money and resource to help the poor people and areas, but not only pleased to see their money used for themselves. And the public official can do more commonweals without worrying the narrow and shallow consensus. Thus, the criteria to judge whether the official is with high moral standards somewhat depends on the public morality level.最后一段是在保留吗,社会的道德水平与一个leader一定要保持高的道德水平有什么关系呢,而且这段全是假设。
To sum up, to be an effective leader, the public official has to maintain ethical and moral standards as the purpose while the means of reach the purpose may not be the most ethical and moral. (没看懂,呵呵,好多purpose) Anyway, when the political action is in accord with (这个词也用好多遍了。Consensus,consistent也可以吧)the public opinion and gets the support of the people, it is effective.感觉观点不明确哦,一开始说道德标准和effective是矛盾的。后来说leader要想effective就必须保持道德标准,最后说社会的道德水平高,有利于保证leader的道德标准,那么你的立场到底是该还是不该呢,我还是没明白。
建议可以从人民对leader的要求上考虑,如果一个leader不以身作则,人民怎么能拥护他呢,克林顿的丑闻不是让人民对他大失所望吗,因为他lie to people,,你自己再考虑下,呵呵,只是建议。
你的语言能力还要加强哦,多记一些同义词,换着用,太单调了,呵呵,加油!!
谢谢你,虽然我只想亲吻一片雪花,你却给了我银色的世界。

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发表于 2005-7-14 19:28:18 |只看该作者
今天写了,不过太烂,自己都不敢看,等我再改改,再发给你帮我改改,呵呵,加油啊
谢谢你,虽然我只想亲吻一片雪花,你却给了我银色的世界。

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发表于 2005-7-14 19:42:05 |只看该作者
谢谢ahqiu,我再改!

等着拜读你大作阿,加油!

接受批评,再接再厉!
我见青山多妩媚,
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见我应如是

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