staralways作文修改铺

xw10030039UID: 159828

同主题 Argu  76,   辛苦斑竹了:)
请多多指导   
谢谢了!!

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[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-22 at 00:12 ]

liulin12369UID: 2112878

上次发的有人改，估计不会给我改了，我再发2篇，帮我看看吧~~555
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namevainUID: 208813

同主题Issue48，第一次写，帖子沉得好快啊....
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如蒙临幸不胜感激！

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-21 at 23:30 ]

tz0412UID: 180794

谢谢斑竹帮我改改啊，非常感谢了。

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逗逗UID: 173558

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没有得到实质性的批改,急切希望高人指点,斑竹辛苦!

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life8UID: 2104034

以后请把文章的链接粘贴进来即可，谢谢。

ISSUE 87 【已批改】
87 "In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."

The speaker asserts that the beginner will have more opportunity than expert to make important discoveries in any field of inquiry. In my view, what important is not whether he is a beginner or expert, it is crucial what qualities he has. Some qualities, such as critical thinking, active mind, deep insight, careful observation, abundant knowledge are always need. Without these qualities, no matter he is a beginner or expert, he can not have any discoveries.

Scepticism may be the most important quality for discovery. Only when some one dare to challenge what he had been taught, can he pave the way for scientific progress. For example, Copernicus, without passive acceptance of the notion that the earth was in a fixed position at the center of the universe, advanced the new theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun, disrupting the Ptolemaic system of astronomy, which paved the way for Galileo and Newton’s principles later. The achievement of Copernicus is proof enough of the value of skepticism.

Scepticism is not the only one quality for making great discoveries, other qualities are also important, such as active mind, deep insight, careful observation, abundant knowledge and so on. Without deep insight and careful observation, we can not find the discoveries even it is in front of us; without active mind, we can not design the experiment to testify the discovery; Without abundant knowledge, we can not explain what we have seen and what we have done.

Admittedly, some beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries. However, when we look back to these beginners, in fact, they all have qualities we mentioned above at the same time. Some famous scientists, for example, Faraday, Galileo and Einstein are such beginners when they found their new theory. So it is not beginner but quality that determine the important discovery.

In sum, for what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that without the necessary qualities, one can not do great discovery no matter he is a beginner or expert.

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"In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries."

The speaker asserts that the beginner will have more opportunity than expert to make important discoveries in any field of inquiry. In my view, what important is not whether he is a beginner or expert, it is crucial what qualities he has. Some qualities, such as critical thinking, active mind, deep insight, careful observation, abundant knowledge are always need. Without these qualities, no matter he is a beginner or expert, he cannot have any discoveries. [有别于大多数人的观点。]

Scepticism may be the most important quality for discovery. Only when some one dare to challenge what he had been taught, can he pave the way for [to] scientific progress. For example, Copernicus, without passive acceptance of the notion that the earth was in a fixed position at the center of the universe, advanced the new theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun, disrupting the Ptolemaic system of astronomy, which paved the way for Galileo and Newton’s principles later. The achievement of Copernicus is proof enough of the value of skepticism. [相关的说理还可以再加强一点。]

Scepticism is not the only one quality for making great discoveries, other qualities are also important, such as active mind, deep insight, careful observation, abundant knowledge and so on. Without deep insight and careful observation, we can not find the discoveries even it is in front of us; without active mind, we can not design the experiment to testify the discovery; Without abundant knowledge, we can not explain what we have seen and what we have done. [对于这些方面的要求，在说理、举例方面都还有待加强。]

Admittedly, some beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries. However, when we look back to these beginners, in fact, they all have qualities we mentioned above at the same time. Some famous scientists, for example, Faraday, Galileo and Einstein are such beginners when they found their new theory. So it is not beginner but quality that determine the important discovery. [和前面两段一样的问题。]

In sum, for what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that without the necessary qualities, one cannot do great discovery no matter he is a beginner or expert. [结尾显粗略。]

本文的观点提出得很好，但是对于其论述却还有待加强。
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beckhangongUID: 2104229

斑竹给看看 连着写的 不知道能不能及格

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辛苦了~~~

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lingli_xiaoaiUID: 172506

辛苦了......我这几天看申请的学校,弄得晕头转向,有点看不进去作文了,同学发给我改的,我都是拖了又拖,我真是PF版主大人你啊.........劳模........

下弦之月UID: 187577

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第一次发自己写的文...拜托啦~  ><

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lignumvitaeUID: 207532

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foxbokUID: 2113217

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我是新人，第一篇

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sailmywayUID: 161122

这个ISSUE是第二遍写，自已认为不错。哪位能帮我评价一下。必回拍
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ironcatUID: 2119178

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谢过斑竹！！

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pho0UID: 154113

我的 第3篇..超时完成(80分钟)~~帮忙看一下吧~谢谢

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冰阳UID: 201604

谢谢啦
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