argument76 还是写不多，欢迎砖头飞来！

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

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The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
'A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin.'
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Form this excerpt, the arguer indicate that a group of volunteers took part in a study of a kind of new face cream named Luxess, and conclude that the face cream is effective according to most of volunteers' responds. In first glance, the statement sounds reasonable, but further scrutiny point out that it is unpersuasive with several logical flaws.

First of all, the arguer does not account for whether the volunteers participated in the study of consumer could represent the entire consumer. Since they are volunteer to join the study, maybe they are more concerned about the face and skin maintenance. So they are good at protecting their appearance, and could not represent the whole consumer including those who know little about tend. And we are not informed the quantity of the volunteers. If the sample is too small, the conclusion based on it turns out to be unconvincing.

Furthermore, the procedure of the study also has two questionable points. 1) Since the volunteers used both mild soap and Luxess, the arguer did not rule out the effect of mild soap. It is entirely possible that the mild soap contributed to the improvement of the condition of facial skin. If so, we could not ensure that Luxess is truly effective. 2) The arguer does not indicate whether the study period is long enough to draw conclusion. Usually, such makeup needs longer time to test its efficacy. This study only lasted one month and makes us doubt its persuasion.

In addition, we are also not informed that how many respondents reported a marked improvement and the extent of their skin looked and felt better than before. Without more details and strong evidence to support the reliability of the study consequence, we could not fully believe what the arguer stated and could not accept the arguer's recommendation.

In sum, the argument has some problematic points which render it not reasonable as it stand. To bolster it, the arguer should justify that the volunteers in the study could represent all the consumers. And evidence ruling out the mild soap's effect is also necessary. More details about consequence should further be explained too.

[ Last edited by lignumvitae on 2005-7-21 at 21:10 ]

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

求互砸！！！

azleaUID: 192456

Form this excerpt, the arguer indicate that a group of volunteers took part in a study of a kind of new face cream named Luxess, and conclude that the face cream is effective according to most of volunteers' responds. In first glance, the statement sounds reasonable, but further scrutiny point out that it is unpersuasive with several logical flaws.

First of all, the arguer does not account for whether the volunteers participated in the study of consumer could represent the entire consumer. Since they are volunteer to join the study, maybe they are more concerned about the face and skin tend可以作名词么？. So they are good at protecting their appearance, and could not represent the whole consumer including those who know little about tend. And we are not informed the quantity of the volunteers. If the sample is too small, the conclusion based on it turns out to be unconvincing.

Furthermore, the procedure of the study also has two questionable points. 1) Since the volunteers used both mild soap and Luxess, it指什么？ did not rule out the effect of mild soap. It is entirely possible that the mild soap contributed to the improvement of the condition of facial skin. If so, we could not ensure that Luxess is truly effective. 2) The arguer does not indicate whether the study period is long enough to draw conclusion. Usually, such makeup needs longer time to test its efficacy. This study only lasted one month and makes us doubt its persuasion.

In addition, we are also not informed换个说法吧 that how many respondents reported a marked improvement and the extent of their skin looked and felt better than before. Without more details and strong evidence to support the reliability of the study consequence, we could not fully believe what the arguer stated and notand not换成or是不是更好？ accept the arguer's recommendation.

In sum, the argument has some problematic points which render it not reasonable as it stand. To bolster it, the arguer should justify that the volunteers in the study could represent all the consumers. And evidence ruling out the mild soap's effect is also necessary. More details about consequence should further be explained too.

写得还挺不错的呀，写不多不要紧，多练一下就行了。
我也刚开始写，一起加油吧！
还要向你学习呢！我的词汇老是就那么几个:(

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

谢谢你拍我，若需要回拍留连接给我吧，我也是写来写去就那几句，还要查字典:L
改了一下，有砖的继续～～

azleaUID: 192456

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嗬嗬，今天才写的，第一次写，有点没底:(

bananatreeUID: 208398

Form this excerpt, the arguer indicates that a group of volunteers took part in a study of a kind of new face cream named Luxess, and concludes that the face cream is effective according to most of volunteers' responds. InAt first glance, the statement sounds reasonable, but further scrutiny points out that it is unpersuasive with several logical flaws.

First of all, the arguer does not account for whether the volunteers participated in the study of consumer could represent the entire consumer. Since they are volunteers to join the study, maybe they are more concerned about the face and skin maintenance. So they are good at protecting their appearance, and could not represent the whole consumer including those who know little about tend. And we are not informed the quantity of the volunteers. If the sample is too small, the conclusion based on it turns out to be unconvincing.

Furthermore, the procedure of the study also has two questionable points. 1) Since the volunteers used both mild soap and Luxess, the arguer did not rule out the effect of mild soap. It is entirely possible that the mild soap contributed to the improvement of the condition of facial skin. If so, we could not ensure that Luxess is truly effective. 2) The arguer does not indicate whether the study period is long enough to draw conclusion. Usually, such makeup needs longer time to test its efficacy. This study only lasted one month and makes us doubt its persuasion这一句好像不太顺，是想用定语从句吗，那就不应该有and.

In addition, we are also not informed that how many respondents reported a marked improvement and the extent of their skin looked and felt better than before. Without more details and strongstronger evidence to support the reliability of the study consequence, we could not fully believe what the arguer stated and could not accept the arguer's recommendation.

In sum, the argument has some problematic points which render it not reasonable as it stands. To bolster it, the arguer should justify that the volunteers in the study could represent all the consumers. And evidence ruling out the mild soap's effect is also necessary. More details about consequence should further be explained too.

btw:谢谢你该我的文章，我觉得你写得挺好的，比我的好多了，没什么太大问题，我就该出了几个时态和语态上的问题，一起加油吧。

shanekunUID: 2104358

Form this excerpt, the arguer indicate that a group of volunteers took part in a study of a kind of new face cream named Luxess, and conclude that the face cream is effective according to most of volunteers' responds.(这里可以更简练一点，开门见山) In first glance, the statement sounds reasonable, but further scrutiny point out that it is unpersuasive with several logical flaws.（最好能概括的支出错在哪里）

First of all, the arguer does not account for whether the volunteers participated in the study of consumer (paticipants/volunteer 就可以了)could represent the entire consumer. Since they are volunteer to join the study, maybe they are more concerned about the face and skin maintenance. So they are good at protecting their appearance, and could not represent the whole consumer including those who know little about tend. And we are not informed the quantity of the volunteers. If the sample is too small, the conclusion based on it turns out to be unconvincing.

Furthermore, the procedure of the study also has two questionable points. 1) Since the volunteers used both mild soap and Luxess, the arguer did not rule out the effect of mild soap. It is entirely possible that the mild soap contributed to the improvement of the condition of facial skin(instead of/ not the Luxess). If so,(In this circumstances) we could not ensure that Luxess is truly effective. 2) The arguer does not indicate whether the study period is long enough to draw conclusion. Usually, such makeup needs longer time to test its efficacy. This study only lasted one month and makes us doubt its persuasion.

In addition, we are also not informed that how many respondents reported a marked improvement and the extent of their skin looked and felt better than before. Without more details and strong evidence to support the reliability of the study consequence, we could not fully believe what the arguer stated and could not accept the arguer's recommendation.(感觉这里不够深入，还是没有下到位，顾客自己的感觉不准确，那么可能的实际情况又是怎么样，。。。)

In sum, the argument has some problematic points which render it not reasonable as it stand. To bolster it, the arguer should justify that the volunteers in the study could represent all the consumers. And evidence ruling out the mild soap's effect is also necessary. More details about consequence should further be explained too.

楼主加油啊， 我们说不定同一场考哦，我11；30南大
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