Issue207好难写a~~~

mrealUID: 201732

把一些错误修改过了，可是表红出还需要高人指点一下，如果这个例子实在不适合我就只能换新的了。
还是多谢大家帮忙，谢谢喽！

快崩溃了，呵呵~~~自我振奋一下！！！:victory:

Issue207
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每一种文化都有自己特定的代表仪式，人们可以通过这些仪式活动了解这种文化和这里的人；并且仪式本身也确实帮助他们的拥有者确定自己的位置。
仪式虽然是某个民族特有的东西，能代表他们自身的特色，但是并不是构成他们自身文化的唯一因素，还有语言，文字，习俗，建筑……
每个民族的发展历史都有自身的特点，虽然现在会面临民族融合的淡化民族自身特色的问题，但是一种文化是通过历史在这个民族传承下来的，随着现在社会进步和科技发展，在发展的过程中仪式本身也会衍变，旧的消失新的出现，但并不会妨碍民族本身的定位。
As is known to all, each kind of culture has its particular rituals and ceremonies, but how and to what extent these factors influent its owner to identify their position among others? The speaker announces that their absence may cause the diminish sense of their racial identification. On the contrast, I believe that though the rituals and ceremonies play an important role in the foundation of a kind of culture, they cannot be the sole reason to the decadence of the culture.
Every race has its typical kinds of rituals and ceremonies, from which outsider can tell their difference from other groups of people, and more, make their insight through this kind of culture. At the same time, this social group may get to know how the trend of their history goes from their ancestors to themselves and explicitly present their values abreast. Yunan, for instance, an area of heterogeneous races' culture integration, feeds people of Daizu for ages, who are famous for their annual ceremonies "Water Pouring Day". On that ceremonies or we can call it a festival, people pour water to others with laughter for the best wish to get more bless. In addition, there is an interesting saying that strikes most of people--the more water you have on, the better luck you will appreciate. From this interacting ceremonies, we obtain more about Daizu's custom and learn the passion and lovely characteristic of its people, meanwhile, by the happiness they bring to outsiders which also effect on their own in return, the Dai People will make better evaluation of their own position in the society.[这个结论很牵强，觉得吗？]
Nevertheless, the rituals and ceremonies, though reflect the specific perspective of the racial culture, cannot form their culture of other dimensions[solely，不能说的这末绝对，和下句矛盾], put another words, there are more factors helping us as well as the race itself identify its culture and position other than rituals and ceremonies, such as the language they speak, the words they use, even the architecture they create. We can set an example that from the kind of house they live in, we can tell the different races apart: many minority (少数民族) in Yunan Province build wood-constructed house supported with large sticks up from the ground, from which to avoid dampness; and the Monggu people's house is cant like a small hill on the plain, which does a good job to obturation and keep warm. Their various architectures are the crystal of their wisdom against the natural condition according to the environment around them. Admittedly, these architectures can be fairly considered as the token of the race's identification.
However, another fact we cannot neglect is that the problem of racial syncretizing underplays some typical customs. But, we must find our way to maintain the essence of the racial culture in spite of the impact of this phenomenon. As the progress of the society and advancement of the science and technology, kinds of races seem to share the same style of live, furthermore, as the development of races within the pace of the whole society, many traditional rituals and ceremonies improve their mold even find their end, at the same time, their old history and culture with the new living style breed new kinds of rituals and ceremonies to celebrate their festivals or memorize their great events. No matter what vicissitudes take place, one thing is certain that none of these will fail to help groups of people identifying and keeping alive their culture.
To sum up, culture and custom pass down from generation to generation with history, though rituals and ceremonies are of indispensable importance in defining a culture, groups of people can by other means to identify who they really are.

[ Last edited by mreal on 2005-7-27 at 17:31 ]

chris_zhUID: 2101887

As is known to all, each kind of culture has its particular rituals and ceremonies, but how and to what extent these factors influent its owner to identify their position among others? The speaker announces that their absence may cause the diminish[ed] sense of their racial identification. On the contrast, I believe that though the rituals and ceremonies play an important role in the foundation of a kind of culture, they cannot be the sole reason to the decadence of the culture.
Every race has its typical kinds of rituals and ceremonies, from which outsider can tell their difference towards [应该是tell……from吧]other groups of people, and [more make知道你意思，但没有这种用法] their insight through [into]this kind of culture. At the same time, this social group may get to know how the trend of their history goes from their ancestors to themselves and explicitly present their values abreast[是adv.不是v.] others. Yunan, for instance, an area of heterogeneous races' culture integration, feeds people of Daizu for ages, who are famous for their annual ceremonies "Water Pouring Day". On that ceremonies or we can call it a festival, people pour water to others with laughter for the best wish to get more bless. In addition, there is an interesting saying that strikes most [of] people--the more water you have on, the better luck you will appreciate. From this interacting ceremonies, we obtain more about Daizu's custom and learn the passion and lovely character[istic,是说性格吧] of its people, [.]meanwhile, by the happiness they bring to outsiders which also effect on their own in return, the Dai People will make better evaluation of their own position in the society.[这个结论很牵强，觉得吗？]
Nevertheless, the rituals and ceremonies, though reflect the specific perspective of the racial culture, cannot form their culture of other dimensions[solely，不能说的这末绝对，和下句矛盾], put another [in other]words, there are more factors helping we [us]as well as the race itself [that]identify its culture and position other than [besides]rituals and ceremonies, such as the language they speak, the words they use, even the architecture they create. We can set an example that from the kind of house they live in, we can tell the different races apart: many minority (少数民族) in Yunan Province build wood-constructed house supported with large sticks up from the ground, from which to avoid dampness; and the Monggu people's house is cant like a small hill on the plain, which does a good job to obturation and keep warm. Their various architectures are the crystal of their wisdom against the natural condition according to the environment around them. Admittedly, these architectures can be fairly considered as the token of the race's identification.
However, another fact we cannot neglect [to删] is that the problem of racial syncretizing underplays some typical customs. But, we must find our way to maintain the essence of the racial culture in spite of the impact of this phenomenon. As the process [progress]of the society and advancement of the science and technology, kinds of races seem to share the same style of live, furthermore, as the development of races within the pace of the whole society, many traditional rituals and ceremonies improve their mold even find their end, at the same time, their old history and culture with the new living style breed new kinds of rituals and ceremonies to celebrate their festivals or memorize their great events. No matter what vicissitudes take place, one thing is certain that none of these will fail to help groups of people identifying and keeping alive their culture.
To sum up, culture and custom pass down from generation to generation with history, though rituals and ceremonies are of dispensable [indispensable,意思完全相反]importance in defining a culture, groups of people can by other means to identify who they really are.
[观点还算清楚，不过语法错误实在是太多了，还要继续加油噢：）]

mrealUID: 201732

惭愧哦~~~
下次要好好检查一下再放上来啦，谢谢喽！