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Archer1123UID: 206148

150 “Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete.
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反对
outline:
1. tv and internet为旅游提供更多信息和帮助
2. 但是不能替代旅游
3. 促进旅游发展


With the development of modern science and technology, the television and Internet grow up quickly and play an important role in our daily life. The television and Internet lead people into a totally new and colorful world. People can get more information from the TV and Internet concerned what you care about, so does the tourist. In my opinion, the TV and Internet help and boost the development of tourism not attenuate it.

In the last time, it is impossible for one to get the detail information of the place where he or she never goes there before. Now it comes into true with the help of the TV and Internet. Now, just in home without going anywhere, people can see the vivid and sound picture of the scene; learn the history of a historic site, and know the famous foods or special rituals of the place. Moreover, the other information, such as how about the climate, how to plan the trip plan, how much of the cost, and how to order the hotel in advanced, are provided to us if we need. Based on the information, it is easy and convenient for those who want to have a trip in a faraway and strange place. It is admittedly that the TV and Internet contribute to it greatly. People can get enough information without going to the exact place.

However, getting the specific information about one place just help people prepare for the trip, rather than replacing the trip. One of the goals of trip is to learn much and expand the spectrum and horizon, which can be reality by the TV and Internet, but another more important goal of trip is experience the different in the different by oneself, which is beyond to the TV and Internet ability. It is easy to be understood, breathing the fresh air nearby the sea, washing face with the clear water in the brook wandering the valley, smelling the fragrance of a little follower which name is unknown, hearing the nice sound of birds sing in a forest, eating the famous food of a little secret town, taking part in the local mysterious ceremony, and so on, which will bring a totally different feeling and sense from just watching the TV or Internet. In a simply word, tour is promote all apparatuses or organizations, your eyes, nose, ear, month, hand and food, especially your heart to touch and feel a place closely, while we only use our eyes and era when TV and Internet provide the information to us.

Furthermore, the TV and Internet stimulate and promote the interesting of people to have a trip. We have the chance to know more scenes and learn more places information than ever with the TV and Internet. That is to say, the choice of tour is largened. With the vivid and colorful introduce in the TV and Internet, it is easier to charming us to have a trip. While in the last time, we should make a decision only by the literal introduce or what other described which maybe not correct and specific. At the same time, the TV and Internet provide more information that will bring convenience to us. People are willing to tour than before. Nowadays, many scenes have advertised on TV and Internet in order to attract people, which demonstrates the trend to some extent.

General speaking, the development of TV and Internet not only provides the more information to people, but also promote the development of the tourism more or less. The tourism will bloom than ever, not soon obsolete, with the development of the TV and Internet.

[ Last edited by Archer1123 on 2005-8-10 at 13:26 ]

ouymUID: 2109118

With the development of modern science and technology, the(可不可以去掉！下同) television and Internet grow up quickly and play an important role in our daily life. The television and Internet lead people into a totally new and colorful world. People can get more（既然后面没有＂than＂，那么就不如用＂many＂或＂so many＂） information from the TV and Internet concerned what you care about（去掉更简洁！）, so does the tourist. In my opinion, the TV and Internet help and boost the development of tourism not attenuate it.（＂the＂用的太多，用的不当！）

In the last time(这是什么意思？), it is impossible for one to get the detail information of the place where he or she never goes there before. Now it comes into true（直接＂comes true＂） with the help of the TV and Internet. Now, just(加一个stay) in home without going anywhere(多余！), people can see the vivid and sound picture of the scene; learn the history of a historic site, and know the famous foods or special rituals of the place（the place指哪里？）. Moreover, the other information, such as how about the climate, how to plan the trip plan, how much of the cost, and how to order the hotel in advanced, are provided to us if we need. Based on the（this） information, it is easy and convenient for those who want to have a trip in a faraway and strange place. It is admittedly(这是副词，不能作表语的！) that the TV and Internet contribute to it（指什么？） greatly. People can get enough information without going to the exact place.

However, getting the specific information about one place just help people prepare for the trip, rather than replacing the trip. One of the goals of trip is to learn much and expand the spectrum and horizon, which can be reality（呵呵，可以这样写？！） by the TV and Internet, but another more important goal of trip is experience（to experience） the different in the different by oneself, which is beyond (建议查一下词典，beyond不能这么用！)to the TV and Internet ability. It is easy to be understood, breathing the fresh air nearby the sea, washing face with the clear water in the brook wandering the valley, smelling the fragrance of a little follower which name（whose name,好别扭！） is unknown, hearing the nice sound of birds sing in a forest, eating the famous food of a little secret town, taking part in the local mysterious ceremony, and so on, which will bring a totally different feeling and sense from just watching the TV or Internet.（好长好长的句子！有问题！It is easy to be understood是多余而且错误的，找一下整个句子的主干就知道了！长句固然好，但是过分就不好了，譬如这句！个人感觉！） In a simply word, tour is promote（错误！） all apparatuses or organizations, your eyes, nose, ear, month, hand and food（这么有跑出个food来了！）, especially your heart to touch and feel a place closely, while we only use our eyes and era when TV and Internet provide the information to us.

Furthermore, the TV and Internet stimulate and promote the interesting of people to have a trip. We have the chance to know more scenes and learn more places information than ever with the TV and Internet. That is to say, the choice of tour is largened. With the vivid and colorful introduce in the TV and Internet, it is easier to charming us to have a trip. While in the last time, we should make a decision only by the literal introduce or what other described which maybe not correct and specific. At the same time, the TV and Internet provide more information that will bring convenience to us. People are willing to tour than before. Nowadays, many scenes have advertised on TV and Internet in order to attract people, which demonstrates the trend to some extent.

General speaking, the development of TV and Internet not only provides the more information to people, but also promote the development of the tourism more or less. The tourism will bloom than ever, not soon obsolete, with the development of the TV and Internet.

我觉得本文＂中式英语＂的味道好浓，尽管有些写法我也不知道对不对，我是不敢这么写的！最后两段没怎么仔细看，我觉得还是存在这个问题！
建议写完后自己多读几遍，也许能发现问题！提高一下语言质量！

Archer1123UID: 206148

谢谢毛毛，我再仔细研究研究，呜呜……

lingdUID: 2124943

拍砖

Archer1123UID: 206148

谢谢lingd,拍得越多越好