issue41 决战830拍砖组14日 作业 狂拍啊

caogenmanchiUID: 2127136

提纲：
1.科学解释不了某些问题，这给了nonmainstream areas of inquiry满足人们的需求的机会
2.过渡信奉会导致阻碍科学的发展，导致社会落后

The arguer claims that nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science, and therefore they can play an important role in society. In my point of view, I tend to agree that nonmainstream areas of inquiry are indeed important, but overemphasizing on them is dangerous.
There are many problems that can not be explained and understood by mainstream science until now and these give an opportunity to nonmaistream areas of inquiry. Facing important problems, people resort to mainstream science. Unfortunately, it is impossible that mainstream science gives us an answer or a satisfying answer every time. Thus, people feel very disappointed and resort to nonmainstream areas of inquiry. For example, many people want to know what will happen to him in the future such as whether he or she can make a big buck, how long he or she will live, etc.. Obviously, mainstream science can not answer these questions and then some people ask the fortune-tellings or the statues of various gods and goddesses or notabilities in ancient in temples. Although they can not gain a real answer, these activities indeed satisfy their needs, which they want make uncertainties sure, and so they can try their best to do what they want to do. This example illustrates that sometimes nonmainstream areas of inquiry does benefit some people and the society as a whole.
On the other hand, overemphasizing on nonmainstream areas of inquiry can undermine the development of mainstream science and lead to the decay of our whole society. The development of mainstream science is a process that has no deadline. More developed is it, more answers it can give, and more developed our society is. If we pay over more attention to nonmainstream areas of inquiry, we will pay less attention to mainstream science and undermine our credibility to mainstream science. On most cases, this will hamper the development of mainstream science and eventfully lead to theocracy and the recess of society as what had happened from about 500 to 1500 in Europe which made Europe lag behind the main parts of the world.  It is highly necessary that we only give adequate support to nonmainstream areas of inquiry and control the development of them. In other words, if we ignore the social phenomena of overemphasizing on them, it will be extremely dangerous.
Taking into consideration all the factors, we maybe finally arrive at the conclusion that nonmainstream areas of inquiry have their own role in society and can benefit our society on some cases, but there is no denying that overemphasizing on them is wrong and dangerous.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-14 at 23:25 ]

momo56288860UID: 191433

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The arguer claims that nonmainstream areas of inquiry satisfy human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science, and therefore they can play an important role in society. In my point of view, I tend to agree that nonmainstream areas of inquiry are indeed important, but overemphasizing on them is dangerous.//开头还是比较简洁明了的提出了自己的观点，赞//
There are many problems that can not be explained and understood by mainstream science until now and these give an opportunity to nonmaistream areas of inquiry//感觉后半句太中国式，建议改一改，而且整个句子缺少变化，读起来很不爽，In the first place, nonmaistream areas of inquiry take the  opportunity to explain many problems that really puzzle mainstream science //. Facing important problems, people resort to mainstream science. Unfortunately, it is impossible that mainstream science gives us an answer or a satisfying answer every time. Thus, people feel very disappointed and resort to nonmainstream areas of inquiry//还是语言问题，太中国化，建议修改//. For example, many people want to know what will happen to him in the future such as whether he or she can make a big buck, how long he or she will live, etc.. Obviously, mainstream science can not answer these questions and then some people ask the fortune-tellings or the statues of various gods and goddesses or notabilities in ancient in temples//例子表达的时候太过于语言太过于平坦，没有深入，没有感染力//. Although they can not gain a real answer, these activities indeed satisfy their needs, which they want //？//make uncertainties sure//不知道什么意思哦？//, and so they can try their best to do what they want to do//还是语言问题啊//. This example illustrates that sometimes nonmainstream areas of inquiry does benefit some people and the society as a whole.

On the other hand//建议用其他的信号词，好象on the one hand-----on the other hand,用在段落中比较多，而不是在段子与段子之间,In the second place//, overemphasizing on nonmainstream areas of inquiry can undermine the development of mainstream science and lead to the decay of our whole society. The development of mainstream science is a process that has no deadline. More developed is it//it is//, more answers it can give, and more developed our society is//整个句子的结构是the more--------the more结构，只有more 是不对的// . If//建议用while// we pay over more attention to nonmainstream areas of inquiry, we will pay less attention to mainstream science and undermine our credibility to mainstream science. On most cases//?不明白什么意思//, this will hamper the development of mainstream science and eventfully lead to theocracy and the recess of society as what had happened from about 500 to 1500 in Europe which made Europe lag behind the main parts of the world.  It is highly necessary that we only give adequate support to nonmainstream areas of inquiry and control the development of them//句子有问题//. In other words, if we ignore the social phenomena of overemphasizing//汗！句子表达有问题// on them, it will be extremely dangerous.

Taking into consideration all the factors//实际上没有Taking into consideration all the factors建议换//, we maybe finally arrive at the conclusion that nonmainstream areas of inquiry have their own role in society//中国式英语// and can benefit our society on some cases, but there is no denying that overemphasizing on them is wrong and dangerous.

文章的整体结构还是不错的啊，呵呵，但是语言表示觉得太中国化，建议多下功夫在语言上。

[ Last edited by momo56288860 on 2005-8-14 at 23:59 ]

caogenmanchiUID: 2127136

昨天GTER维护把我的订阅列表给维丢了。还好找到了，呵呵！