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foreveraUID: 202035

196. "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."


1．        科学技术的确促进社会的发展，这点毋庸置疑，而且也被几乎所有人认可。
2．        但是仍需要注意科技带来的负面影响
（1）        科技会带来一些社会伦理的问题
（2）        对科技的不正确的使用会导致很严重的后果
（3）        科技的高速发展会给人们带来很大的uncertainty，让人们感到迷茫
3．        不过从总体来说科技的确给人们带来的更多的好处。

这个提纲有点问题,修改过后的:

1．        科学技术的确促进社会的发展，这点毋庸置疑，而且也被几乎所有人认可。
2．        但是仍需要注意科技带来的负面影响
（1）        科技会带来一些社会伦理的问题
（2）        对科技的不正确的使用会导致很严重的后果
（3）        对科技高度的依赖一旦科技出了一点问题都会造成很严重的后果
3．        应该如何对待和利用科技.

Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve? Facing with this compound, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life.

Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put, without the help of technology human being would have been in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance, modern technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before. In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that is beyond the scope of people's eyes, with the help of rackets, men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not to present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.

However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy.

In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even of its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone still remains doubtful. Recently, there is a world wide debate over this case, an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies, first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system; second, there would probably be difficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion.

Secondly, as sword is double edged; the abuse of technology is of much danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology. Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world.

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importance role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives, in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis.

Concerning all the aspects above, I should conclude that the key point of the issue is that can the technology be used peaceful and properly. Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse.


最近一直写抽象类题目，这种除了举例子不太会写了。。。555

[ Last edited by forevera on 2005-8-23 at 08:44 ]

咯噔UID: 2114564

196. "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."


1．        科学技术的确促进社会的发展，这点毋庸置疑，而且也被几乎所有人认可。
2．       但是仍需要注意科技带来的负面影响
（1）        科技会带来一些社会伦理的问题
（2）        对科技的不正确的使用会导致很严重的后果
（3）        科技的高速发展会给人们带来很大的uncertainty，让人们感到迷茫我觉得你既然是要写好处,为什么写不好的写那么多呢?3．        不过从总体来说科技的确给人们带来的更多的好处。


Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve? Facing with this compound, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life.

Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put, without the help of technology human being would have been in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance,? modern technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before. In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that is beyond the scope of people's eyes, with the help of rackets, men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not to present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.我觉得这一段到是很丰富但感觉有些杂.例子太多了

However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy.

In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even of its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone still remains doubtful. Recently, there is a world wide debate over this case, an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies, first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system; second, there would probably be difficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion. 我觉得不用说那么详细吧

Secondly, as sword is double edged; the abuse of technology is of much danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology. Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world.我觉得这一段范例举的很好啊

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. 这一句抽象In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importance role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives, in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis.我知道你的意思但我觉得你没说清楚.这中间没有因果吧
Concerning all the aspects above, I should conclude that the key point of the issue is that can the technology be used peaceful and properly. Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse.你在最后一段没有重申主题>?

我觉得你的例子很丰富,而且也表达得好清楚.但我觉得1.好象字数有点太多了吧.没超时吗?2.观点不明确.我觉得这一篇关键就是要说科技是好是坏.但你好象并没有作出判断啊.这是一己之见.不知你是否赞同?我有篇类似的请帮我看哈

咯噔UID: 2114564

31.Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial.

Are the money spent on research is always a good investment? This question raises several issues in both today and future. I concede that the result of a research can be controversial and may seem useless to our immediate problems. However, on contrary I generally agree with the speaker's opinion that to invest in research is always good.

Admittedly, some people doubt that if it is necessary to fund all research since some research fails to give definite answers to questions or may even cause more serious problems. Consider, for example, the biological research in genes, which intrigues one of the most drastic discussion in both ethics and science. It is the revelation of the secret of genes that brought these ethic problems about if we can use the life-prolonged medicine or clone skill to cure illness, or if we can regard human just as a set of information. In short, some evidence lends strong support to this point.

Albeit this point seems reasonable to some extent, it only plays a , if any, supplementary role in my positive judgment. Had there be the research about genes, we would never have known about ourselves as clearly and profoundly as today. Research in most cases, serve as a impulsion to the society's progress while introducing some problems. Thus, I generally persist in my proposition that we should always invest on research.

First, the effect of the progress of science epitomizes my proposition. Although, some research fails or seems no use for our temporary needs, advancement in science has deeply influenced our society. Consider, for example, Columbus's discovery of the new continent----North America. At that time the whole nation abused him for his discovery hadn't brought them numerous gold as other explorers, and even Columbus himself also refused to confess that he reached another place instead of India. But in this new land, now there are two nations, America and Canada, are greatly influencing our world as an indispensable part.

Second, another important reason lies in the fact that only the advancement of technology can solve the existing problems. Consider, for example, the invention of nuclear power. Although it brings to us great threat to the world peace, it do provide a new and effective way to solve the energy crisis. Or consider the research in radioactivity, conducted by Merrie Currie. Although at first the result seems harmful since people will die of long-time exposure to radioactive chemicals, this conclusion has gestates the idea of X-rays which has changed Medicine. Several other examples--too many for me to enumerate in an essay--- serve to substantiate my proposition.

In sum, as my contention performed above, while I agree that some research is of no temporary use, I generally agree with the speaker that we should still persist in invest in research. After all, in a world in which our survival skill as a species depend much on technology, research should always regard vital

clylizeUID: 150642

Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve? Facing with this compound, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life.

Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put, without the help of technology human being would have been in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance, modern technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before. In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that is beyond the scope of people's eyes, with the help of rackets, men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not to present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.

However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy.

In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even of its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone still remains doubtful. Recently, there is a world wide debate over this case, an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies, first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system; second, there would probably be difficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion.

Secondly, as a sword is double edged; the abuse of technology is of多余吧 much danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology. Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world.现在好像有中子弹 只kill people不污染环境的 连房屋都没事 记得老美打阿富汗的时候就用过

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importance role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives, in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis.要是我 这段我接着说clone 说clone可以提供新鲜的器官供人使用 但是伦理道德上又不能完全说的过去

Concerning all the aspects above, I should conclude that the key point去掉 of the issue is that can the technology be used peaceful and properly. Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse最后这句绕的人很晕 改下

总体不错 很清晰的 但是觉得例子不是很恰当 可以在多举点

禾日因心UID: 174510

我看文章，改了发不出去，只好在这里简单的谈下了，LZ 这篇文章写的挺好的，LZ在最后说不过从总体来说科技的确给人们带来的更多的好处， 这就大大的不好了，文章的重点都放在了科技的缺点上，这样文章不能不说是有很大的缺憾的。
另外，在文章结构上提点建议，觉的可以把第4段和第三段调下，因为第4段是接着第二段讲的，个人意见，LZ随便看看：）

flealdaUID: 2118390

196. "Technology creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life."


1．        科学技术的确促进社会的发展，这点毋庸置疑，而且也被几乎所有人认可。
2．        但是仍需要注意科技带来的负面影响
（1）        科技会带来一些社会伦理的问题
（2）        对科技的不正确的使用会导致很严重的后果
（3）        科技的高速发展会给人们带来很大的uncertainty，让人们感到迷茫
3．        不过从总体来说科技的确给人们带来的更多的好处。(从文章整体结构趋势看来,此段写给人们带来的更多的好处不如写不好来得顺畅)


Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve(solves)? Facing with this compound, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life.

Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put(好), without the help of technology human being would have been in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance, modern technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, (是否应该另起一句,句子结构才显得比较清晰?)for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before(这一句可否换个说法,觉得很平淡). In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that(which?) is beyond the scope of people's eyes(eyes' sight), (另起一句)with the help of rackets, men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not to present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.(这一大段是讲好处,是对下面however及后面几段的让步,我觉得.如果是这样,作者的观点更应该是说科技不好,虽然也有一些好的用途)


However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy(tragedies).In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even of its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone(可以删去) still remains doubtful. Recently, there is(was) a world wide debate over this case, an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies,(句号) first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system; second, there would probably be difficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion.

Secondly, as sword is double edged; the abuse of technology is of much(我觉得用great是否更合适些?) danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology(很有力的排比!!). Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world.

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so(可删去) if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importance(important) [/ color]role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives , in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost(costs) the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis.
Concerning all the aspects above, I should conclude that the key point of the issue is that can the technology be used peaceful and properly(总觉得你以上论述的意思是科技带来得弊大于利,呵呵). Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse.


佩服作者的理由段有力的论述,但最后一段的结论和全文的理由不太一致,一点小小的意见:)

skeptic_liuUID: 2118334

今天来不及写文章了，先拍块砖吧~~
I think the conclusion should be like this : according to the argument above , we can say that the science and technology cause more problems than it solved , but the truth is that we want to learn more about ourselves , we want  a better life , a modern civilization  which depends on some sacriface that out of our control. To do as better as we could to reduce the damage, that's all we can and have to do ....

准备好了被拍，呵呵~~

felixyangUID: 199223

1．        科学技术的确促进社会的发展，这点毋庸置疑，而且也被几乎所有人认可。
2．        但是仍需要注意科技带来的负面影响
（1）        科技会带来一些社会伦理的问题
（2）        对科技的不正确的使用会导致很严重的后果
（3）        科技的高速发展会给人们带来很大的uncertainty，让人们感到迷茫
3．        不过从总体来说科技的确给人们带来的更多的好处。

从提纲来看，你的观点应该是赞同的多一些，body2部分强调负面影响多一些。
Body1，3应该合并起来说，就是反对作者观点部分。
Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve? Facing with this compound, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life. (我觉得应该和作者比较一下，然后说出你大+小-，就是强调however后面的观点)
Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put, without the help of technology human being would have been in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance, (有这么用么？你可以说 In contrast, in modern time,) technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before. In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that is beyond the scope of people's eyes, with the help of rackets(rockets), men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not to present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.

However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy.

In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even of its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone still remains doubtful. Recently, there is a world wide debate over this case (issue 是不是好点？), an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies（缪误是不是不太好？problems?）, first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system; second, there would probably be difficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion.

Secondly, as sword is double edged; the abuse of technology is of much danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology. Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world.

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importance role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives, in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis.

Concerning (Considering能好一些吧) all the aspects above, I should conclude that the key point of the issue is that can the technology be used peaceful（peacefully） and properly. Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse.


呵呵，语言相当好，读起来很顺畅的说（哎，我怎么就那么差呢？）
看到最后总的看来结构还好，你提纲里的body3没有描述啊，呵呵，这样的话就比较好，但我觉得你需要和作者的观点呼应一下。
呵呵，还有你作文改得很好，有空帮我敲敲：
我的issue41
issue41

[ Last edited by felixyang on 2005-8-23 at 00:05 ]

foreveraUID: 202035

to everyone:
多谢大家给我的砖头，本来也想来改大家的来着，不过吃完饭太困了，最近严重的睡眠不足。
还有也许是我的提纲误道了大家，写完B1之后对提纲进行了很大的改动，忘了在文字上修改了。。呵呵。。
大家的反映我也基本预想到了，我这是尝试一种新的写法，（虽然考试的时候肯定不会这么写）个人觉得这种写法对于练习段落结构还有开拓思路很有帮助。
具体的说来：开头说一下所谓的正面论述，但在B2结尾声明这些正面论述是已经被几乎所有人公认的了，所以就不详细论述了，后半部分重点补充论述这个问题存在的一些缺点和问题，最后一部分升华主题，对于这种问题应该如何处理才会社会更有好处。这里已经没有必要在写以前的那种结尾段了。
等我去咨询一下牛人，这种写法的裨益，总结出来给大家分享啊。。

flealdaUID: 2118390

可是如果你支持反面会显得更水到渠成一些啊我觉得

foreveraUID: 202035

算了我还是把这个提纲修改过来吧..

fancingUID: 208191

我昨天就看了LZ的文章，觉得语言相当好啊，中间有些例子的阐述我还想借用呢。。。

至于结构，我不是很支持最后改成    应该如何对待和利用科技.
因为题目在把比较the problem created by technology and that solved by technology，那最后一段我觉得还是把两者进行比较好。
或者把body2改成，看看那些问题都是怎么造成的，然后列举都是因为人们的误用造成的，然后body3把两者进行比较，最后反对原题观点。不知道这样行不行？

我自己还写得一团糟~还要多谢LZ的修改，要多多向你学习呢

sebarinaUID: 2108158

后天考试最后一次来这里改文~算是答谢forevera对熊熊组的贡献以及对我的文章的帮助呵呵*^_^*
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Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve语法问题改成solving就好了? Facing with this compound有这么说的？ambiguous problem?, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also去掉 have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life.

Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put8错8错学习……, without the help of technology human being would have been虚拟 in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance, modern technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before. In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -冒号~under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that is beyond the scope of people's eyes, with the help of rackets, men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not ->does not needto present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.

However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy.

In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even 换成inspiteof its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone still remains doubtful. Recently,这个应该是很久以前的了吧 there is a world wide debate over this case, an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies, first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system;你这里的ethic是什么呢？说来说去就是破坏了ethic而没有说有什么害处~如果没有害处破坏就破坏呗 second, there would probably be ->causedifficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion.

Secondly, as sword is double连字符 edged; the abuse of technology is of much danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society单纯这么说也没有问题~但是太浅显了~不妨说说科技给人们的邪恶本性提供了手段. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash你这里显然把范围扩大了, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology这个单词是什么意思？. Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils换成if条件句会好点？ is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world.

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importance role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives, in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis我觉得你这一段的意思挺好的~但是表述的不够明了~具体我也没有想好~而且这种依赖性是任何事物都会有的吧~不仅仅是科学技术。.

Concerning all the aspects above, I should->would conclude that the key point of the issue is that can the technology be used peaceful and properly语序！. Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse.

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改好了~~觉得这篇文章写的略为有点浅~~
可以上升到科技进步的本质和人类探索的本性上

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[ Last edited by sebarina on 2005-8-23 at 13:33 ]

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Does technology threaten or damage the quality of people's life, by bringing human beings more problems than it solve? Facing with this compound, basically, I agree with the public idea that technology does advance the quality of people's lives, however, further analysis also presents that technology also have some defects which would partly decrease the quality of people's life. 个人倒觉得楼主的写法挺好的，however后面的内容应该是作者的主要观点，如果在结尾再强调一下应该是可以的，不过看到那么多人针对这点提意见，有点犹豫了~~~

Generally, it is widely accepted that technology contributes much to the development of the society and the whole world. Simply put, without the help of technology human being would have been in Stone Age, living in caves, dressing rough cloth, eating uncooked and dirty food, etc. In advance, modern technology provides us more convenience that can not ever be imagined, for instance, the journeys are roaring by new means of traffic, the communications are easier and faster than before. In addition, highly modernized technology extend the ken of human being, -under the assistance of microscope men are able to see bacteria that is beyond the scope of people's eyes, with the help of rackets, men can travel in outer space, explore the mystery of the universe, and even find ways to live on other planets in the future. So, it needs not to present much to convince people that the advancement of technology is the key to the development of society and the quality of individuals' lives.

However, there are still some defects of the technology that can not be neglected. And, more significantly, if not treated well, these defects would lead to serious social and natural tragedy.

In the first place, modern technology may cause some ethical problems. Taking the technique of clone for example, even of its valuable application on medical treatments, when referring to cloning a person, the technique of clone still remains still和remain好像都表示仍然的意思，still去掉吧 doubtful. Recently, there is a world wide debate over this case, an increasing number of people and specialists denounce human cloning for it suffers from two main social fallacies, first, the cloned individual would have trouble surviving under long established traditional ethical system; second, there would probably be difficulties of identification, and thus cause social confusion.

Secondly, as sword is double edged; the abuse of technology is of much danger. One example that can illustrate this point is the use of technology in wars: the more advanced technology the army applies, the more damage the war does to the society. Masses of people are killed by advanced weapons, great amount of land is polluted by the radioactive ash, and countless social possession is damaged by the abuse of martial technology. Thus, under this circumstance, technology abused by evils is the most efficacious tool that destroys the world. 感觉改成tool to destroy the world，另外这段举例感觉用将来时或者虚拟语气比较好，因为是假设，用现在时好像不是很恰当，个人观点

What's more, too much relying on technology would push people into the dilemma, when the form of technology they depend on is no longer available. And as most parts of the society are highly related, so if one part of chain breaks down, the society system is trapped. In the recent 30 years, computer plays a most importanceimportant role in impelling the development of society and promoting people’s daily lives, in other words, the whole society would not have run normally without computer. So, the Millennium bug cost the whole world billions of dollars to survive from this electronic crisis. 千年虫的例子LZ举的不太恰当啊，和主题句不是很一致。我是学计算机专业的，千年虫的问题，是因为计算机设计之初，因为设计者的疏忽，没有设定足够的字长表示年代，导致世纪更迭造成数据的日期存储的混乱，而且主要影响的是银行帐户管理之类的数据库系统，而不是daily life,呵呵有点吹毛求疵了~~~

Concerning all the aspects above, I should conclude that the key point of the issue is that can the technology be used peacefulpeacefully and properly. Further, the government and all social power should pay attention to the proper and efficient use of technology to avoid the problem of abuse.

[ Last edited by modeux on 2005-8-23 at 14:44 ]

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我的意思是由于人们太过依赖电脑，所以象千年虫这种问题会给社会带来很大的损失