issue10 fanasy互助！有拍必回！

kionaUID: 207479

提纲：
1。一些城市以他们的传统文化为特征，但是他们积累的财富已经足以供给自身文化的发展，不需要政府资助。
2。事实上，大城市受到不同文化的影响已经不具备国家独特的传统文化。
3。除了政府，还可以后另外的一些团体来保护传统文化。
We always regard the major cities as the central of the nation's cultural traditions. Because it is always true that big cities of a country boom not only in economy but also in culture. However, the speaker ignores there is a large group, that is, the rural areas of nation, in fact, they have wider spaces to develop. My points about this issue will be discussed as follows.

I concede that some cities are characterized by their long cultural traditions. These cultures create thousands of billions of wealth for the cities and people, even the whole country. But it does not imply that the government must provide the financial support to these cities. As a main business and culture sustain central of a country, the government should not only provide the finance sustain to the country but also give the advice about how protect the cultural tradition. If all of the matters give the government to administer, which will result the over load to the government, then the booming of a country will not be improving, even holding back. In other words, some big cities may have enough wealth to support the development of them and generate the nation's cultural tradition. The government should use the subsidization, which intends to sustain the big cities to support the rural areas. Otherwise, the increasing trend of urbanization will result in the poverty of the countryside, threatening the survival of a nation's traditional culture.

Actually, the major cities are not relative to cultural traditions directly. In nowadays, nations distinct cultural tradition, such as folk art, crafts, traditional songs and customs are developing more quickly in small towns and the rural regions, they provide a better environment for the development of the cultural traditions. Indeed, the big cities are the warehouse of old cultural tradition of a country. If we want to acquaint a country, we must notify the custom the big cities showing us at first. In fact, the big cities have little to do with one nation’s distinct cultural traditions. They are only as the carriers for exchanging different culture that comes from other country. After all, modern cities are smelting furnaces of different cultural traditions, they cannot exhibit a nation’s unique culture. If so, the governments should not waste money to preserve these cultural traditions, they should provide the money to a place where it is needed, such as for creating a global culture.

In addition, due to the impact of globalization, the cities of the world are homogenized. As a consequence, a nation's cultural traditions might be easier to be preserved in the rural areas or by individuals and businesses. One apt illustration of this point is “internet”, which makes the computer become a part of our daily life; we can easily gain the knowledge from the Internet, containing the information about the old cultural traditions. It not only helps us to preserve the old cultural traditions, but also creates a new culture. It makes us live more easily and comfortably.

In sum, the issue is troubling in several parts. Some cultural traditions do not need to be preserved and generated. Some cultural traditions could be preserved by themselves or by individuals or by businesses. We cannot say government support is necessary. Moreover, the development of cities is not depending on governments.

[ Last edited by kiona on 2005-8-24 at 22:15 ]

foreveraUID: 202035

占座。。明早看。。。HOHO

kionaUID: 207479

好！谢了

skeptic_liuUID: 2118334

We always regard the major cities as the central of the nation's cultural traditions. Because it is always true that big cities of a country boom not only in economy but also in culture. However, the speaker ignores there is a large group, that is, the rural areas of nationthe nation, in fact, they have wider spaces to develop. My points about this issue will be discussed as follows.

I concede that some cities are characterized by their long cultural traditions. These cultures create thousands of billions of wealth for the cities and people, even the whole country. But it does not imply that the government must provide the financial support to these cities. As a main business and culture sustain central of a country,感觉有些别扭 the government should not only provide the finance sustain to the country but also give the advice about how toprotect the cultural tradition. If all of the matters give the government to administer, which will result the over load to the government, then the booming of a country will not be improving, even holding back. In other words, some big cities may have enough wealth to support the development of them and generate the nation's cultural tradition. The government should use the subsidization, which intends to sustain the big cities to support the rural areas. Otherwise, the increasing trend of urbanization will result in the poverty of the countryside, threatening the survival of a nation's traditional culture.

Actually, the major cities are not relative to cultural traditions directly. In nowadays, nations distinct cultural tradition, such as folk art, crafts, traditional songs and customs are developing more quickly in small towns and the rural regions, they provide a better environment for the development of the cultural traditions. Indeed, the big cities are the warehouse of old cultural tradition of a country. If we want to acquaint a country, we must notify the custom the big cities showing us at first. In fact, the big cities have little to do with one nation’s distinct cultural traditions. 这里好像有些矛盾，每太看清，另外这么说好像太绝对了，天坛故宫等没有体现独特的传统文化吗？They are only as the carriers for exchanging different culture that comes from other country. After all, modern cities are smelting furnaces of different cultural traditions, they cannot exhibit a nation’s unique culture. If so, the governments should not waste money to preserve these cultural traditions, they should provide the money to a place where it is needed, such as for creating a global culture.不过这个观点倒是值得探讨，我想一下怎么能说圆:>

In addition, due to the impact of globalization, the cities of the world are homogenized. As a consequence, a nation's cultural traditions might be easier to be preserved in the rural areas or by individuals and businesses. One apt illustration of this point is “internet”, which makes the computer become a part of our daily life; we can easily gain the knowledge from the Internet, containing the information about the old cultural traditions. It not only helps us to preserve the old cultural traditions, but also creates a new culture. It makes us live more easily and comfortably.新颖:>

In sum, the issue is troubling in several parts. Some cultural traditions do not need to be preserved and generated. Some cultural traditions could be preserved by themselves or by individuals or by businesses.could be preserved by themselves, individuals or businesses 这样好像简洁些 We cannot say government support is necessary. Moreover, the development of cities is not depending on governments.
观点蛮新颖的,不过觉得有些地方论证不是很充分,值得商讨~~

kionaUID: 207479

嗯，谢了，我再看看……
第一次写，头都大了……

foreveraUID: 202035

We always regard the major cities as the central of the nation's cultural traditions. Because it is always true that big cities of a country boom 感觉这个词不好，稍微有点口语化，不如换成thrivenot only in economy but also in culture. However, the speaker ignores there is a large group, that is, the rural areas of nation, in fact, they have wider spaces to develop. 这句结构乱了点My points 最好大概说一下，让读者心里大概有个数about this issue will be discussed as follows.

前面最好加上admittedly，或to begin with等引导词I concede that some cities are characterized by their long cultural traditions. These cultures create thousands of billions of wealth能用数词修饰吗？wealth for the cities and people, even the whole country. But it does not imply that the government must provide the financial support to these cities. As a main business and culture sustain central of a country, the government should not only provide the finance sustain to the country but also give the advice about how protect the cultural tradition. If all of the matters give the government to                administer, which will result inthe over load to the government, then the booming of a country will not be improving, even holding back.感觉这句的逻辑稍微有点问题 In other words, some big cities may have enough wealth to support the development of them and generate the nation's cultural tradition. The government should use the subsidization, which intends to sustain the big cities to support the rural areas. Otherwise, the increasing trend of urbanization will result in the poverty of the countryside, threatening the survival of a nation's traditional culture.这一段首先没有比较明确的TS，而且后半部分感觉条理不太清楚，逻辑也有点问题

Actually, the major cities are not relative to cultural traditions directly. In nowadays, nations distinct cultural tradition, such as folk art, crafts, traditional songs and customs are developing more quickly in small towns and the rural regions, they provide a better environment for the development of the cultural traditions. Indeed, the big cities are the warehouse of old cultural tradition of a country. If we want to acquaint a country, we must notify the custom the big cities showing us at first. In fact, the big cities既然都是warehouse了，又怎么可能没有民族最明显的传统呢？ have little to do with one nation’s distinct cultural traditions. They are only as the carriers for exchanging different culture that comes from other country. After all, modern cities are smelting furnaces of different cultural traditions, they cannot exhibit a nation’s unique culture. If so, the governments should not waste money to preserve these cultural traditions, they should provide the money to a place where it is needed, such as for creating a global culture.这段还不错，不过略微有点浅

In addition, due to the impact of globalization, the cities of the world are homogenized. As a consequence, a nation's cultural traditions might be easier to be preserved in the rural areas or by individuals and businesses. One apt illustration of this point is “internet”, which makes the computer become a part of our daily life; we can easily gain the knowledge from the Internet, containing the information about the old cultural traditions. It not only helps us to preserve the old cultural traditions, but also creates a new culture. It makes us live more easily and comfortably.没有把internet和小城市和乡村联系起来，而且我觉得例子也不是最典型的

In sum, the issue is troubling in several parts. Some cultural traditions do not need to be preserved and generated. Some cultural traditions could be preserved by themselves or by individuals or by businesses. We cannot say government support is necessary. Moreover, the development of cities is not depending on governments.


总体感觉论证的有些浅，还停留在现象层面上，没有深入到现象本身的原因中去。。。。柠檬加油哦~~~

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kionaUID: 207479

谢了，刚开始写。写得我都快恶心了！我会努力的！加油……你也是哦！我去看看同主题！