【TWE第一组】avex & ggq 第五期，4号更新见一楼

jackloveUID: 183611

我是第8组的
也要加入你们这了，行不？

epple0725UID: 2147937

我申请加入！！

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karenfan0712UID: 2162734

我也报名啊，前段时间工作太忙，第一篇TWE，请大家多多指教:$
40mins‘  approximately 300 words
Over the cause of the past one hundred years,automobiles,as the principle vehicles in the field of transportation,which shifted the age of modernization  into another gear,have tremendously changed our living patterns.

The advantage of automobiles,as the staple of transportation, has not only shortened the distance,but apparently saved our time.With automobiles,people,who he lives in one side of the town could apply  for a job,which is located in the other side of it,and get there in 30-40 minutes at most.Subsequently,there will be more previously unavailable jobs for applicants.

On the other hand,automobiles have a great influence on the development of economy.For example,in the past,the approaches of our traffic,including primitive tools such as bare feet ,carts,left much to be desired.Due to the invention of automobiles ,merchants have exchanged goods much more freely and directly than before,leading to the result which has enabled people to  enjoy commodities which were only available to a certain region.Moreover,the advanced transportation has build a bridge over urban and rural areas.By taking the expressway,people from rural areas could easily infuse to cities,solving the scarcity of manual labor.

However,while the new technology of transpotation might contribued to some of these contemporary conveniences,it also offers an environmental pollution,and a problem of global energy shortage.

As a whole,the benefit of automobiles will totally outweigh the side-effects.It is conceivable that automobiles,as the great invention of industrialization,have accelerated the pace of our lives.

avexUID: 159089

呵呵，好的，大家互改吧。
人数太多也不好办，所以到此为止吧

Originally posted by karenfan0712 at 2005-12-30 13:30
我也报名啊，前段时间工作太忙，第一篇TWE，请大家多多指教:$
40mins‘  approximately 300 words
Over the cause of the past one hundred years,automobiles,as the principle vehicles in the field of tra ...

Over the cause of 去掉the past one hundred years,automobiles,as the principle vehicles in the field of transportation,which shifted the age of modernization  into another gear,have tremendously changed our living patterns.呵呵，一句话开头，厉害；anyway但好像有点单薄和shift & change在一句说有点罗嗦

The advantage of automobiles,as the staple of transportation, has not only shortened the distance这个地方有逻辑错误并没有shorten the distance，而是altered the notion of people concerning the distance或用seemingly,but apparently saved our time.With automobiles,people,who he lives 语法错误in one side of the town could apply  for a job,which is located in the other side of it,and 这表示warrant比较好就是说people能够这样做的原因就是可用with the result that ...  get there in 30-40 minutes at most.Subsequently,there will be more previously unavailable jobs for applicants. (呵呵，不如再同时加个论点，就是manufacture 对应 job creation)

On the other hand,automobiles have a great influence on the development of economy.For example,in the past,the approaches of our traffic,including primitive tools such as bare feet ,carts,left much to be desired.Due to the invention of automobiles ,merchants have exchanged goods much more freely and directly than before,leading to the result which has enabled people to  enjoy commodities which were only available to a certain region.Moreover,the advanced transportation has build a bridge over urban and rural areas.By taking the expressway,people from rural areas could easily infuse to cities,solving the scarcity of manual labors .呵呵想起阅读的urbanization & industrialization 的那篇

However,while the new technology of transpotation might contribued to some of these contemporary conveniences,it also offers换个贬义的吧 an environmental pollution,and a problem of global energy shortage.

As a whole,the benefit of automobiles will totally outweigh the side-effects.It is
conceivable that automobiles,as the great invention of industrialization,have accelerated the pace of our lives.

[ Last edited by avex on 2005-12-30 at 15:30 ]

avexUID: 159089

12月29号主题

topic 36

Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives.
• automobiles
• bicycles
• airplanes
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Thanks to the advent of automobile, people’s lives are now more efficient, more convenient and more fascinating than before. At the same time, associating with some unfavorable issue such as pollution our economy and culture have been altered by the significant effect of automobiles. Owing to both negative and positive effects of automobiles, people’s lives are totally different. The arguments for my view go as follows.

As a threshold matter, in one sense automobiles as a substitute for the old forms of transportation make people’s lives more efficient and comfortable. One can not deny that compared with walking or horse carriages automobiles are definitely faster. The time people spend on commuting is dwindled, which in part accounts for why modern life is more efficient than past. Also reducing is the effect of bad weather to traveling due to the cozy space automobiles offer to us. Furthermore, along with the comfortable condition during traveling, the additional equipment of automobiles such as the radio and television makes the journey full of fun.

At an even deeper level, without doubt automobiles have shaped our culture and economy which are close relative to the quality of our lives. On one hand, not only do the manufacture, sale, and servicing of automobiles themselves contribute to economy greatly, but the high-speed circulation automobiles permit also change other trades a lot. The other manufacture will be more flexible and efficient in that the materials are more accessible owing to the introduction of the fast vehicle. Meanwhile, both the reachable market to manufacturers and the range of products available to customers are broader. On the other hand, automobiles become a substantial part of the modern culture. For instance, the delicately designed cars such as some models of Porsche become the collection of many people. Formula One derives fascination from all over the world.

However, with those huge benefits, automobiles also call into several problems in people’s lives. Noise and Pollution will be at the top of those problems. The dramatic boost of automobiles is responsible for the deficiency of petroleum as well, which would be mostly concerned by many people nowadays. Moreover, other problems like automobile accidents also causes negative effects to people’s lives.

To sum up, with the great mobility of automobiles people’s lives are more efficient and comfortable, and our culture and economy are also changed remarkably, albeit automobiles lead to some side-effects on people’s lives. Yet for better or worse, there is no denying that automobiles have altered people’s lives hugely, which is the reason why the 1900s can be called the age of the automobile.

karenfan0712UID: 2162734

强烈同意28楼~:handshake
LZ出题，每天一篇吧，大家共同努力啊！

sailor0117UID: 2127508

With the rapid development of science and technology, people’ lives have experienced great changes in almost every field especially the transportation vehicles. One of the most important inventions which possess the most revolutionary significance is airplane.
The naissance of airplane firstly invented by Green Bothers is a milestone in the history of the transportation vehicles. The aero plane has remarkably changed peoples’ lives and become the necessity for all of us. For instance, the plane has shortened the distance of the world, it can help people travel from China to the United States within 12 hours which will cost a couple of days without the airplanes before. The plane has also provided people countless conveniences and opportunities to recognize the world and promote the mutual understand, communication and friendship among countries. People can take the airplane to visit any corner of the world and enjoy the local customs.
Now, even in the coldest winter, people lived in the northeast part of China can easily find some fresh tropic fruits such as coconut, pineapple, lychee and so on with reasonable price in the local supermarkets, which seemed incredible if there was no airplane. The aero plane makes it efficient to airlift the fruits from Hainan located at the south boundary to Harbin located at the northeast boundary and help people taste the tropic flavors at home, it also stimulates the trade and exchange of different regions and different countries.
Another service related to airplane is EMS, which facilitates our lives and is widely applied in our daily life. It delivers the packages, letters and important documents from one place to another at the highest speed and with high security as well as accuracy. In the early days without EMS, it will take us almost a week to send a letter from Beijing to Shanghai. Worse still, the long journey can not ensure the security of the letter, some letters even hardly reaches their expected terminals. But now, the letter sent by EMS will shorten a week into one or two days and can be received by the exact addressee.
To sum up, the airplane, the symbol of people’s intelligence, does really bring great changes and numerous conveniences to people’ lives. With the science and technology continuous progress, it will go on to better our lives in the future.

karenfan0712UID: 2162734

两次TWE都感觉字数不够：（，请问一般写多少字适合？
30min'  approximately 300 words
There is no one but longs to go to university,since university is a very important time in a student's educational life when they persue their career in the future.So,we focus a spotlight on how to study more effectively and comprehensively.Some people believe that students should be required to attend classes.However,others take the view that classes should be optional for students.While both may have their advantage and disadvantage,they can be applied under different circumstances.Afterwards, I will explain my opinion about it.

In a traditional view,there is no denying that attending every class should be considered the student's most imperative responsibility.When we are neophytes in a certain course,it is sagacious to attend all the lectures,since teachers can not only give us a definite direction,but also the reference we should choose as well.After a period of time,some students who acquire the ability to study by themselves may think that attending all the classes is not helpful to them.

On the contrary,if all the courses are optional, students can arrange their schedules which tailor their individual needs flexiblely.For example,while having trouble to concentrate in some boring lectures,students may find it more effectively to study in the library.But,a disadvantage of this is that students apt to avoid their most disliked but useful courses which may do harm to their academic progress.

In conclusion,it seems  rather superficial to say that all the curricula should be required or optional.Neither every student nor every class is the same,therefore,it is the university's responsibility to seperate its curricula into compulsory and optional classes.As a result ,students can be cultivated more effectively and comprehensively.

[ 本帖最后由 karenfan0712 于 2006-1-2 12:21 编辑 ]

avexUID: 159089

第五期,来晚了


In my country, most universities have established rules to force students to attend almost all the classes, even though some classes might not be suitable for some students. Frankly speaking, I do not consider that it is sensible to adopt those rules. For my part, giving the moderate freedom to students on this issue attending classes would be more advantageous. The argument for my view goes as follows

As a threshold matter, admittedly attending classes might be beneficial for some students in some respects. Teachers will guide us to learn the theory and the discussion and seminar will offer a channel for students to obtain the diverse information about the issue, which will lead to a more profound understanding.

Valid as this argument and I wholeheartedly agree with that, however, it is still not reasonable enough to convince me that In any term attending classes is a sound way for most students, let alone the best one. On one hand, not all the classes are helpful to most students due to some unexpected factors. The unsuitable instruction of some teachers might make students difficult to understand their ideas.

On the other hand, learning on their own might be more efficient than attending classes in some cases. Nowadays, by virtue of the development of technologies the methods and sources students can utilize are extremely abundant. Not only is the amount of relative information students can find incredible thanks to libraries and internet, but also the searching technology and systematic arrangement make it easily to target what they really want. Moreover, though the flexible schedule designed to meet their own needs and concerns learning would become more effective.

Furthermore, another benefit that can not be neglected is that making the attendance of classes optional would enhance the ability of students to study by themselves. By this action, the independent learning will naturally become a favorable choice for students to gain knowledge, and this change will force them to figure out the suitable means to learn faster.

To sum up, albeit attending classes will be helpful to students in a sense, without considering other negative factors one can not argue that students ought to be required to do so. In contrast, attending classes optionally appears to be more advisable when its advantages I have outlined above are taken into account.

avexUID: 159089

原帖由 karenfan0712 于 2006-1-2 12:17 发表
两次TWE都感觉字数不够：（，请问一般写多少字适合？
30min'  approximately 300 words
There is no one but longs to go to university,since university is a very important time in a student's educationa ...

There is no one but longs to go to university,since university is a very important time in a student's educational life when they persue their career in the future.这句有问题university 不能是time So,we focus a spotlight on how to study more effectively and comprehensively.Some people believe that students should be required to attend classes.However,others take the view that classes should be optional for students. 这句最好是不要写，很罗嗦看着像模版的While both may have their advantage and disadvantage,they can be applied under different circumstances.Afterwards, I will explain my opinion about it.

In a traditional view,there is no denying that attending every class should be considered the student's most imperative responsibility.When we are neophytes 红包又闪耀了想起ggq的shingle了 in a certain course,it is sagacious to attend all the lectures,since teachers can not only give us a definite direction,but also the reference we should choose as well.After a period of time,some students who acquire the ability to study by themselves may think that attending all the classes is not helpful to them.

On the contrary,if all the courses are optional, students can arrange their schedules which tailor their individual needs flexiblely这句表述是不是有问题时meet needs不是tailor.For example,while having trouble to concentrate in on some boring lectures,students may find it more effectively to study in the library.But,这个逗号很别扭a disadvantage of this is that students apt to avoid their most disliked but useful courses which may do harm to their academic progress从句语法错误Apt要加be动词

In conclusion,it seems  rather superficial to say that all the curricula should be required or optional.Neither every student nor every class is the same,therefore,语法错误,少连词it is the university's responsibility to seperate its curricula into compulsory and optional classes. As a result ,students can be cultivated more effectively and comprehensively.


我觉得字数够了，但是你的开头段太长了，50左右比较好，因为你的主体段很短
我觉如果主体分三段的话50 80 80+ 50 50比较合适

然后是观点，我并不是说你的观点不对
但是题目是Which point of view do you agree with
所以我觉得还是与一边沾边为好，不全沾也办沾in part
因为很难用300字把一个灰色地带说的完满（issue也需要技巧才能说得很明白），所以什么depends on的方式，我觉得不一定好

jackloveUID: 183611

原帖由 avex 于 2006-1-4 00:29 发表
第五期,来晚了


In my country, most universities have established rules to force students to attend almost all the classes, even though some classes might not be suitable for some students. Fran ...

AVEX你的文章写的真的excellent

读起来很顺，衔接的比较好，意思也很明确
考过G的吧？
我要多学习了~~~

jackloveUID: 183611

40min

Should university students be required to attend classes? Some people think that university students have the optional to go to classes. In my opinion, however, I agree with the policy that university students should be required to attend classes. There are three reasons to support my argument.

One of the important reasons why university should require student to go to classes is that many distinguished professors are available in classes. These professors usually make great contributions to their fields and know a lot of information, and also know the subject’s trend. Going to their classes, students are always provided more useful and deep knowledge in relevant fields. Meanwhile, professors can offer students a wide range of knowledge and experience, not only about their fields but other fields which are tightly associated with their fields. Instead, you can miss the classes but teach yourself. It is clear that you are hard to get information that are interesting and useful from professors’ presentation. Perhaps information teachers told are useful for the final exam, you are likely to get a low grade because of absence of classes.

Another reason is that students can discuss the problems each other, which could help them understand and grasp. In general, professors may explain some special questions unclearly for you. At this time classmates can help you understand because he/she may know your question better than your teachers do. Moreover, it helps you build a fundamental friendship between students when you are all attending classes.

On the other hand, if you do not attend classes, you are likely to learn a little from textbooks in the end. Books are always abstract and tedious. When you read, it is likely that you have to resort to others’ notes to help you understand. Through this, you may take more time to learn. What’s worse, you may acquire a little.

In conclusion, I think that university students should be required to attend classes because there are many famous professors that teach students and it offer opportunities to discuss the problems to help their studies. Therefore,  attending classes beneficial to students.

avexUID: 159089

原帖由 jacklove 于 2006-1-4 11:35 发表


AVEX你的文章写的真的excellent

读起来很顺，衔接的比较好，意思也很明确
考过G的吧？
我要多学习了~~~

呵呵，没考过
我也是6g的
而且也是鼎均考，只不过日期比你晚一些

ps:1Tcrack后，一块去g版玩吧
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