issue154（GOGOGO）

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Issue154（2005年2-9月总频50次）
"Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
【翻译】
家长和社会都应该参与到当地的教育中来。教育的至关重要性决定了它不能只依靠专业的教育工作者。



1.明确同意此观点
2.家长对于教育的重要性(孟母三迁)
3.社会对于教育的重要性
4.没有了家长和社会的作用,教育将会怎样.
5.结尾


   Along with the development of the society, education will play more important role in the knowledge economy age. How to improve our education manner is a popular topic in the world. I think involving in the education is a good choice for parents and community. Our children will benefit a lot from the wonderful decision.

   Firstly, parents are the most significant person for the children's education. They would be more convenient to educate children than the skilled educator after school. For one thing, parents could help their children to complete homework and teach some extra knowledge which is not taught by teachers such as family history and so on. It is important for children to learn knowledge from different place. For another thing, a majority of parents could well communicate with children because they know and trust each other. Some worried of children could be measured by parents in the early time. Although all parents have their own work to do, they are the indispensable effort of the education in children’s daily life.

   What is more, community also contributes to children by involving in the education. They could help children to learn what a real life is. Inviting professional people to do some communications with children is a simply way to educate them Variety of person such as policeman, and nurse could talk with children and teach them some ability to deal with emergency. The social skills can not be taught like the common curriculum such as mathematics, physics, or literature. An increasing number of people are beginning to realize that education is not just study in the classroom. Community is like anther school to teach children how to cooperate with various persons and how to consider different affairs. According to a recent survey, almost all the successful persons play an important role in community when they were young.

    In another hand, without the efforts of parents and communities, the education should be questioned. If the parents are always busy with working and not give a glance at children, we could not image that the children could understand what life is. Due to lack of dependency, the young children may cling to some others such as drugs, alcohol and violence. At the same time, it is harmful for children to take little community life. Without the spirit of team work, people could win nothing but failure.

    In conclusion, both parents and communities can contribute much to the education of the children after involvement. The whole society should pay close attention to the children's education. Only in this way can make our children excellent.

[ Last edited by 加一 on 2005-12-21 at 10:22 ]

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sorry,闹混了，改正下~

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Along with the development of the society, education will play an more （and more） important role in the knowledge economy age. How to improve our education manner is a popular topic in the world. I think involving in the education is a good choice for parents and community. Our children will benefit a lot from the wonderful decision.
第一段话扯得有点远了，没有扣住文章的题目，建议单刀直入摆明观点：赞同家长和社区参与学校工作。

   Firstly, parents are the most significant person for the children's education. They would be more convenient to educate children than the skilled educator after school. （这句话的观点有点问题，建议可以说在放学后，家长和学生相伴的时间很多，对学生的影响很大） For one thing, parents could help their children to complete homework （家长帮学身做作业？？）and teach some extra knowledge which is not taught by teachers such as family history and so on. （这个举例不是特别好，建议可以说由于家长只有一个孩子，而老师有很多学生，家长可以给学生更多的关注，更容易发现他们的问题）It is important for children to learn knowledge from different place. （这句话和这段的主题无关，又扯远了！）For another thing, a majority of parents could well communicate with children because they know and trust each other. Some :confused:worried of children could be measured by parents in the early time. Although all parents have their own work to do, they are the:confused: indispensable effort of the education in children’s daily life.
这段说明家长对学生的成长有很大的影响，但是总觉得没有说出实质性的理由。建议可以说由于家长只有一个孩子，而老师有很多学生，家长可以给学生更多的关注，更容易发现他们的问题。抓住一点来展开就好:)

   What is more, （Moreover, in addition） community also contributes to children by involving in the education. (读着别扭！)They could help children to learn what a real life is. Inviting professional people （什么专业人士？专业教育者吗？又回到题目中的问题了）to do some communications with children is a simply way to educate them Variety of person such as policeman, and nurse could talk with children and teach them some ability to deal with emergency. The social skills can not be taught like the common curriculum such as mathematics, physics, or literature. An increasing number of people are beginning to realize that education is not just study in the classroom. Community is like anther school to teach children how to cooperate with various persons and how to consider different affairs. According to a recent survey, almost all the successful persons play an important role in community when they were young. (这句话加在这里有点突兀！放在前面可以接受！)

    In another hand, （好像只看到有in the other hand）without the efforts of parents and communities, the education should be questioned. If the parents are always busy with working and not give a glance at children, we could not image that the children could understand what life is. Due to lack of dependency, the young children may cling to some others （some others一般指人吧！something else） such as drugs, alcohol and violence. At the same time, it is harmful for children to take little community life. Without the spirit of team work, people could win nothing but failure.:victory:
这段是想从反面说，但是感觉没有说清楚！

    In conclusion, both parents and communities can (should) contribute much to the education of the children after involvement. The whole society should pay close attention to the children's education. Only in this way can make our children excellent.

不知道是不是楼主的处女篇;P，我的建议是：要想得高分就必须“勤加练习”。不要给自己任何理由，一定按时完成作业！
加油哦！:victory: