12月22日，1T作文第三期同主题写作。12.24凌晨更新,请大家看一下

jackloveUID: 183611

占一个，明天写

北回归线UID: 2130044

It is a truth universally acknowledged that games are always fascinating. On the one hand, many people still hold the traditional belief that games are the monoply of the children, on the other hand, I put forward the idea that games are as important for adults as they are for the kids. Accordingly, the main purpose of my essay is to offer sufficient and essential evidence from the following variety of aspects.

First of all, with today's hectic schedules, it is necessary to spend some time each day to relax and let the stress dissipate from our bodies and minds. Most people find that the working world is quite difficult at times, and need a method to relax. Playing games is just one of the most efficient way. Because games allow adults to escape from real life and offer a brand new perspective to the world. Games have thousands of types and styles. There must be one kind that you are interested in and get entertained absolutely.

Moreover, playing games could help adults pick up some important spirits again that they may have lost in grown-up days. For instance, one may be tired of many things after several years working, but when he/she is involved in a game, he/she could't help to be eager to win. Then he/she would regain his/her vitality gradually. In addition, while the stress of competition makes more and more people more and more selfish, some large-scaled games need lots of teamwork to complete. So they can reform their understandings of the role of co-operation in everyday work.

Finally, adults could always get reminded from games to keep childlike hearts. If we simplify complex affairs, fix an honest eye on our world and concentrate less on economic issues, as the kids do, we would lead much more beautiful lives.

In conclusion, although children could benefit a lot from games, such as attaining skills, developing the ability of language, for adults' side, games play an equally, even more important role on relaxing them from hard work, regaining vivid spirits and keep a pure heart.

347words 45min
(速度仍然还是大问题,是由于不熟练吧)

[ Last edited by 北回归线 on 2005-12-23 at 13:20 ]

olive8310UID: 2164907

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, Games are not only a kind of entertainment, but also a kind of a tool for learning or even become a career. It plays an important role in our daily life. If we feel boring when we waiting or spend our leisure time in weekend, we might take out our mobile phone and play the games for a while and even an adult will do so. Playing Game is not a patent for children, but for adults. I will give my opinion in the following statements.

First of all, with the development of the new technology, especially in personal computer area, it changes with each passing day, a new computer game may show us the new technologies. If you are an engineer in Computer and Science, you may learn how to use those new technologies in computer with the game shown to you. Secondly, with the development of the internet, net games become more and more popular in society, at the very beginning, the players just enjoy playing inside the game, later, they found that some players need more game-coins which have to earn by time, but those players whom want to be more strong and power do not want to use their time in earning coins. Soon, it brings a supply and demand relationship to the game. Some players earn game-coins everyday and sell to the players those who need it. They chance the game into their career and enjoy it. That is what we can see in most of the consumer to consumer web site such as eBay. Finally, a good game can set us free from a five days work and bring us happiness.

For the reasons stated above, I believe that games are only appropriate for children but also for adults. We can find happiness with it, we can learn something with it, and we also can regard it as a career. With so many advantages, why can not an adult play games?

Finally那点我还想写点东西 不知道写什么好 或者换句话也好 但想不出来了
大家加油拍啊 表客气哈 特别是TTzoe :lol 你写好了记得PM告诉我

[ Last edited by olive8310 on 2005-12-23 at 00:49 ]

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

不知道你用了多长时间，写了250个字左右，有点少了，希望能再加一段。你从学习和休闲两方面说，思路是不错的。只是，这两个思路都不是很有针对性，就是说，你不觉得这两个思路放到未成年人身上也同样适用吗？请看看我对8楼和11楼作文的点评。
第二段没写主题句啊，注意一下。

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

31分钟写出这样，可以说挺不错的啦~~~
第二段有点过长了，其中叙述现代人压力的话有些赘余，可以间接些。而后两段由于时间问题显得有些敷衍的味道。
另外再从创新观点的方面多说两句，你的第三个理由其实是很有意思可以重点来写的，应该把有特点的段落重点写，而不是把和别人思路一样的段落写的太多。成人和小孩很大的不同之一就是人际关系，时尚的说法就是人脉。与他人玩游戏是一种很好的沟通途径，可以交流非常多的信息。比如，大老板们很多时候是在打高尔夫球时决定下上千万甚至上亿美圆的生意的~~~~

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

中间被打断还是在比较少的时间里写了字数和质量都不错的文章。
第二个观点，和很多人一样，有一个问题，就是不是很有针对性。游戏对孩子不是也是有教育作用吗？要发掘它对成年人的独特的贡献。同样的观点，稍微换个说法就可以做到了：说游戏可以启发和促进成年人在工作中的思考。比如说对企业发展的战略啊，如何管理员工啊等等。

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

经过了两次同主题，发现大家的写作时间和字数都有显著的提高 呵呵
你的第一和第二个理由好象差不多的样子啊，是不是？

stoneSQUID: 2145827

刚刚开了咱们组的贴，下午再回来。

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ttzoeUID: 202809

我的作文，大家使劲儿扔砖吧，作揖ing

No two people hold quite the same opinion towards the issue that whether games are as meaningful to adults as they do to children, the varieties are infinite. But two classes can be roughly seen: support and opponent. While I admit that the opposed statement may has some merits in some sense. My choice would fall into the former group.

The main reason for my propensity to support this statement involves that games teach individuals, not only children, but also adults, to appreciate the very essence of them. It is true that almost all games practiced nowadays are competitive. You play to win, and the game, many of us believe, has little meaning unless you do your utmost to win. Actually, it is the other way around. In the green field, when you pick up sides and no feeling of mere so called “prestige” involved, it is entirely possible to play simply for the fun and exercise. What is more, as a matter of fact, games tend to make people realize it. For one thing, since most of games are team-worked, you would loose partners unless you learnt to deal with lost gracefully, which is a must-have skills in the business world as well.

Another reason has to with the cultivation of the sense of being a team player. Team spirit has become a global buzz word in our time. Nearly no work today, in violent contrast with a few decades ago, does not require the skill of being a team player. In this respect, games serve incredibly in forming this sense of being part of a team. Since many such games as football, basketball, volleyball, etc. are several persons job. Only when collaborate well all members make it possible to win. It is like a enormous clock, solely all little cogs mesh together can it work smoothly. Games just provide us with the opportunity to appreciate this feeling.

Needless to say, games are of significance to children. Because the basic social skills such as communication with others are gained primarily during the practicing of games. For example, if a boy intends to win a football match, which requires the cooperation of the whole team, it is advisable to know how to communicate with, or even inspire, effectively his peers.

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly, and probably will always, believe that games possess the same importance towards adults as they do to children. For they function well as the mentors that tell us what the essential import of games is, whilst teach us the tricks of being a competent team player.

ttzoeUID: 202809

改oliver8310的文章

Nowadays, G(g)ames are not only a kind of entertainment, but also a kind of a tool for learning or even become(去掉) a career. It plays（they play，前面说的是games，前后文最好一致吧） an important role in our daily life. If we feel boring when we waiting or spend our leisure time in（at） weekend（s）, we might take out our mobile phone and play the games for a while and even an adult will do so. Playing Game is not a patent for children, but for adults. I will give my opinion in the following statements.（my statement can be porved as follows）（个人觉得开头段没必要举具体例子来说明你的观点，只要客观陈述就好，不然显得不够简洁）

First of all, with the development of the new technology, especially in personal computer area, it changes with each passing day, （这句话删掉，与前后不能够成连冠的句子，我不知该怎么表述，就是说，没有这句话句子已经完整了，这个插入语加进去后反而成了语病）a new computer game may show us the new technologies. If you are an engineer in Computer and（删掉，这样显得例子比较specific，只说计算机方面） Science, you may learn how to use those new technologies in computer with the game shown to you. （我觉得这个first里说的内容不能证明“games对adults重要”呢）Secondly, with the development of the internet, net games become more and more popular in society, at the very beginning, the players just enjoy playing inside the game, later, they found that some players need more game-coins which have to earn by time, but those players whom want to be more strong and power do not want to use their time in earning coins. Soon, it brings a supply and demand relationship to the game. Some players earn game-coins everyday and sell to the players those who need it. They chance the game into their career and enjoy it. That is what we can see in most of the consumer to consumer web site such as eBay.（这个想法很新颖，不错，但是立意不是很明显，最好说下比如games improve the development of a particular kind of economy之类的） Finally, a good game can set us free from a five days work and bring us happiness.（确实，这个finally……就像你说的，是没时间了吗？可以考虑发展写下，比如现在工作压力都大，games可以让我们放松，这样会更好的再投入工作）

另外，（不知是不是发上来的或者是我copy过来修改的时候格式出了问题，）怎么body段落写成了一大段阿，还是分开吧（当然要是因为括号里所说原因……hehe，就sorry啦）

For the reasons stated above, I believe that games are （not）only appropriate for children but also for adults. （文章里not only……but also用的次数好多哦，换个表达吧）We can find happiness with it, we can learn something with it, and we also can regard it as a career. With so many advantages, why can not an adult play games?（这个……换个内容，这样问感觉是成人不能play games，而题目说的是games对adults是否重要，容易让人觉得你跑题了）

[ Last edited by ttzoe on 2005-12-23 at 11:12 ]

OrimyUID: 2168139

No.60  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Games are as important for both adults as they are for children.

It is undeniable that game plays an important role in both adults’ and children’s daily lives. I would have to agree with the statement entirely. Adults, although they have a lot of work to do, also call for games. Just as the ancient proverb goes, “all work and no play make Jack a doll boy”.

It seems obvious that games contain a lot of fun which couldn’t be replaced. That is to say not only the kids but the working people can spend their leisure time in a proper way, playing games. When people in games, they usually forget the load on their shoulder temporarily and enjoy themselves totally. It is a constructive way to save a person who is under deep pressures. Therefore, adults and children should say “yes” to games.

In addition to this, communication through games should also be taken into consideration. This point of view is not only including the team-work games among the close aged people but between adults and children. It is beneficial to them to cross the generation gap and to be linked together. For instance, parents understand the teenagers’ way of thinking through which games they prefer or even join them. That would be great if a game is accepted by both the aged and adolescent players.

Similarly, the reasons are also useable when we consider the economic aspects. A case of professional gamers is not rare. They take playing PC games as their job and earn money through winning in games. This kind of people is usually between twenty and thirty years old according to the investigations in China Daily. The beneficial elements would be more obvious when the persons who invent a game are counted. Thus, all the people have to give up the game is “giving up” itself.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that games to both kids and aged people are of great significance. If you want to have fun, just enjoy the games.




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olive8310UID: 2164907

TTZOE的作文

No two people hold quite the same opinion towards the issue that whether games are as meaningful to adults as they do to children, the varieties are infinite. But two classes can be roughly seen: support and opponent. While I admit that the opposed statement may has some merits in some sense.(用逗号好一点吧,应该是一句连贯的话) My choice would fall into the former group.

The main reason for my propensity to support this statement involves that games teach individuals, not only children, but also adults, to appreciate the very essence of them. It is true that almost all games practiced (是想说particularly吗?) nowadays are competitive. You play to 用for比较好win, and the game, many of us believe, has little meaning unless you do your utmost to win. Actually, it is the other way around. In the green field, when you pick up sides and no feeling of mere so called “prestige” involved, it is entirely possible to play simply for the fun and exercise. What is more, as a matter of fact, games tend to make people realize it. For one thing, since most of games are team-worked, you would loose(loose partner是想说miss partner吧) partners unless you learnt to deal with lost gracefully, which is a must-have skills in the business world as well USA. Another reason has to with the cultivation of the sense of being a team player. Team spirit has become a global buzz word in our time. Nearly no work today用Most of the work today会不会好点 Nearly用起来怪怪的, in violent contrast with a few decades ago, does not require the skill of being a team player.(以前也很需要TEAM WORK的吧 team spirit 在什么时候都重要 最好的例子是大企业都是team spirit的 一个人干的公司永远大不起来) In this respect, games serve incredibly in forming this sense of being part of a team. Since many such games as football, basketball, volleyball, etc. are several persons job. Only when collaborate well all members make it possible to win. It is like a enormous clock, solely all little cogs mesh together can it work smoothly. 用得很好 不过a -->an Games just provide us with the opportunity to appreciate this feeling.

Needless to say, games are of significance to children. Because the basic social skills such as communication with others are gained primarily during the practicing of games. For example, if a boy intends to win a football match, which requires the cooperation of the whole team, it is advisable to know how to communicate with, or even inspire, effectively his peers.

In conclusion, I wholeheartedly, and probably will always, believe that games possess the same importance towards adults as they do to children. For they function as well as the mentors that tell us what the essential import of games is, whilst teach us the tricks of being a competent team player.

;) 提前送上 Merry Christmas:victory:

olive8310UID: 2164907

我的想法好象没在T文里面有人写过吧 感觉不好写 要琢磨下怎么写才好```:(

ttzoeUID: 202809

呵呵，Merry X-mas，too
首先，谢谢你帮我改作文。
但是，to be honest，我觉得有点问题，至少是在一下几个上：
1、practiced没有错，我就是说的practice不是particular，这里是过去分词做后置定语（语法上是叫这个吗？我不确定，但是确定的是，这里没有错哈）
2、play to win不是for， win这里是动词
3、nearly no……does not我是想用双重否定
不过你说的对，过去也要求团队精神，我这个contrast确实不好，但是当时没有想到怎么写，我在想是不是改成越来越重要比较好

ttzoeUID: 202809

Originally posted by olive8310 at 2005-12-23 12:14
我的想法好象没在T文里面有人写过吧 感觉不好写 要琢磨下怎么写才好```:(

刚才忘了说，没人写过才好啊，这样才新颖，兴许还会因为这个多加点分呢。:)