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sofanUID: 153987

Topic: What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter?Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture?

Qualities, which are expected for children by parents, have been varying as outer circumstances changes and depend on the letter adaption required for outer conditions,In my opinion , nowadays,highly competitive society require children to become ambitions, showy and the alike,in a short ,to be flexible.

First,ambition, an intense desire to achieve a touring aspiration has always motivated you to work hard and may be a determinant factor resulting in success.The goal for a person is just like a beacon for a navigator,To be ambitions seems much more important in fiercely competitive society since stopping trying to achieve further successes will certainly lead to loose in battles with rivals.It is obvious that the children trained to be ambitions will become more adaptable to competition.

Second,to be showy that means to project image is another important characteristic appreciated by most parents.It is a common experience for many people that many of us would like to make contact with successful persons, thus showing others. How pre-eminent you are in your field is so crucial that may have a great effect on whether a chance would be given,which could a pivotal for you final achievement.Apparently,the characteristic mentioned above is considered as a child ‘s advantage who process it.

Of course,a number of qualities should descrve appreviation.All of which ,however,must be ones that can engourage children to get successful more easily.

In fact ,these factors above are not encouraged by traditional culture in our culture and even are restained.Admittedly, modest is certainly a good trait,but in a fast pacing society,hiding your ability is not a good choice.I therefore approvete that children should be ambitions and showy.

liverpooUID: 197076

Topic: What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter?Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture?
对不起大家都快考了，只能改两段了见谅

Qualities, which are expected for children by parents, have been varying as outer circumstances changes and depend on the letter? adaption required for outer conditions,
The qualities, which are expected for children by their parents, have been valued differently corresponding to the changes in social requirements. Such qualities would make children more adaptable to the society in the future.In my opinion , nowadays highly competitive society requires children to be ambitious, open and the alike. in a short ,to be flexible.？？

First, ambition, an intense desire to achieve a touring aspiration has always motivated you to work hard and may be a determinant factor resulting in success.
First, an ambitious person would be more likely to work hard and overcome the difficulties he/she encounters in the way to success.
The goal for a person is just like a beacon for a navigator.  Excellent!

To be ambitious seems to be much more important in fiercely这个词不好用 increasingly competitive society.
since stopping trying to achieve further successes will certainly lead to loose in battles with rivals.
Because such a society do not allow for any laxness while the ambiton would make you alert to any challenge by rivals or by society.  换上一句
It is obvious很好句式 that the children trained to be ambitious will become more adaptable to competition. 最后楼主ambitious记得改过来

Second,to be showy that means to project image is another important characteristic appreciated by most parents.It is a common experience for many people that many of us would like to make contact with successful persons, thus showing others. How pre-eminent you are in your field is so crucial that may have a great effect on whether a chance would be given,which could a pivotal for you final achievement.Apparently,the characteristic mentioned above is considered as a child ‘s advantage who process it.

Of course,a number of qualities should descrve appreviation. All of which ,however,must be ones that can engourage children to get successful more easily.

[ 本帖最后由 liverpoo 于 2006-1-5 23:14 编辑 ]