请大家帮我改改twe作文？

liyi_hustUID: 2166649

感觉自己练了几篇没什么进步，为了在30分钟写完，几乎写不出什么好句子
郁闷阿

题目：书本和电影，哪一个更enjoyable？
Books, which have several hundred years’ history, have contributed a lot to the human life. Movies, however, which come into being for the recent decades, are the one of the most interesting media forms in the history. Some people prefer books, and others may think movies are more enjoyable. In my point of view, I think movies are more enjoyable than books for the following reasons.
        First, movies are time saving for us students. Most people spend about five days to read a book, but it will take only one hour or two to enjoy the same story in the film. And fortunately, most famous books are translated to movies nowadays. For students, especially those students who have little time to read books in their spare time, movie is a better choice.
        Second, movies relax us more than books. When people read a book, they have to image the scenery, people face, and all the factors in the book, because no pictures show them these. In a movie, every factor is just there, people need not think about them, what people need do is only watching and listening. For example, in the famous movie Harry Porter, there are hundreds of people, beasts and lots of wonderful magic that people can hardly image. But in a film, all these are done by the film makers.
        The last but not the least, people get movies more convenient than books with the development of the technology. In the past, people can only see the movie in the cinema, but now, we can borrow movie DVD from the shop, we can download the movie file from the internet, and even we can put the movies in our notebook computer and watch it whenever we want. But, books, we can only buy them, or borrow them, and a wonderful book is usually too heavy to carry. Although sometimes we can get some books from the internet, people can not get used to watch the screen for book reading.
        So, take all the reasons mentioned above, we can see that movies are more enjoyable if you have little time to read books, and if you need a fully relaxation, and they are more convenient to get. Books, also have their own merits, that is, they give people more space to image. But, as a student who studies science and technology in the school all day long, I will not think that imagination is enjoyable.

summerwuUID: 194933

just have read of it. Fundamentally, you have express your idea clearly, yet, as you pointed out yourself, both the words and the structure of sentences are not perfect.

anyway, it cannot be enhanced in few days, so you wanna land some good sentence during exam, you can recite some good sentence structure. This may, in some sense, do you any good.:)

wish you a good luck

[ 本帖最后由 summerwu 于 2006-1-10 14:40 编辑 ]

foolboy007UID: 28322

正如楼上所讲的 语言上不是很好 中文化严重
另外阿，不要讲在网上下载电影，那是严重侵权行为