1月10日，1T作文第八期同主题写作

Lyon_TonyUID: 178961

TOPIC

131. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

参考分析：

参考分析：
不能同意。Only是绝对修饰词。
确实，往往成功的一个表象是金钱的多少。

•钱不是衡量成功的唯一的标准。黑社会分子(members of criminal syndicate)、一些黑心的商人(evil-minded businessman)。

•有些职业收入远不如其他行业，比如，我国的教师，护士。

•成功的定义更应该基于社会贡献：甘地(Gandhi)就身无分文(without a cash in his pocket)；特蕾莎修女( Nurse Theresa )也是好例子。

参考例文：

Many people believe that a large income equals success. I believe, however, that success is more than how much money you make. Some of those measures of success include fame, respect, and knowledge.

Most people assume that famous people are rich people, but that isn’t always true. For example, someday I would like to be a famous researcher. Few scientists are rich by today’s standards. Still, I will feel myself to be successful if I am well known. Additionally, there are many famous humanitarians who are not so rich. Mother Theresa was one. Certainly, no one would say she was not successful.

I also believe that being respected by co-workers indicates success. Without that, respect, money means little. For example, I once did some work for a top attorney in a law firm. He made a very good salary, but he was not a nice man. No one ever did work for him willingly. He ordered everyone around, and we didn’t respect him. In contrast, however, I had a wonderful band director in high school. He had to take extra jobs just to make enough money to support his family. However, his students had great respect for him and always listened to what he said. As a result, we were a very good band. In my opinion, my band director was more successful than the attorney was.

Finally, I think one of the most important indicators of success is knowledge. Wealthy people don’t know all the answers. For example, in the movie Good Will Hunting, the only person who could solve some complex problems was the janitor. He knew a lot, and decided what he wanted to do with that knowledge rather than just think about money. In my opinion, he was extremely successful.

When we think of history, there are few people that we remember simply because they were rich. Overall, we remember people who did something with their lives-they were influential in politics, or contributed to science or art or religion. If history is the ultimate judge of success, then money surely isn’t everything.

参考分析和例文只是给大家拓展一下思维，希望大家在写这篇文章的时候能够展开自己的思维，有自己独到的见解。写作是一定要限时。

这是ＴＯＥＦＬ版1Ｔ前的最后一期同主题写作，希望大家能在这８次同主题写作中有所收获，把这最后一期的作文坚持写完，写好，说不定这篇就是你在考场上遇到那篇哦！

加油吧，各位！

greenlemonUID: 2169154

还是找不到感觉,打上来的时候顺便改了点, 好象又有点跑.......
大家给拍下吧,最后一次了,晚上来拍别人的.
挺郁闷的............

Topic about the criteria of evaluating success has been discussed numerous times in modern society, and, debates roses on whether we should only consider people who earned a lot of money successful. Although many do hold the idea that being rich equals to success, I insist success means much more than that.

When mentioning success, such words as contributions, achievement, and devotion come into our brains. Success, an appealing word, has so many great contents that call for people’s efforts and virtues to gain it. A king who rescued his country using his intelligence, courage and strong will is successful; a merchant who has found a giant business kingdom is successful; a military leader who won many crucial wars and battles facing on horrible enemies fearlessly is successful and admirable. And, a teacher who cultivates his students with all his energy and love is success too, not mention those who won the peace award of Noble Prize for their selflessness in their career for the wellbeing of al
l humans in the world. Success is not only the wealth people have, either simply the ability of earning money, but also, and even more, the contributions to the society and the lives.

Admittedly, money is one of the factors to evaluate success in most cases, especially today. But money takes only a small part of the whole. Almost all the people regard Bill Gates, the founder of Microsoft, the richest man in the world as a successful figure. However, if money is the only standard, is he still one of the most successful people when he decided to donate all his fortunes to the society? Or not until the day he earn back all the money he once had should he be success? So many heroes of our nation, who gave up their wealth, as well as comfortable lives, contributing themselves into fighting and striking for the whole nation, won’t be neglected of their huge success in the history. :

So, in views of so many factors involved in the definition of success, money shouldn’t be the only standard of success, and people should put more emphasis on other elements that do good to more people in the world.

[ 本帖最后由 greenlemon 于 2006-1-11 15:35 编辑 ]

WeOnUID: 2110447

虽然没有参加第一期，但是最后一期一定要完成！

huangtingtingUID: 2162352

写好了，整30 分钟，没有时间检查呀!!!   欢迎拍砖 ，有拍必回！！:)

With the fast developing economy , more and more people judge a person’s success by the money he earn . Personally , I am totally disagree with this statement . Because  ‘success’ , at least in my dictionary . means  not only the weath one owns  but also
his contribution to society , happiness in personal live , as well as the help given to others .

One’s contribution to society is not always equivalent to the amount of money he earn. Some great musician and writer who create wonderful works as the mental food for all the humane beings just earn enough to survive ;  Though arduous researching ,scientist who discover a new resource of energy which will benefit the whole world may not be the one who get the most profit from this discovery; some politicians fighting for the freedom may spend most of their lives in prison without one coin in their pocket. Can we deny they are more successful than a millionaire who earn his wealth through illegal ways or though squeezing his employees.

The happiness can not be brought by the money neither . Those who are busy to earn money may not have enough time to get relaxation or take vacation with their families. This phenomena may be the main reason which causes the prevalent depression and divorces in the modern society . There is an old Chinese idiom  ,which  still has realistic significance today , saying ‘ The satisfaction is the source of happiness ‘ . what we can earn has a limit , but the happiness derived form the harmony of family , sweetness between lovers , as well as friendship never has a limit .

Another measurement of success is the help given to others . A selfish and greedy person even owing a lot of money would not like to donate one coin for charity , on the other hand some volunteers go Africa in the purpose of overcoming the poverty and famine there and their achievement is the most admirable success .

Although money can provide us a comfortable living condition , plus it is really necessary as a main factor to encourage people to work hardly . It can not signify the contribution to the society , the personal happiness , nor the help to others .which of these are the essential elements of success.

[ 本帖最后由 huangtingting 于 2006-1-11 12:13 编辑 ]

griffinandrocUID: 201471

占位,明天早上高定

先贴自己的，一会吃完午饭改改各位大仙的

It is not a recent debate about the relationship between money and success. While some people put much emphasis on the ability of earning money and admire it as the sign of success, others may go to the opposite and look down upon the former trend, searching for other things as the marks of a successful people. As my point of view, money is one of the choices we could select for representing success, but it can not replace other valuable things in lives.

In the first place, money, the most significant thing indicated one’s wealth, can be used as a medium to exchange many other products and services, thereby creating a illusion that people who earn a lot of money are successful. However, we need to discuss the whole problem in a more detailed way. For instance, many people increased their saving from a good investment on stock market by chance. In this situation, we identify these people as lucky ones rather than the successful. Apart from these exceptions, the ability of obtaining money do reflect the attainment of one’s career to some extent. As we know, not until the day when one could combine his or her persistence, skills, luck, and etc with the outer economic conditions can he or she earn a lot of money. Hence, in this sense, money can stand for success.

However, only money itself can not represent the broad meaning of success. We should not narrow our definition of success to one’s property. Firstly, many rich people may sacrifice many other things in their lives for their money. As a result, their happiness, families and so on, may all be taken away with the coming with money. In a word, they become a slave of money. Of course we cannot classify them as successful people. Additionally, many people obtain other things such as fame, or attainments in one particular research field which may not transfer to money directly but also could be treated as a sign of success.

To conclude, I strongly hold the belief that despite its importance, earning a lot of money would always be an optional goal for life. Thus, it can not be the only standard for judging one’s success.

改二楼的

Topic about the criteria of evaluating success has been discussed numerous times in modern society, and, debates roses on whether we should only consider people who earned a lot of money successful. Although many do hold the idea that being rich equals to(equal好象是及物动词) success, I insist success means much more than that.

When mentioning success,（状语省略的时候好像主从句的主语应该一致） such words as contributions, achievement(这里并列是不是该用复数啊), and devotion come into our brains. Success, an appealing word, has so many great contents that call for people’s efforts and virtues to gain it. A king who rescued his country using his intelligence, courage and strong will is successful; a merchant who has found a giant business kingdom is successful; a military leader who won many crucial wars and battles facing on horrible enemies fearlessly is successful and admirable. （这么多并列其实可以不都用系表结构，看上去会生动些）And, a teacher who cultivates his students with all his energy and love is success(successful) too, not mention those who won the peace award of Noble Prize for their selflessness in their career for the wellbeing of all humans in the world. Success is not only the wealth people have, either simply the ability of earning money, but also, and even more, the contributions to the society and the lives.

Admittedly, money is one of the factors to evaluate success in most cases, especially today. But money takes only a small part of the whole. Almost all the people（all people, all of the ...） regard Bill Gates, the founder of Microsoft, the richest man in the world as a successful figure. However, if money is the only standard, is he still one of the most successful people when he decided to donate all his fortunes to the society? Or not until the day he earn back(没有见过earn back) all the money he once had should he be success? So many heroes of our nation, who gave up their wealth, as well as comfortable lives, contributing themselves into fighting and striking for the whole nation, won’t be neglected of their huge success in the history.

So, in views of so many factors involved in the definition of success, money shouldn’t be the only standard of success, and people should put more emphasis on other elements that do good to more people in the world.
少了一些连介词过渡，整体来说还是挺好的，唉，最差还是自己的啊

[ 本帖最后由 griffinandroc 于 2006-1-11 21:52 编辑 ]

窗UID: 209565

后天就要离开我的小屋,准备赶赴外地考托的战场了,这是临走前的最后一篇,上次贴的文章最后也没有人改过,真希望谁能在我离开之前帮我评一下,期待中...当然我也会回拍的.另外想问一下30分钟构思的时间算不算在里面的？我没算在里面，因为据说可以之前构思．
30min325words

What does success mean? Every person has his or her own answer. In my opinion, the criteria to evaluate whether a person is successful or not depends on lots of things, such as health, happiness and countless others. To say a person successful just because that he or her owns a great deal of money is a mistaken notion. The reasons listed below can substantiate my point of view.

First of all, from a physical point of view, a person with a healthy body is, in some sense, a successful one. However, many people may wonder why I say so for numerous ones hold the view that they are healthy. In my eyes, they are lucky ones. They do not realize that there are countless patients in the world who are struggling with diseases. For example, only when I was ill in hospital, could I actually feel how painful the situation was and thereby coming to the conclusion that healthy is so precious that the people who have a healthy body are in the possession of one of the greatest significant elements of success, and this element has nothing to do with money.

Happiness is also an essential aspect of success. What is happiness? Does it mean happiness only if we hold a large sum of money? I doubt it. Of course, money does offer us a lot of material things and comforts. Nevertheless, the rich can also be unhappy. For instance, a large number of actors, who are considered famous and wealthy ones, more often than not, indicate their problems in their memoir such as depression, alcoholism, broken marriages and troubled children. They are not happy at all. Perhaps it seems to us that they are successful to some extent, but these are just seemingly right. In fact, they own no success in their heart.

To conclude, money is not the only principle to evaluate success. Everyone has their respective response to this question.

[ 本帖最后由 窗 于 2006-1-10 23:22 编辑 ]

yuchenUID: 2111079

版主，特蕾莎修女的英文是Mother Theresa吧？
例文写的很不错，但倒数第二段用Good Will Hunting的例子很不合适，那电影根本就不是这个意思。

[ 本帖最后由 yuchen 于 2006-1-10 21:54 编辑 ]

雷鼠UID: 2159778

顶一下，我接下来一天一篇

geishaUID: 2107956

good.my second essay..

狂想UID: 2172697

When judging whether a person attains success or not,different people will hold various opinion.Nowadays, there is a prevailing attitude that people who earn a lot of money are most successful.However,as far as I am concerned, I disagree with that view because I believe that the success covers a variety of  measures such as dedication,knowledge and respect.To specify my argument,I would like to illustrate and provide evidence in the following discussion.

The foremost and most important measure of success which I prefer to put here is the respect.The human is a social animal.Almost everyone desires the respect showed by other people.Although many people assume that rich person will obtain other’s respect,there are sill many celebrities without a dollar in their pocket.For instance,Gandhi is a famous Indian peace fighter,when he was assassinated and had been buried,a lot of Indians spontaneously commemorate him.His prominent career earn him nothing but a noticeable reputation.Can you consider that he is not a successful person?

The second of all,I am not regard the money as everything.People always envision that the millionaire has a perfect life.For their abundant possessions,they can easily purchase any luxurious merchandise they want. Nevertheless,there is one thing that you can not use money to buycalled happiness.And money can stimulate people’s jealousy,so the security is another concernful problem for many rich people.

Said by a honorable scientist,the saying “the knowledge equals power” is my motto.The twentieth century witnesses an unparalleled progress in the technology and science,the knowledge is deemed as the most essential requirement for applying any job in this modern society.For that reason,I regard the successful people as someone who has plenty of knowledge or reach a considerable achievement in his academic regions.

I am not denying that the success has a great deal of other components.But to sum up my arguments expatiated above,which sometimes form an organic system,we can easily reach the conclusion that the people who earn a lot of money are not most successful

huangtingtingUID: 2162352

改 6 楼 窗 的大作 我的在4楼。 有空看看改改，谢了

What does success mean? Every person has his or her own answer. In my opinion, the criteria to evaluate whether a person is successful or not depends on lots of things, such as health, happiness and countless others. (countless 是数不尽的意思呀)  To say a person successful just because that he or her owns a great deal of money is a mistaken notion. （可以改为  it is a mistake to say a person successful just because that he or her owns a great deal of money 更易于理解）The reasons listed below can substantiate my point of view.

First of all, from a physical point of view, a person with a healthy body is, in some sense, a successful one. However, many people may wonder why I say so for numerous ones hold the view that they are healthy. （可以改为 those healthy persons may wonder why I say so） In my eyes, they are lucky ones.  They do not realize that there are countless （不合适吧，用many 就好了）patients in the world who are struggling with diseases. （用suffer 呢） For example, only when I was ill in hospital, could I actually feel how painful the situation was （situation is painful 对吗） and thereby coming to the conclusion that healthy is so precious that the people who have a healthy body are in the possession of one of the greatest significant elements of success, and this element has nothing to do with money.（这个观点论证的逻辑有点奇怪，可以说健康是比金钱更可贵的财富呀，而不是拥有健康就是成功的）

Happiness is also an essential aspect of success. What is happiness? Does it mean happiness only if we hold a large sum of money? I doubt it. Of course, money does offer us a lot of material things and comforts. Nevertheless, the rich can also be unhappy. （这样说太绝对了not all the rich are happy  ）For instance, a large number of actors, who are considered famous and wealthy ones, more often than not, indicate their problems in their memoir such as depression, alcoholism, broken marriages and troubled children. They are not happy at all. Perhaps it seems to us that they are successful to some extent, but these are just seemingly right. In fact, they own no success in their heart.（例证很好呀）

To conclude, money is not the only principle to evaluate success. Everyone has their respective response to this question.（在点名一下观点 ，更完整一些，结尾有些仓促）


第二段论证的有一些牵强， 另外就是结尾太过于仓促，没有点明观点，:victory:

[ 本帖最后由 huangtingting 于 2006-1-11 12:15 编辑 ]

窗UID: 209565

其实觉得你写得比我好很多了,只能改改语法了,边改着边学习哦.我之所以写得很仓促是因为时间不够用,很想请教你怎么在半小时里写很多字,事先怎么准备.回我哦.

With the fast developing economy , more and more people judge a person’s success by the money he（这里是也有her哦）earn . Personally , I am（没有am吧） totally disagree with this statement . Because  ‘success’ , at least in my dictionary . means  not only the weath one owns  but also his contribution to society , happiness in personal live（life吧） , as well as the help given to others .

One’s contribution to society is not always equivalent to the amount of money he earn. Some great musician and writer who create wonderful works as the mental food for all the humane（human） beings just earn enough to survive ;  Though arduous researching ,scientist（scientists） who discover a new resource of energy which will benefit the whole world may not be the one who get the most profit from this discovery; some politicians fighting for the freedom may spend most of their lives in prison without one coin in their pocket（pockets）. Can we deny they are more successful than a millionaire who earn his wealth through illegal ways or though squeezing his employees.

The happiness can not be brought by the money neither （either）. Those who are busy to earn（好象are busy in earning比较好） money may not have enough time to get relaxation or take vacation with their families. This phenomena may be the main reason which causes the prevalent depression and divorces in the modern society . There is an old Chinese idiom  ,which  still has realistic significance today , saying ‘ The satisfaction is the source of happiness ‘ . what we can earn has a limit , but the happiness derived form the harmony of family , sweetness between lovers , as well as friendship never has a limit .

Another measurement of success is the help given to others . A selfish and greedy person even owing a lot of money would not like to donate one coin for charity , on the other hand some volunteers go Africa in the purpose of overcoming the poverty and famine there and their achievement is the most admirable success .

Although money can provide us a comfortable living condition , plus it is really necessary as a main factor to encourage people to work hardly（hard） .（前后是一句，不应该分为两句吧？否则没有谓语了） It can not signify the contribution to the society , the personal happiness , nor the help to others .which of these are the essential elements of success.

huangtingtingUID: 2162352

其实我也觉得时间很紧，没有时间检查，不过考试的时候如果可以先看作问题，把构思时间放到30分钟以外，应该会好一些， 提纲很重要，快速的类出提纲然后就是在提纲的基础上扩充了。 一起加油吧！:victory:

greenlemonUID: 2169154

It is not a recent debate about the relationship between money and success. While some people put much emphasis on the ability of earning money and admire it as the sign of success, others may go to the opposite and look down upon the former trend, searching for other things as the marks of a successful people. As my point of view, money is one of the choices we could select for representing success, but it can not replace other valuable things（换成elements吧） in lives.

In the first place, money, the most significant thing indicated one’s wealth, can be used as a medium to exchange many other products and services, thereby creating an illusion that people who earn a lot of money are successful. However, we need to discuss the whole problem in a more detailed way.(有点模板化，把problem 具体下吧，加个同位语从句什么的) For instance, many people increased their saving from a good investment on stock market by chance. In this situation, we identify these people as lucky ones rather than the successful. Apart from these exceptions, the ability of obtaining money do(does) reflect the attainment of one’s career to some extent. As we know, not until the day when one could combine his or her persistence, skills, luck, and etc with the outer economic conditions can he or she earn a lot of money. Hence, in this sense, money can stand for success.

However, only money itself can not represent the broad meaning of success. We should not narrow our definition of success to one’s property. Firstly, many rich people may sacrifice many other things in their lives for their money. As a result, their happiness, families and so on, may all be taken away with the coming with money. In a word, they become a slave of money. Of course we cannot classify them as successful people. Additionally, many people obtain other things such as fame, or attainments in one particular research field which may not transfer to money directly but also could be treated as a sign of success.

To conclude, I strongly hold the belief that despite its importance, earning a lot of money would always be an optional goal for life. Thus, it can not be the only standard for judging one’s success.


如果要说钱不是唯一的标准，那么承认钱的作用等的部分就可以少说点，而着重阐明为什么不是唯一标
准，还有哪些其他标准，真正的成功其实是建立在内在的东西上，是生命价值的体现，钱只是一个表象。
觉得说钱钱重要的东西太多. 也可能是你的思路有点不同，我还是按照我的思路来说的。

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

没跑题啊 你首先抓成功，成功有很多的定义，不只是有钱。然后抓住only。这

样很好的啊。语言也不错的，很不错，赞一个~~！！
提个意见，P2的并列句用的挺好的，但是在考场上还是少写点，节省时间。
你在P3最后面说的挺好的，可是要是举个例子就非常好了。

加油！