作文修改～望达人指点

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从没参加过培训班，而且第一次接触雅思，
这是我做IELTS1时TEST1 ,TASK1的一篇短文．有原题目或做过的达人赏眼看下我的这篇文章，
请多指点，对于TASK１应该注意些什么，那些重要那些次要等等，谢谢各位！
There is a list of reasons shows that why adults choose their adults education. For most of them, reason which takes 40% of the adults’ choices is that they are interested in the subjects about which they would like to learn more. The secondly main reason which is just 2% less than the first one is the purpose to gain qualifications. Meanwhile, 22% of them choose the expression “helpful for current job” as their reason. In addition, one fifth of choices comes to the reason which is to improve prospects of promotion. This percentage is as equivalent as that of the fifth choice that expresses their opinion about enjoinment in the process of education. Still, 12% of them think adults education might make them able to change jobs. The reason for meeting people takes up 10% of all.
   Investigation shows 40% which is the most in the proportion go to the opinion that the costs of the education should be paid individually. Besides, 35% of them consider the costs should be paid by the employer. Rest of them stands for the view that taxpayers have the responsibility to pay for the costs.

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偶这里没有原题
仅仅从字面上看
还是不错的
句型较复杂
有过渡和比较
若分析透彻图表的内涵
6分是稳的

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谢谢．．．～我想知道TASK1一般要注意些什么？？
这篇文章主要叫我WRITE A REPORT FOR A UNIVERSITY LECTURE,descibe the information shown below..
他要求好像没要我分析，那我还需要分析吗？

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需要分析数据反应出的客观事实
不要推测

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印象中我好像回復過什麽，怎麽不見了……
我覺得不用全部數據都列舉。要抓有特點的著重描寫

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是吗？谢谢！　那不明显的数据需不需要带过下？？～

恩～我再改改加入些分析先～