issue51 V-March小组本人首次作业,热烈欢迎大家指正

爱格UID: 2103778

issue51 Education will be truly effective only it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.The author argues that meeting the student's individual needs and interests is the only way
to develop education effectively. At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat
apealing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following
reasons.

To begin with, for little children who are too young to have any interests in deep science
such as psychology or physics, can we just do not teach them such things? Who knows they will not be psychologists or an engineers later on which need such basic knowledge? Our education need to provide necessary knowledge for all the school students and only in such way can make the young students get a general idea of the scientific and social world.

Another reason why I disagree with the issue of the author is that before education should  meet the individual interests and needs of the students we must tell whether their interests
and needs have disorbited from moral or law. As we know, students are weak to recognize right or wrong deeds around them. If a little boy once saw someone steal a purse and he gained the interest to learn, can any teacher meet his interest? Never, of course!

From a practical point of view, it is not practicable to meet each individual needs or interests of student. In other words, since there are hundreds of thousand of students in a country, especially in China, who has a large population, if only we allow a teacher can keep an eye on 10 students - actually I think at most 5-that means he or she knows exactly the characters and nature of those students, then let us guess how many teachers do we need! Of course we never have that superiority, however who would like to deny all the splendid figures our states have cultivated?

There is no denying that overemphasizing the importance of indoctrinating of all the basic science would lead tragedy in education. Common sense tells us that to force children to learn something they do not interested in easily hurt their dignity or even make them resistant to the teacher or their parents. Another fact we cannot overlook is that educationalists both have to create the opportunities to discovery students' interests and needs and to seize the opportunity to develop students' talent as soon as they show it. Imagine that if nobody take little Mozart to the front of a piano, how can the most distinguished musician find his talent? And imagine the result if they heard Mozart playing piano but they asked him to calculate some stuff! Then we would never have his lullaby to accompany us to sleep when we were small enough to be in the cradles.

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them, we maybe comfortable to say that education will be effective when it provides all basic knowledge to the students as well develop their interests and needs.

wqylUID: 176809

The author argues that meeting the student's individual needs and interests is the only way to develop education effectively. At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat apealing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.
是不是有点大众化了点,呵呵.

To begin with, for little children who are too young to have any interests in deep science such as psychology or physics, can we just do not teach them such things? Who knows they will not be psychologists or an engineers later on which need such basic knowledge?
你第一句话是想说"我们不应当仅仅由于学生因年龄小而对高深的科学尚未产生兴趣而不教授他们这些知识.但我觉得原文有点ambiguous,因为从原文看(就这一句)反而觉得答yes,we should not teach them such advanced science.从语法上讲也有一些错误.
我觉得可以这样写(仅供参考,):...advanced science such as psychology and physics rarely interest children or young students for the sake of their abstruseness and abstraction. However,inoculating children with some fundamental knowledge of advanced science should not be excluded because of sheer age. Since it is hard to  predict which field the students will dabble at in future, it is much better provide a comprehensive scale of knowledge than merely specific ones.

Our education need to provide necessary knowledge for all the school students and only in such way can make the young students get a general idea of the scientific and social world.


Another reason why I disagree with the issue of the author is that before education should  meet the individual interests and needs of the students we must tell whether their interests and needs have disorbited from moral or law.我觉得moral standard or code of conducts更好点 As we know, students are weak to recognize right or wrong deeds around them. 用distinguish right from wrong;同时不能用weak，unable or incapable会好点 If a little boy once saw someone steal a purse and he gained the interest to learn, can any teacher meet his interest? Never, of course!我觉得这个例子还是最好不要用。
这一段感觉似乎有点跑题？？


From a practical point of view, it is not practicable to meet each individual needs or interests of the student. In other words, since there are hundreds of thousand of students in a country, especially in China, who has a large population, with a large population is better if only we allow a teacher can keep an eye on 10 students - actually I think at most 5-that means he or she knows exactly the characters and nature of those students, then let us guess how many teachers do we need! 前半句语法有点问题Of course we never have that superiority, however who would like to deny all the splendid figures our states have cultivated? 这句话什么意思？用来说明什么？

There is no denying that overemphasizing the importance of indoctrinating ofindoctrinate 是及物动词 all the basic science would lead to a tragedy in education.tragedu似乎用的有点重 Common sense tells us that to force children to learn something they do not interested in would easily hurt their dignity or even make them resistant to the teacher or their parents. Another fact we cannot overlook is that educationalists both have to create the opportunities to discovery students' interests and needs and to seize the opportunity to develop students' talent as soon as they show it. Imagine that if nobody take little Mozart to the front of a piano, how can the most distinguished musician find his talent? And imagine the result if they heard Mozart playing piano but they asked him to calculate some stuff! Then we would never have his lullaby to accompany us to sleep when we were small enough to be 去掉in the cradles.

这段感觉不错。

To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them, we maybe comfortable to say that education will be effective when it provides all basic knowledge to the students as well develop their interests and needs.

也是套路吧，呵呵
感觉后边比前边要好不少。总体来说我的意见是个别语法要注意，特别是情态动词can need等的使用。还有一些句子可能有点chinglish。口气重了点，呵呵别介意。

[ 本帖最后由 wqyl 于 2006-1-21 17:38 编辑 ]

爱格UID: 2103778

改的好仔细!
本人第一次写,开头结尾用下模板还觉得挺新鲜的没想到都俗啦:$
To begin with, for little children who are too young to have any interests in deep science such as psychology or physics, can we just do not teach them such things? Who knows they will not be psychologists or an engineers later on which need such basic knowledge?
你第一句话是想说"我们不应当仅仅由于学生因年龄小而对高深的科学尚未产生兴趣而不教授他们这些知识.但我觉得原文有点ambiguous,因为从原文看(就这一句)反而觉得答yes,we should not teach them such advanced science.从语法上讲也有一些错误.
我觉得可以这样写(仅供参考,):...advanced science such as psychology and physics rarely interest children or young students for the sake of their abstruseness and abstraction. However,inoculating children with some fundamental knowledge of advanced science should not be excluded because of sheer age. Since it is hard to  predict which field the students will dabble at in future, it is much better provide a comprehensive scale of knowledge than merely specific ones.

我觉得你改后的比较像成年人写的!学习!
From a practical point of view, it is not practicable to meet each individual needs or interests of the student. In other words, since there are hundreds of thousand of students in a country, especially in China, who has a large population, with a large population is better if only we allow a teacher can keep an eye on 10 students - actually I think at most 5-that means he or she knows exactly the characters and nature of those students, then let us guess how many teachers do we need! 前半句语法有点问题
这句话的语法问题我还是没看出来啊,请再详细指正一下可以吗?
Of course we never have that superiority, however who would like to deny all the splendid figures our states have cultivated? 这句话什么意思？用来说明什么？
这句话我是想说我们从未有过这么多教师以至可以实现1对10或1对更少的因材施教,但是我们国家仍然培养出了大批人才.
:)再次感谢

jackloveUID: 183611

The author argues that meeting the student's individual needs and interests is the only way to develop education effectively. At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat apealing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following reasons.
还好，直接表达了自己的立场！

To begin with, for little children（是这个表达法吗？children就行了） who are too young to have any interests in deep science such as psychology or physics, can we just do not teach them such things? Who knows they will not be psychologists or an engineers later on which need such basic knowledge? Our education need to provide necessary knowledge for all the school students and only in such way can make the young students get a general idea of the scientific and social world.这是主题句吧，如果这样，那么你的小孩例子，你感觉贴切吗？逻辑有问题了！如果不是主题句，那就是没有TS了，举例”小孩太年幼而没有任何兴趣对深奥科学，那么我们就不能教给他们知识了吗？谁也不能预测他们的未来？所以学校应该为学生提供必要的知识“
Another reason why I disagree with the issue of the author is that before education should  meet the individual interests and needs of the students we must tell whether their interests and needs have disorbited from moral or law. As we know, students are weak to recognize right or wrong deeds around them. If a little boy once saw someone steal a purse and he gained the interest to learn, can any teacher meet his interest? Never, of course!

From a practical point of view, it is not practicable to meet each individual needs or interests of student. In other words, since there are hundreds of thousands of students in a country, especially in China, who has a large population, if only we allow a teacher can keep an eye on 10 students - actually I think at most 5-that means没看懂？ he or she knows exactly the characters and nature of those students, then let us guess how many teachers do we need! Of course we never have that superiority, however who would like to deny all the splendid figures our states have cultivated? 迷惑

There is no denying that overemphasizing the importance of indoctrinating of all the basic science would lead tragedy in education. Common sense tells us that to force children to learn something they do not interested in easily hurt their dignity or even make them resistant to the teacher or their parents. Another fact we cannot overlook is that educationalists both have to create the opportunities to discovery students' interests and needs and have to seize the opportunity to develop students' talent as soon as they show it. Imagine that if nobody take little Mozart to the front of a piano, how can the most distinguished musician find his talent? And imagine the result if they heard Mozart playing piano but they asked him to calculate some stuff! Then we would never have his lullaby to accompany us to sleep when we were small enough to be in the cradles.
这段你应该是说明有兴趣后，教育事半功倍。而文中灌输知识造成悲剧，那就是如果没有兴趣，效果不良，支持观点可以；另外，教育也可以诱发学生兴趣/这个点与主题有关吗？应该说明满足学生的兴趣和需要确实使教育真正有效，反过来教育也可促使兴趣。注意要分析题目，是否只有满足需要和兴趣才使得教育真正有效，你可以承认满足了确实有效，但不是只有，满足社会的需要可能使的教育发挥更大的作用效果！
To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them, we maybe comfortable to say that education will be effective when it provides all basic knowledge to the students as well develop their interests and needs.

还有就是小孩，就是young，teenager，而不是little+.....！
作文基本不在数量，在你的分析，你的理由，你的例证恰当充分！
加油！去看看ETS的范文吧，相信会有点启示的！

[ 本帖最后由 jacklove 于 2006-1-22 12:59 编辑 ]

爱格UID: 2103778

刚刚看到你的修改,我也是昨天有看拉下书突然想起我的这篇好像没有TS!
写的有点急于求成有点不经大脑的感觉好在是第一篇,还有机会再看看书以后一定再写这篇!我又写了issue17组长有空给看看啊!

清晨UID: 2164725

The author argues that meeting the student's individual needs and interests is the only way
to develop education effectively. At first glance, this opinion seems to be somewhat
apealing, but further reflection tells me that I cannot agree with it for the following
reasons.
开头很简洁，我觉得如果能把自己的观点写得再狠点会更好。
To begin with, for little children who are too young to have any interests in deep science
such as psychology or physics, can we just do not teach them such things?（改为don’t we teach them such things?可能就没有歧义了，单不知道是否合适） Who knows they will not be psychologists or an engineers later on which need such basic knowledge? Our education need to provide necessary knowledge for all the school students and only in such way can make the young students get a general idea of the scientific and social world.
这段给我的感觉是没有明确的TS.这段的结尾句满好。
Another reason why I disagree with the issue of the author is that before education should  meet the individual interests and needs of the students we must tell whether their interests
and needs have disorbited from moral or law. As we know, students are weak to recognize right or wrong deeds around them. If a little boy once saw someone steal a purse and he gained（换个词可能更好） the interest to learn, can any teacher meet his interest? Never, of course!
TS应该用简单句，
From a practical point of view, it is not practicable to meet each individual （each和individual在意思上有点重复）needs or interests of student. In other words, since there are hundreds of thousand of students in a country, especially in China, who has a large population, if only we allow a teacher can keep an eye on 10 students - actually I think at most 5-that means he or she knows exactly the characters and nature of those students（把that后面的内容改为非限制性定语从句可以使整个句子的结构就清晰了）, then let us guess how many teachers do we need! Of course we never have that superiority, however who would like to deny all the splendid figures our states have cultivated?

There is no denying that overemphasizing the importance of indoctrinating of all the basic science would lead tragedy in education. Common sense tells us that to force children to learn something they do not interested in easily hurts their dignity or even makes them resistant to the teacher(their teachers) or their parents. Another fact we cannot overlook is that educationalists both have to create the opportunities to discovery students' interests and needs and to seize the opportunity to develop students' talent as soon as they show it. Imagine that if nobody take little Mozart to the front of a piano, how can the most distinguished musician find his talent(改为the most distinguished ,musician talent to be found,j就可与前面一致 )? And imagine the result if they heard Mozart playing piano but they asked him to calculate some stuff! Then we would never have his lullaby to accompany us to sleep when we were small enough to be in the cradles.
我觉得这一段是一个让步段，不应在字数上超过前面的三个段落
To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them, we maybe comfortable to say that education will be effective when it provides all basic knowledge to the students as well develop their interests and needs.
这段的第一个句子很精彩
全篇文章读下来感觉在批驳观点时用的方法基本都是问句的形式，有点调侃的感觉，如果再能用点别的方法更好。不过文章里有很多短语和词用得很恰当，第一篇issue 还是比较成功地吗？:)
我的水平烂的程度我想你也知道些啦，想法可能有点主观，你在自己好好看看千万别全信我写的东西。:lol