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Issue 138/32
"Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."
"唯有通过犯错误，才会有发现与进步。"

写作提纲：
1，        同意题目的观点
2，        犯错误对一个人获取并精通一门技艺非常重要，例子，老舍的成功诀窍，不停地写，不停地扔。
3，        人类发展的历史就是不断修正错误的历史，例子，哥白尼学说，爱迪生灯泡
4，        人们有效地利用错误来预防错误发生。太空的探索的错误检验。
5，        总结，错误对发现和进步很重要。

Everyone of us desires for success, however, we can learn more from mistakes and failures than success. Because only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. Several advantages derived from mistakes I will discuss as below.

For anyone, the most effective way to acquire and be proficient in a kind of craftsmanship is to make mistakes bravely. Perhaps it sound self-contradictory, moreover, nobody likes committing fallacies which make us fell shame, frustrated and puzzled. However, mistakes will indeed help a person to approaching success if he or she confronts them bravely rather than escapes negatively. As a Chinese famous writer, named Laoshe who made great influence on modern literature of China, has ever told inexperienced young writers of his unique successful trick: writing continuously and throwing what he or she write continuously. This simple word hints such a truth that only by mistakes you can find what you are lack of and then find the way to improve them. In this matter, mistakes make a person to be successful.

Moreover, mistakes bring in great advantages not only to a person but also to development of human being. Retrospectively, great discover and progresses usually happened at the time when someone finds the falsehood which can not be comprehended by the explanation of old theory. For example, Aristotle found the mistake Plato's theory; Copernicus find the error of geocentrism and so forth. In fact, no matter the great discoveries and progresses of human history, the trivial things such as variety of appliances, clothes and even food in our daily life is the consequence of improving mistakes continuously. For example, the bulb, the great invention of human being, Edison kept trial thousands times in order find which material is appropriate to be filament. Thus, it is not magniloquently to say that the development of human civilization is based on improving mistakes persistently.

Last but not least, mistakes can be used to avoid the further mistakes which can induce great damage and sometimes even bring disaster. For example, out space discovery, scientists imitate every kinds of circumstances in which mistakes are easy to happen to test equipments and then redesign and improve the equipments. Without these prevenient mistakes-trials, the adventure of out space is hardly to imagine.

In sum, although mistakes might bring bad felling or even sufferings, we must confront them bravely, analyse them reasonably and utilize them creatively. Because only through mistakes can there be any discovery and progress.

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Issue 138/32
"Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."
"唯有通过犯错误，才会有发现与进步。"

写作提纲：
1，        同意题目的观点
2，        犯错误对一个人获取并精通一门技艺非常重要，例子，老舍的成功诀窍，不停地写，不停地扔。
3，        人类发展的历史就是不断修正错误的历史，例子，哥白尼学说，爱迪生灯泡
4，        人们有效地利用错误来预防错误发生。太空的探索的错误检验。
5，        总结，错误对发现和进步很重要。

Everyone of us desires for success, however, we can learn more from mistakes and failures than success. Because only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. Several advantages derived from mistakes I will discuss as below.

For anyone, the most effective way to acquire and be proficient in a kind of craftsmanship is to make mistakes bravely. Perhaps it sound self-contradictory, moreover, nobody likes committing fallacies which make us fell （feel） shame, frustrated and puzzled. However, mistakes will indeed help a person to approaching （approach）success if he or she confronts them bravely rather than escapes negatively. As a Chinese famous writer, named Laoshe who made great influence on modern literature of China, has ever told inexperienced young writers of his unique successful trick: writing continuously and throwing what he or she write continuously. (看提纲的时候就想问了，这句话还是很有哲理的，可是不停的扔到底是说不停的扔写得不好的，还是说不管写得好不好都要不断的往前看，不停的追求？哈哈，我没什么文学修养不知道具体是什么背景，忘赐教！:D)This simple word hints such a truth that only by mistakes you can find what you are lack of and then find the way to improve them. In this matter, mistakes make a person to be successful.

Moreover, mistakes bring in great advantages （advantages 用在这里有点别扭，可以尝试用动词换一下，比方mistakes not only favor a person but also facilitate the science and technologies to develop因为我觉得你这段说的差不多是科学技术，用人类的发展不太合适）not only to a person but also to development of human being. Retrospectively, great discover and progresses usually happened at the time when someone finds the falsehood which can not be comprehended by the explanation of old theory. For example, Aristotle found the mistake (in) Plato's theory; Copernicus find the error of geocentrism and so forth. In fact, no matter the (what) great discoveries and progresses of human history , the trivial things such as variety of appliances, clothes and even food in our daily life is the consequence of improving mistakes (提高错误？改成amend mistake or mend mistake) continuously. For example, the bulb, the great invention of human being, Edison kept trial thousands times in order find which material is appropriate to be filament.（这里可以在煽情点，加上爱因斯坦说的那句话，大意就是什么有99中材料都不适合，不是失败了99此，而是排除了99种错误的选择） Thus, it is not magniloquently to say that the development of human civilization is based on improving mistakes persistently.

Last but not least, mistakes can be used to avoid the further mistakes which can induce great damage and sometimes even bring disaster. For example, out space discovery, scientists imitate every kinds of circumstances in which mistakes are easy to happen to test equipments and then redesign and improve the equipments. Without these prevenient mistakes-trials, the adventure of out space is hardly to imagine.

In sum, although mistakes might bring bad felling (feeling) or even sufferings, we must confront them bravely, analyse them reasonably and utilize them creatively. Because only through mistakes can there be any discovery and progress. (我觉得结尾你就谈得很好，可是文中并没有体现出confront bravely, analyse reasonably, utilize creatively,所以我觉得文中的例子应该分析得有点偏向性，比方说灯丝的例子，如果是我的话我肯定有由于很久要不要写，因为我觉得和第一个观点有点重复，当然我看出来你的意思，老舍是通过错误是自己的写作趋于完美，而爱因斯坦是因为错误而给人类做出巨大贡献，如果分析的好，两个例子很具有说服力，如果分析不透彻就好像差不多了，我也容易犯这个错误)