ISSUE51 (Baxia第三次作业)

xuanyeUID: 2162278

ISSUE51、"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."


第一次写,知道写的不好,大家多帮助.
提纲:1,教育的目的是满足每个学生的要求和兴趣
          2,教育的世面大众,很难满足每个人
           3,有效的教育是让受过教育的奉献社会
I partly agree with the assertion that the speaker said. I think the goal of education is to meet the individual needs and interests of each students. Because every student has their own interests and ideas that they could devote their every time and energy on it. And college and university should supply the more labs and subjects than before. The society also need all kinds of g for every skill area.


Nevertheless it is an ideal statement, in fact, there are many facts limit it so that it is so difficult to come true. First, it related with money. For example, there are lots of people in Indian lead to they lack of food, water, clothes and other basic thing for live. what’s more, the parents have no money to send their children for elementary education. Secondly, in my experience as a student, there are few faculty who are actively engaged in their fields come to class with fresh insights and a contagious excitement about the subject at hand, so they cannot make the student take interested on their own major or the other subject they like. Thirdly, the college and university cannot help students who are serious about pursuing a career in that field to make more informed career decisions. So the students do not know which area should be chose.


Admittedly, I think the benefit of education is to make everybody know the importance of education, for the people who has high education degree know what is their needs and interests, thus, they will make the life better and better. On the contrary, the boor do not know what is their needs and interests. Experience in the university can help people research for their needs and interests. For example, each month an educated professor at my college combined teaching with undercover work investigating various cults. Not only did the students benefit from the many interesting stories the professor had to tell about his experiences, the professor’s publications about cults catapulted him to international prominence as an expert on the subject, and justifiably so.


To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them. We may be comfortable to say that we should know our needs and interests through the education, students alike stand everything to gain when faculty enrich their careers by interspersing field work with academic work.

[ 本帖最后由 xuanye 于 2006-2-1 02:28 编辑 ]

freud5027UID: 2165870

I partly agree with the assertion that the speaker said. I think the goal of education is to meet the individual needs and interests of each students. Because every student has their own interests and ideas that they could devote their every time and energy on it(删). And(删) Colleges and university(ies) should supply the(删) more labs and subjects than before(为什么要提供更多的实验室，符合论点的原因简单说一下吧). The society also need all kinds of g for every skill area (people with different abilities/careers in different areas).


Nevertheless it is an ideal statement, in fact, there are many facts limit it so that it is so difficult to come true.(it is too difficult to come true for many limiting factors) First, it related with money. (One factor is money.)For example, there are lots of people in Indian lead to they lack of food, water, clothes and other basic thing for live. what’s more, the parents have no money to send their children for elementary education. (这是世界上还有很多穷人说？)Secondly, in my experience as a student, there are few faculty who are actively engaged in their fields come to class with fresh insights and a contagious excitement about the subject at hand, so they cannot make the student take interested on their own major or the other subject they like. (这只是一个现实情况，而不是限制因素)Thirdly, the college and university cannot help students who are serious about pursuing a career in that field to make more informed career decisions. (这个理由不太明白)So the students do not know which area should be chose.(逻辑是不是有问题)


Admittedly, I think the benefit of education is to make everybody know the importance of education, for(because) the people who has(with) high education(删) degree know what is their needs and interests, thus, they will make the life better and better. On the contrary, the boor do not know what is their needs and interests(这个不一定). Experience in the university can help people research for their needs and interests. For example, each(every) month an educated professor at my college combined teaching with undercover work investigating various cults.(这句啥意思) Not only did the students benefit from the many(删) interesting stories the professor had to tell(told about his experiences, the professor’s publications about cults catapulted him to international prominence as an expert on the subject, and justifiably so.(我懂你这句的意思，但是句子结构有问题，还没想到怎么改合适。)


To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons(reasons mentioned above), which sometimes correlate with each other to generate an integrate whole and thus become more convincing than any single one of them. We may be comfortable to say that we should know our needs and interests through the education, students alike stand everything to gain when faculty enrich their careers by interspersing field work with academic work. (结论表述不清楚)

总结：你认为命题理论上是对的，当仅仅是一种理想化。我觉得应该论述为什么针对学生的个人需要和兴趣，教育才有效，而不是去讨论学校有朝这方面努力但没成功（你的第二段），第三段你只是说了教育使人明白自己的需要和兴趣所在，但不是为什么。写的跟提纲也不太一样，有点离题。