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abobibbyUID: 2174676

issue174 the laws should be flexible enough to take accout of all circumstances
提纲
观点：法律必须随着社会的发展而修订以确保社会的秩序，但是同时也必须维持法律相对的稳定性
1.只有及时地修正法律才能发挥其维持社会秩序的功能
2.僵化的法律会阻碍社会的发展
3.法律相对的稳定性对于维护社会的发展也是很必要的

Basically I agree with the arguer that the laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places. Still, I have to point out that the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the order of the society.

To begin with, laws should be established or amended with the development of the society. Laws are official rules and regulations to govern the society and to control the behaviors of its members. When a society marches on, new circumstances may occur, and people would refresh their way to deal with such circumstances. For example, when cars were invented and became popular, people set up traffic rules, say driving on one side of the road, to secure the safety of people as well as the efficiency of traffic. Often enough, when existing laws cannot be well applicable to such new circumstances and rules, people would have to adapt old laws or set up new ones to secure the order of the society. It is not only necessary but quotidian in our history. Take Constitution of the United States for example: the first Constitution was born in 1887, four year later, ten amendments were added in, and up to now, there have been twenty- seven amendments to assure that the Constitution functions as the foundation of federal law system. The evolution history of Constitution illustrates that adaptation of the laws is necessary to secure the order of a developing society.

In addition, being rigid and fixed, the laws can prevent the progress of the society or even cause damage to the social orders. Laws that obey out of date rules cause confuse and unfairness among the social members when they deserve new ones. When the out-of- date laws assume their function to secure social orders, the new born orders are broken, and then the activities that depend on such orders are disturbed, and finally a chaos of such social activities is aroused. For example, laws that secure the Apartheid of Republic of South Africa not only seriously damaged the well-beings of its social members, including all races, and aroused all kinds of social conflicts, but also exclude the country from the U.N and global stage until they were at last abandoned.

However, though the out-of-date laws do harm to the society, the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the stability of the society. Generally speaking, our society develops in a gradual manner. Frequent changes of laws are both unnecessary and disastrous. Trying to set up laws that secure the pre-mature orders do not help them to develop, and sometimes even postpone them.

In conclusion, laws, being organized system for the society to maintain its orders and control the behaviors of its members, should follow the development and changes of our society, that means, neither to be rigid or fixed, nor change them frequently and unnecessarily.

[ 本帖最后由 abobibby 于 2006-2-3 08:50 编辑 ]

runningpiggyUID: 194977

Basically I agree with the arguer[有点太像argument了] that the laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places.[很一般的restate，没有起到什么作用] Still, I have to point out that the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the order of the society. [表达出了自己的观点，但是最好不要那么直接地restate，怎么说也改一点吧]

To begin with, laws should be established or amended with the development of the society. Laws are official rules and regulations to govern the society and to control the behaviors of its members. When a society marches on, new circumstances may occur, and people would refresh their way[复数，另外我觉得ways不好，methods或者means会好一些] to deal with such circumstances.[这个跟法律的变化有什么联系，应该是后面论述的重点，可是后面出了点偏差] For example, when cars were invented and became popular, people set up traffic rules, say driving on one side of the road, to secure the safety of people as well as the efficiency of traffic. Often enough, when existing laws cannot be well applicable to such new circumstances and rules[为什么是and rules], people would have to adapt[adapt似乎没有你要表达的那个意思] old laws or set up new ones to secure[这个词出现了好多次，想点别的吧，guarantee，ascertain之类的] the order of the society. It is not only necessary but quotidian in our history. Take Constitution of the United States for example: the first Constitution was born in 1887, four year later, ten amendments were added in, and up to now, there have been twenty-seven amendments to assure that the Constitution functions as the foundation of federal law system. The evolution history of Constitution illustrates that adaptation of the laws is necessary to secure the order of a developing society. [文章缺乏应有的论述，主要的篇幅都是建立在例子上。根据你的分论点，后面的行文似乎需要从两方面来说，be established和be amended，但是后面却不见了说establish上的问题]

In addition, being rigid and fixed, the[多余] laws can prevent the progress of the society or even cause damage to the social orders. Laws that obey out of date[out-of-date] rules cause confuse[这个不是名词] and unfairness among the social members when they deserve new ones. When the out-of-date laws assume their function to secure social orders, the new born[newly-born] orders are broken, and then the activities that depend on such orders are disturbed, and finally a chaos of such social activities is aroused. For example, laws that secure the Apartheid of [the] Republic of South Africa not only seriously damaged the well-beings of its social members, including all races, and aroused all kinds of social conflicts, but also exclude the country[复数] from the U.N. and global stage until they were at last abandoned. [总体论述上问题不大，但是例子之后段落就结束了，这个并不好，最好能用自己的语言解释一下这个例子，并在最后有总结性的句子]

However, though[however后面怎么出现个though] the out-of-date laws do harm to the society, the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the stability of the society. Generally speaking, our society develops in a gradual manner. Frequent changes of laws are both unnecessary and disastrous. Trying to set up laws that secure the pre-mature orders do not help them to develop, and sometimes even postpone them. [这段里面都是在列观点，没有什么论证过程，很大的问题]

In conclusion, laws, being organized system for the society to maintain its orders and control the behaviors of its members, should follow the development and changes of our society, that[which] means, neither to be rigid or fixed, nor change them frequently and unnecessarily.


[总的来说，文章结构还算可以，但是文章有点缺乏必要的论述，语言一般，印象很深刻的就是文章出现了6个secure，实在是无法接受。另外，例子也利用得不好]

ldc792001UID: 2134601

issue174 (sally)有拍必复，请留链接

issue174 the laws should be flexible enough to take accout of all circumstances
提纲
观点：法律必须随着社会的发展而修订以确保社会的秩序，但是同时也必须维持法律相对的稳定性
1.只有及时地修正法律才能发挥其维持社会秩序的功能
2.僵化的法律会阻碍社会的发展
3.法律相对的稳定性对于维护社会的发展也是很必要的

Basically I agree with the arguer that the laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places. Still（what is more，furthermore）, I have to point out that the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the order of the society.

To begin with, laws should be established or amended with the development of the society. Laws are official rules and regulations to govern the society and to control the behaviors of its members. When a society marches on, new circumstances may occur, and people would refresh their way to deal with such circumstances. For example, when cars were invented and became popular, people set up traffic rules, say driving on one side of the road, to secure the safety of people as well as the efficiency of traffic（例子似乎是在说明rule出现的必要性,和本段首TS结合不是很紧密）。. Often enough, when existing laws cannot be well applicable to such new circumstances and rules, people would have to adapt（modify） old laws or set up（implement） new ones to secure the order of the society. It is not only necessary but （but also）quotidian in our history. Take Constitution of the United States for example: the first Constitution was born（established） in 1887, four year later, ten amendments were added in, and up to now, there have been twenty- seven amendments to assure that the Constitution functions as the foundation of federal law system. The evolution history of Constitution illustrates that adaptation of the laws is necessary to secure the order of a developing society. （再加一句本段的总结句）

In addition, being rigid and fixed, the laws can prevent the progress of the society or even cause damage to the social orders（觉得不会引起这么严重的后果吧？）. Laws that obey out of date rules cause confuse and unfairness among the social members when they deserve new ones. When the out-of- date laws assume their function to secure social orders, the new born（emergence） orders are broken, and then the activities that depend on such orders are disturbed, and finally a chaos of such social activities is aroused. For example, laws that secure the Apartheid of Republic of South Africa not only seriously damaged the well-beings of its social members, including all races, and aroused all kinds of social conflicts, but also exclude the country from the U.N and global stage until they were at last abandoned.

However, though the out-of-date laws do harm to the society, the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the stability of the society. Generally speaking, our society develops in a gradual manner. Frequent changes of laws are both unnecessary and disastrous. Trying to set up laws that secure the pre-mature orders do not help them to develop, and sometimes even postpone them. （这段分析的应该在深入一些，法律的稳定性为什么会保证社会的稳定性）
In conclusion, laws, being organized system for the society to maintain its orders and control the behaviors of its members, should follow（comply with） the development and changes of our society, that means, neither to be rigid or fixed, nor change them frequently and unnecessarily.

Echo_1900UID: 2180165

issue174 the laws should be flexible enough to take accout of all circumstances
提纲
观点：法律必须随着社会的发展而修订以确保社会的秩序，但是同时也必须维持法律相对的稳定性
1.只有及时地修正法律才能发挥其维持社会秩序的功能
2.僵化的法律会阻碍社会的发展
3.法律相对的稳定性对于维护社会的发展也是很必要的

Basically I agree with the arguer(同意二楼的，像argument ) that the laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places.(复述提干我个人不太赞成) Still（这个有些单薄了，换个词会好些） I have to point out that the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the order of the society.

To begin with, laws should be established or amended with the development of the society. Laws are official rules and regulations to govern the society and to control the behaviors of its members.（定义很好） When a society marches on, new circumstances may occur, and people would （用have to 会不会更好呢？）refresh their way to deal with such circumstances. （结和后文一起说，circumstance 用的太多了而且只一句话就引出例子显得有些仓促） For example, when cars were invented and became popular, people set up traffic rules, say （and advocated）driving on one side of the road, to(in order to)secure the safety of people as well as the efficiency of traffic. Often enough, when existing laws cannot be well applicable to such new circumstances and rules, people would have to adapt( 我觉得用amend更好 )old laws or set up new ones to secure the order of the society. It is not only necessary but quotidian(这个词用在这里有点怪) in our history. Take (the )Constitution of the United States for example: the first Constitution was born in 1887, four year（years） later, ten amendments were added in, and up to now, there have been twenty- seven amendments to assure that the Constitution functions as the foundation of federal law system. The evolution history of Constitution illustrates that adaptation of the laws is necessary to secure the order of a developing society. (例子论述占较大篇幅，且对于例子缺乏正面的逻辑分析)

In addition, being rigid and fixed, the laws can prevent the progress of the society or even cause damage to the social orders. Laws that obey out of date rules cause（连着的两句话中重复用这个词显得单一） confuse and unfairness among the social members when they deserve new ones. When the out-of- date laws assume their function to secure social orders, the new born orders are broken, and then the activities that depend on such orders are disturbed, and finally a chaos of such social activities is aroused. For example, laws that secure the Apartheid of Republic of South Africa not only seriously damaged the well-beings of its social members, including all races, and aroused all kinds of social conflicts, but also exclude the country from the U.N and global stage until they were at last abandoned.（过于草率的段落结尾，我觉得多少应该分析几句吧）

However, though （这两个东东连一起好像不太好）the out-of-date laws do harm to the society, the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the stability of the society. Generally speaking,（ 上一个观点刚结束这里就总结，中间缺乏论证过程）our society develops in a gradual manner. Frequent changes of laws are both unnecessary and disastrous. Trying to set up laws that secure the pre-mature（为什么用这个词？想表达什么？） orders do not help them to develop, and sometimes even postpone them.

In conclusion, laws, being organized system for the society to maintain its orders and control the behaviors of its members, should follow the development and changes of our society, that means, neither to be rigid or fixed, nor change them frequently and unnecessarily.

我也刚写了Issue 174
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1
互相拍拍吧

pohia520UID: 2144130

issue174 the laws should be flexible enough to take accout of all circumstances
提纲
观点：法律必须随着社会的发展而修订以确保社会的秩序，但是同时也必须维持法律相对的稳定性
1.只有及时地修正法律才能发挥其维持社会秩序的功能
2.僵化的法律会阻碍社会的发展
3.法律相对的稳定性对于维护社会的发展也是很必要的

Basically I agree with the <br>arguer [同意二楼的，像argument ] that the laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places. <br>Still［However］, I have to point out that the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the order of the society.

To begin with, laws should be established or amended with the development of the society. Laws are official rules and regulations to govern the society and to control the behaviors of its members. When a society marches on, <br>new circumstances may occur [不是这样搭配的］, and people would refresh their way to deal with such circumstances. For example, when cars were invented and became popular, people set up traffic rules, <br>say［saying] driving on one side of the road, to secure the safety of people as well as the efficiency of traffic. <br>often enough [?] , when <br>existing [existed是不是更好些？］ laws cannot be well applicable to <br>such［such用得太多，很多时候没必要，这里并没有什么特指］ new circumstances and rules, people would have to adapt old laws or set up new ones to secure the order of the society. It is not only necessary but <br>quotidian［这个词是每日发生的意思，用于此处，太过频繁，不好］ in our history. Take Constitution of the United States <br>for［as an］ example: the first Constitution was born in 1887, four <br>year later, ten amendments were added in, and up to now, there have been twenty- seven amendments to assure that the Constitution functions as the foundation of federal law system. The evolution history of Constitution illustrates that adaptation of the laws is necessary to secure the order of a developing society.

In addition, being rigid and fixed, the laws can prevent the progress of the society or even cause damage to the social orders. Laws that <br> obey [?] out of date rules cause confuse and unfairness among the social members when they deserve new ones. When the out-of- date laws assume their function to secure social orders, the new born orders are broken, and then the activities that depend on such orders are disturbed, and finally a chaos of such social activities is aroused. For example, laws that secure the Apartheid of Republic of South Africa not only seriously damaged the well-beings of its social members, including all races, and aroused all kinds of social conflicts, but also <br>exclude [保持时态一致，excluded] the country from the U.N and global stage until they were at last abandoned.

However, though the out-of-date laws do harm to the society, the relative stability of the laws should be sustained to secure the stability of the society. Generally speaking, our society develops in a gradual manner. Frequent changes of laws are both unnecessary and disastrous. Trying to set up laws that secure the pre-mature orders do not help them to develop, and sometimes even postpone them.

In conclusion, laws, being organized system for the society to maintain its orders and control the behaviors of its members, should follow the development and changes of our society, <br>that [which］ means, neither to be rigid or fixed, nor change them frequently and unnecessarily.
<br> [应该要注意多运用同义词，一样的意思可以换用不同的词来表达，那样更好些]

pohia520UID: 2144130

完蛋了，发现修改器又没用好，应该还是可以看清吧
～～不好意思