BaXia小组第5次作业issue5-michelle

michelle1021UID: 195011

Issue 5
提纲：
1，        对教育者来说，不同地方学习相同的课程便于他们在教学中良好的准备和安排课程
2，        如果选择不同的课程，不方便在比较不同地区间的教育成效
3，        针对穷困和残疾学生多的地方只能采取不同课程教育
4，        采取不同课程有它自身的好处

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's first part contention that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. However, I strongly disagree with the second part-that schools in different parts should not be allowed to determine which courses they prefer to offer. Although this claim is not entirely without support, it runs contrary to the freedom of those schools.

The primary reason that offering the same national curriculum before students entering college is that, it is convenient for educationist of different parts of the nation to scientifically arrange and prepare the classes of the curriculum. As is often pointed out, knowledge is a two-edged weapon that can be used equally for both good or evil, it is now being used indifferently for both. Under this situation, it is very important for educationists to rightly judge the knowledge when they impart it to students; thus, the uniform of knowledge became so crucial that it is easier for educationists to get ready for arranging and judging their courses.

A correlative support for the speaker's assert is that, thinking of the possible differences, it is unwise to allow schools rather than a nation to choose the courses for the students. This is related to managing problems, which may course by different parts of schools choosing their own
Courses, and, at last, the situation may become a total confusion. Even this will cause problems when a nation wanted to compare any of the two region’s education level, if the two parts are offering totally different courses, then the compare seems impossible to make.

A nation rather than the schools in different parts of the nation determine the national curriculum for the students, however, is does not mean that the local schools have no freedom to choose any course for local students. Although choosing to offer the same courses seem reasonable in some degree, it depends on the actual situation according to the nature of students in certain kind of parts. If, for instance, students in a comparatively poor region, the local school is not able to offer the same kind of curses as those rich parts. Also, consider certain schools is one part are particularly filled with disabled students, they absolutely should offer special courses for their students, which can be surely different form other parts.

Furthermore, people only see the superficial merits to offering the same courses in different schools, the intrinsic phenomenon is completely being neglected.  We have to confess the convenience which educationists will have and the almost sure positive results will be received in management of education center, however, if a nation will, at least have this motive, make plans specially according to the distinctively individual characters each parts' students have, the influence will be significant. Of course, this can only be carry on when this nation has enough money.

In sum, without the notion that students should study the same national curriculum until they enter college, the educationists and people who manage those education courses will face a big problem. Yet, schools should have their freedom to choose courses, which they must and should offer, according to different situations. I concede that knowledge is an unending stuff that needs people pay great attention on it.

forevercocoUID: 149574

BaXia小组第5次作业issue5-michelle

Issue 5
提纲：
1对教育者来说，不同地方学习相同的课程便于他们在教学中良好的准备和安排课程
2如果选择不同的课程，不方便在比较不同地区间的教育成效
3针对穷困和残疾学生多的地方只能采取不同课程教育
4采取不同课程有它自身的好处

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's first part contention that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. However, I strongly disagree with the second part-that schools in different parts should not be allowed to determine which courses they prefer to offer. Although this claim is not entirely without support, it runs contrary to the freedom of those schools.

The primary reason that offering the same national curriculum before students entering college is that, it is convenient for educationist of different parts of the nation to scientifically arrange and prepare the classes of the curriculum. As is often pointed out, knowledge is a two-edged weapon that can be used equally for both good or[both..and..或是either..or..] evil, it is now being used indifferently for both. Under this situation, it is very important for educationists to rightly judge the knowledge when they impart it to students; thus, the uniform of knowledge became so crucial that it is easier for educationists to get ready for arranging and judging their courses.
[这里说双刃剑可能不大合适，为了支持提纲中的论点，大致可以写成这样：统一课程也提供了成熟的，模式化的教学方法和安排，因此教师们不用为此而烦恼，担心自己的课程安排会有所疏漏或是不合理。双刃剑是指科学的两面性，但是对基础教育来说，教师们一般都该知道那些东西是可以教给学生的。]

A correlative support for the speaker's assert is that, thinking of the possible differences, it is unwise to allow schools rather than a nation to choose the courses for the students. This is related to managing problems, which may course[cause] by different parts of schools choosing their own Courses, and, at last, the situation may become a total confusion.[为什么会become a total confusion?没有讲清楚] Even this will cause problems when a nation wanted to compare any of the two region’s education level, if the two parts are offering totally different courses, then[去掉then,因为前面有if了] the compare seems impossible to make.

A nation rather than the schools in different parts of the nation determine the national curriculum for the students, however, is[去掉is] does not mean that the local schools have no freedom to choose any course for local students. Although choosing to offer the same courses seem reasonable in some degree, it depends on the actual situation according to the nature of students in certain kind of parts. If, for instance, students in a comparatively poor region, the local school is not able to offer the same kind of curses[courses] as those rich parts.[这个观点可以在延伸一下，比如说一些试验课程因为条件所限无法提供] Also, consider certain schools is[in] one part are particularly filled with[filled with不对啊，可以写成：schools offer special education所以需要自己设置课程。老米很重视特殊教育的，所以这个观点很好] disabled students, they absolutely should offer special courses for their students, which can[will] be surely different form other parts[others].

Furthermore, people only see the superficial merits to offering the same courses in different schools, the intrinsic phenomenon is completely being neglected.  We have to confess the convenience which educationists will have and the almost sure positive results will be received in management of education center, however, if a nation will, at least have this motive, make plans specially according to the distinctively individual characters each parts' students have, the influence will be significant. Of course, this can only be carry on when this nation has enough money.

In sum, without the notion that students should study the same national curriculum until they enter college, the educationists and people who manage those education courses will face a big problem. Yet, schools should have their freedom to choose courses, which they must and should offer, according to different situations. I concede that knowledge is an unending stuff that needs people pay great attention on it.

[B3写的最好，B4的倒数第二句太长了，看着有些混乱，别的都还不错，+U~.文章中一些修饰性的词汇用的太多了，反而显得累赘了。]

deelee221UID: 2170883

Issue 5
提纲：
1，        对教育者来说，不同地方学习相同的课程便于他们在教学中良好的准备和安排课程
2，        如果选择不同的课程，不方便在比较不同地区间的教育成效
3，        针对穷困和残疾学生多的地方只能采取不同课程教育 这个理由似乎有点牵强。
4，        采取不同课程有它自身的好处

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's first part contention that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. However, I strongly disagree with the second part-that schools in different parts should not be allowed to determine which courses they prefer to offer. Although this claim is not entirely without support, it runs contrary to the freedom of those schools.

The primary reason that offering the same national curriculum before students entering college is that, it is convenient for educationist of different parts of the nation to scientifically arrange and prepare the classes of the curriculum. As is often pointed out, knowledge is a two-edged weapon that can be used equally for both good or and evil, it is now being used indifferently 什么意思？ for both. Under this situation, it is very important for educationists to rightly judge the knowledge when they impart it to students; thus, the uniform of knowledge became so crucial that it is easier for educationists to get ready for arranging and judging their courses. 论据没有充分说明论点。

A correlative support for the speaker's assert assertion? is that, thinking of the possible differences, it is unwise to allow schools rather than a nation to choose the courses for the students. This is related to managing problems, which may course by different parts of schools choosing their own courses, and, at last, the situation may become a total confusion. Even this will cause problems when a nation wanted to compare any of the two region’s education level, if the two parts are offering totally different courses, then the compare seems impossible to make. 这段说了两个理由？提纲没有提到。。

A nation rather than the schools in different parts of the nation determine the national curriculum for the students, however, is delete! does not mean that the local schools have no freedom to choose any course for local students. Although choosing to offer the same courses seem reasonable in some degree, it depends on the actual situation according to the nature of students in certain kind of delete! parts. If, for instance, students in a comparatively poor region, the local school is not able to offer the same kind of curses as those rich parts. Also, consider certain schools is one part are particularly filled with disabled students, they absolutely should offer special courses for their students, which can be surely different form other parts.

Furthermore, people only see the superficial merits to offering the same courses in different schools, the intrinsic phenomenon is completely being neglected.  We have to confess the convenience which educationists will have and the almost sure positive results will be received in management of education center, however, if a nation will, at least have this motive, make plans specially according to the distinctively individual characters each parts' students have, the influence will be significant. Of course, this can only be carry on when this nation has enough money.

In sum, without the notion that students should study the same national curriculum until they enter college, the educationists and people who manage those education courses will face a big problem. Yet, schools should have their freedom to choose courses, which they must and should offer, according to different situations. I concede that knowledge is an unending stuff that needs people pay great attention on-to it.

总的来说，语言和提纲需进一步提高。

黑崎猫猫UID: 209414

Issue 5
提纲：
1，        对教育者来说，不同地方学习相同的课程便于他们在教学中良好的准备和安排课程
2，        如果选择不同的课程，不方便在比较不同地区间的教育成效
3，        针对穷困和残疾学生多的地方只能采取不同课程教育(这应该是个典型的例证来证明相同课程的缺点)4，        采取不同课程有它自身的好处

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's first part contention that a nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. However, I strongly disagree with the second part-that(可以去掉~~这条横线怎么看和我那条那么像捏~~;P) schools in different parts should not be allowed to determine which courses they prefer to offer. Although this claim is not entirely without support,it runs contrary to the freedom of those schools.

The primary reason that offering the same national curriculum before students entering college is that, it is convenient for educationist of different parts of the nation to scientifically arrange and prepare the classes of the curriculum. As is often pointed out, knowledge is a two-edged weapon that can be used equally for both good or（and） evil, it is now being used   indifferently( 这个词是冷淡的，漠不关心的意思，莫非你是这个意思？有些迷惑了) for both. Under this situation, it is very important for educationists to rightly judge the knowledge when they impart it to students; thus, the uniform（unification?） of knowledge became so crucial that it is easier for educationists to get ready for arranging and judging their courses.
用了一些很好的连接词，整段挺流畅

A correlative support for the speaker's assert is that, thinking of the possible differences, it is    unwise to allow schools rather than a nation to choose the courses for the students.(这句是中心句吗？总觉得没有很好的概括段意) This is related to managing problems, which may course by different parts of schools choosing their own Courses, and, at last, the situation may become a total confusion. Even this will cause problems when a nation wanted to compare any of the two region’s education level, if the two parts are offering totally different courses, then the compare seems impossible to make.

A nation rather than the schools in different parts of the nation determine the national curriculum for the students, however, is does not mean that the local schools have no freedom to choose any course for local students. Although choosing to offer the same courses seem reasonable in some degree, it depends on the actual situation according to the nature of students in certain kind of parts. If, for instance, students in a comparatively poor region, the local school is not able to offer the same kind of curses as those rich parts. Also, consider certain schools is one part are particularly filled with disabled students, they absolutely should offer special courses for their students, which can be surely different form other parts.（这段看得我有点晕，其实不用追求太长句子，说清意思就行了）

Furthermore, people only see the superficial merits to offering the same courses in different schools, the intrinsic phenomenon is completely being neglected.  We have to confess the convenience which educationists will have and the almost sure positive results will be received in management of education center, however, if a nation will, at least have this motive, make plans specially according to the distinctively individual characters each parts' students have, the influence will be significant. Of course, this can only be carry on when this nation has enough money.

In sum, without the notion that students should study the same national curriculum until they enter college, the educationists and people who manage those education courses will face a big problem. Yet, schools should have their freedom to choose courses, which they must and should offer, according to different situations. I concede that knowledge is an unending stuff that needs people pay great attention on it.


恩，总结，例子不太有力，不过也是题目使然，我也没举出什么典型例子来
论证还不错，不过长句子挺多的，看得我有些晕晕的
还有文章写好要先放到word里纠纠错

michelle1021UID: 195011

那个indifferently 是说对good or evil都没有区别了