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Argument145

题目：
A new study collected data that shows that people who snore
are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore.
It is well known that many people who snore also stop breathing
frequently during the night for a few seconds, a condition called
sleep apnea. The interruption of breathing wakes the person—often so
briefly that the waking goes unnoticed—and can leave the person too
tired during the day to exercise. Anyone who snores, therefore, should
try to eat less than the average person and to exercise more.

翻译：
一项新的调查所收集的数据显示打呼噜的人比不打呼噜的人更容易长胖。
我们知道很多打呼噜的人夜间也经常有数秒钟的呼吸停顿，这种现象被称为
睡眠呼吸中断。这种呼吸的停顿导致本人醒来——通常十分短暂以至于不被察觉——
并且会使本人在白天很累而无力锻炼。因此，所有打呼噜的人都应该比正常人
少吃多锻炼。

The argument cited an study which suggested that people who snore are more likely to gain weight
than are people who do not snore, for the reason that snore make people suffer from sleep apnea , which make people too tied to exercise in the day time . Therefore , the arguer claimed that anyone who snore should eat less and exercise more than average people .The argument seems well presented at the first glance ,upon a second consideration ,there are obviously several problems which were not considered in this argument  .

To begin with, the arguer's assumption is base on a new study ,but the study is too vague to be
informative .The arguer fail to provided assurances that the data on which the argument depends
on is statistically reliable .It is quite possible that more fat people were covered in this study while few people who is snore but thin were exclusive in this data  .Hence ,it is easily to draw a misleading conclusion that people who snore is more likely to gain weight .

Similarly , the author claim that sleep apnea make people suffer from the interruption of breathing a lot , which make people too tired to exercise during the day .  However , the claim show no evidence that people will not exercise even if they feel tired .Mankind are rational creature that is able to maintain their assert , especially modern people are great emphasis on health .For the health's sake , it
is good chance that people would spend more time to exercise even they feel tired .the author provided no strong enough evidence to support his claim above.

Also ,the author 's another assumption rests on that any people who snore should eat less and exercise more  . The argument committed the fallacy of "all thing are equal ".Even if the author can offerconvincing evidence that people who snore are more likely to gain weight ,different people should
have different treatment which base on their body conditions. For example , it possible that the fat
people who snore should eat more for the reason that his body is so weak that he need more
nutrition ;it is also possible that some snore people should ask a doctor for advice rather than simply eat less and exercise more .

To sum up ,the conclusion lack credibility because the evidence cited in this argument does not lent strong support to what the arguer maintains

[ 本帖最后由 yanhuangbaby 于 2006-2-18 22:07 编辑 ]

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The argument cited an study which suggested that people who snore are more likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore, for the reason that snore make people suffer from sleep apnea , which make people too tied to exercise in the day time . Therefore , the arguer claimed that anyone who snore should eat less and exercise more than average people .The argument seems well presented at the first glance ,upon a second consideration ,there are obviously several problems which were not considered in this argument  .

To begin with, the arguer's assumption is base on a new study ,but the study is too vague to be informative .[后面这句有堆砌论证型句子之嫌]The arguer fail to provided assurances that the data on which the argument depends on is statistically reliable. It is quite possible that more fat people were covered in this study while few people who is snore but thin were exclusive in this data. [语法好像有问题，改写一下The majority of the fat people who do not snore are excluded in the survey, which might undermines the representative of the cited evidence.]Hence ,it is easily to draw a misleading conclusion that people who snore is more likely to gain weight .

Similarly , the author claim that sleep apnea make people suffer from the interruption of breathing a lot , which make people too tired to exercise during the day .[动词前适当加情态动词]  However , the claim show no evidence that people will not exercise even if they feel tired .Mankind are rational creature that is able to maintain their assert , especially[副词吧？要加连词] modern people are great emphasis on health. [emphasis用错了… emphasis much on health] For the health's sake , it is good chance that people would spend more time to exercise even they feel tired .the author provided no strong enough evidence to support his claim above.

Also ,the author 's another assumption rests on [这是recommendation或者conclusion]that any people who snore should eat less and exercise more . The argument committed the fallacy of "all thing are equal ".[解释一下,which is to say…] Even if the author can offer convincing evidence that people who snore are more likely to gain weight ,different people should have different treatment which base on [according to]their body conditions. For example , it possible that the fat people who snore should eat more for the reason that his body is so weak that he need more nutrition ;it is also possible that some snore people should ask a doctor for advice rather than simply eat less and exercise more .

To sum up ,the conclusion lack credibility because the evidence cited in this argument does not lent strong support to what the arguer maintains.[结尾模板要换，很多人用，包括我，时间够的话要提出建议]

[这篇题名难，看了才大概知道了错在哪里，arguer把证据和自己的想法糅杂在一起，晕
逻辑方面,
我发觉的其他逻辑问题，因为我觉得你驳斥的第二点有点牵强，精灵先回拍一下这些，我也不是很确定

many snore->sleep apnea                       // not all
tired->no exercise                              // lack evidence,
                                                                                                // tired could also leads to thin
snore ->more likely fat                                                        // probably causal reverse
above->fat & less exercise->less food & more exercise // 1.any都要？   2. 治标不治本

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