Topic7.啥也别说了，拍就一个字！

loiswtfUID: 2177029

为什么这么多人看了没有人回呢？好可怜啊我~~~~
自己顶一下!

麦芒UID: 2190630

Nowadays, television has become one of the most important entertainments of our lives. Without a television, after dinner, for example, we may find nothing to do and feel idle（这最好表举例，你第2段已经详细阐述了，个人意见）. Although TVs can bring us a lot of fun with a variety of programs including sports and political news, talk shows and plays etc., they influence our behaviors somewhat(somehow感觉要通顺些) negatively. As far as I am concerned, I don’t recommend spending a lot of time sitting before the screens.

   Admittedly, various programs covering a large range both for children and adults present a lot of information and entertainments. Children can find their favorite cartoons on the Young Channels, and adults may enjoy talk shows or drama plays. Especially the old and the sick can kill time by watching TV all day long。 TVs, indeed, put us in a wonderful and colorful world in which everyone can seek for his own preference.
However, I believe that spending too much time on TVs may affect our behaviors in many aspects of life（貌似有点偏题，^_^!!!）. Initially, we may watch TV after lunch at the cost of the time spent on communication with family members. The children who have difficulties in their homework can’t receive wise advice and help from their parents, if the parents are both fascinated with screen. What is more, students who are addicted to TV programs, say, cartoons, can’t concentrate on their studies, as a result, they may fall behind others. Sitting before a TV, many people are becoming lazy and thus wasting more time on it instead of taking outdoor exercises.

On the other hand, more importantly, the untrue scenes in plays or movies on TVs can deceive people, especially the naïve children, who have not the concept of what is the right or wrong. Children may imitate bad behaviors such as stealing on the screen, assuming it is a common behavior. Also, an adult who can’t restrain oneself in principle may go out of the moral line by committing crimes as they see on TVs.
  In conclusion, in spite of the claims of TVs, I doubt their positive influence on people’s behaviors. Every TV fan should sometimes view it from a different perspective and, remind him or her not to be addictive to it and totally trust it. After all, we live in the real world. A lot of other things are awaiting us ahead and, our many relatives and friends are expecting us to care for.

难道是我对题目理解错了？怎么感觉楼主写成了the harmness of spending much time before tv?表生气哈，纯属个人意见，仅供参考

小狗乖乖UID: 2175916

我和楼上的有同感，好象有点偏题吧，更多的是说TV的不良影响，而且没说怎样influence people's behavior

loiswtfUID: 2177029

哦，是阿，今天看了别人写的，确实内容上跟我的大不一样，理解有误啊
这要是考试那可不完了呀
谢谢楼上的两位提醒

wwonderyUID: 2159397

文章总体感觉还行,审题真的很重要.
有几点忌讳,第一段尽可能别举例,它的作用是总领全文
第三段的第一句作为本段中心句many aspects 最好写具体，比如　affect our behaviors not only in .... but also in ....
第五段是结尾，一般重述就可以了，最后一句又讲了个新理由，好象不太合适

我可能有点八股文心理，请ＬＺ去其糟粕，留其精华吧
谢谢批改