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发表于 2006-4-24 17:50:25 |显示全部楼层
Topic39:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I do not doubt that technology has improved the means we learn by. The development of computer science and Internet technology is the primary reason why we can learn more and more quickly than ever before.

First of all, computers and Internet open a world broad and detailed for us. The “Information explosion” time has come. Today, every one of us has the rights to learn through computers and Internet. No matter what topic of knowledge we want to learn about, we are able to find every aspect of it. Suppose that if we want to know more about a famous person who contributed a lot in history, we can find critics about him/her, read his/her autobiography or biography, watch movies about life in his/her time, etc. We are also allowed to know more about our daily life. We can read a number of news from all parts of the world, about sports, entertainments, politics, and breakouts on science such as biology and medicine. In a word, we can gain more information and learn it more quickly on the “Information superhighway”.

Secondly, on-line conversations make our life more convenient and relaxed. For instance, a multinational corporation can make a meeting on Internet with members working in different countries and cities, which costs less money and time. As students, when we cannot find enough information we want to know by ourselves, we can ask our friends or teachers for help by computer too. Instead of disturbing others by telephone calls, sending e-mails allows people who we asked to respond at any time they like, and it takes much shorter time to be sent and received.

The third reason why we can learn more information and learn it more quickly is that we can do “distance learning”. It means that we can take courses we may have in school at home or anywhere we like. MIT open courseware,for example, is what we can take even on the train from Beijing to Shanghai, though we are not MIT students at all.

So it is obvious that technology can helps us learn more information and learn it more quickly. We can search the Internet for what we want to know, contact with others, and attend flexibly arranged class with the help of technology.

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发表于 2006-4-28 23:06:37 |显示全部楼层
淹死了...自己顶

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发表于 2006-4-29 17:26:20 |显示全部楼层
54. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One should never judge a person by external appearances. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

A pretty face and enchanting clothes can make people like you at the first sight. Wearing nice clothes, which are expensive, fashionable or individual, can show your richness, taste and personality. And it is common that a good-looking guy shows more self-confidence than one who has fewer good looks. However, I think, one should not judge a person by what he/she looks like. The reasons are presented below.

The first key reason is that external appearances are superficial. In philosophical idea, one should judge a person by what he/she thinks and does instead of what he/she looks like; as the old saying has it, “You can not judge a book by its cover.” After all, the important aspects of a person are internal qualities, such as honesty, intelligence, diligence and so forth. If you judge a person by external appearances, you may look down upon the poor and the deformity, which is obviously wrong.

Another reason why I support the statement that one should never judge a person by external appearances due to the inaccurate information it may shows. On one hand, a bad person is able to be good-looking. For instance, a thief can wear what he/she thieved. On the other hand, a good person may not care much for his/her wearing. You can always see a rich guy or a genius wearing the most common or even washed-out clothes. Einstein is a good example. And now it is not fresh to hear something like a story of a wealth man who dressed up badly to experience poverty.

From the foregoing, I definitely agree that one should not judge a person by the outside. Not only because internal characters are what a person should be judged by, but also external appearance may mislead one’s judgment to others.

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发表于 2006-4-29 22:47:11 |显示全部楼层
第一篇
以下是我的拙见:
Information explosion这个词我不知道是否正确,我查了我们家所有的英语词典都没有查到,明天早晨我帮你去问一下别人,然后再给你个答复。如果你很肯定是正确的话,麻烦用版上的短消息知会我一声,谢谢!
computers and Internet open a world broad and detailed for us.为什么要用detailed来修饰world呢?你想表达什么意思呢?详细的世界?还有就是broad和detailed是形容词,应该放在world前面才对吧。。。
Suppose that if we want to know more about a famous person who contributed a lot in history, we can find critics about him/her, read his/her autobiography or biography, watch movies about life in his/her time, etc.这句话最后跟一句“通过上网”会比较好。
In a word, we can gain more information and learn it more quickly on the “Information superhighway”.这个段落没有提到过more quickly,也没有任何关于它的论证,但是结尾总结的时候却加上了,逻辑不是很清楚会。。。
it takes much shorter time to be sent and received.这句的主语应该是人吧,这种举行我没有见过用物做主语的,当然我不一定说得对
来说说开头段,开头段的第2句应该算是topic sentence,那么第1句这句话放在第1句就很奇怪,你下面虽然带到过改变了学习的方式,但是没有着重的论证它,但是却把它放在开头第一句那么重要的位置上。
另外你用了很多我没有见过的引号词,还有就是courseware是什么意思?比较愚钝。。。不好意思。。。

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发表于 2006-4-29 22:56:38 |显示全部楼层
第二篇
以下是我得拙见:
guy 这个词太随便了,要用正式一点的词才好
fewer good looks你确定可以用fewer来修饰么?我觉得怪怪的
这篇的逻辑比较清楚,不错的,如果可以多加一条理由就好了。

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发表于 2006-4-29 22:57:49 |显示全部楼层
我看你的文章也贴上来好多天了,为什么不跟着版上的主题写呢?如果同题写的话,会有更多的人帮你改的。或许你可以参考以下这个建议。

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发表于 2006-4-30 17:12:11 |显示全部楼层
谢谢Didoy啊!
information explosion我是在外研社的<新世纪汉英大词典>上查到的,应该不会错吧.
World这词让我想到很多琐碎的细节,所以就写了detailed.现在再看用complicated, complex都行
it takes much shorter time to be sent and received.我改成 And it costs less time and money to send and receive emails.这样会好一点.
information explosion,information superhighway,distance learning,MIT open courseware 这些词我原来也不知道是这么翻译的.写作文的时候脑子里蹦上来信息爆炸,信息高速公路,远程教育,MIT开放课程这些东西,就查了汉译英词典.courseware是课件的意思

我写guy的时候也觉得不妥,但老用person,one什么的又觉得单调...不知道有没有牛人能告诉我还有什么词能用
fewer good looks是word文档语法查错让我这么改的,我也不知道对不对
第二篇文章我是站在绝对支持的立场写的,想不出还有别的什么理由.如果把理由细分一下的话也许会好一点. 后来我看了一些范文,结果发现是我把 judge 这个词的词义看得过于狭窄了.judge不仅仅是 God judge me这种场合用的,招演员或售货员的时候也能用.这样这篇文章就可以用 部分同意 的立场写了

没有同主题写作是因为我有压题的心理.毕竟没时间写很多作文.现在放假了我会更多练习的
再次谢谢Didoy

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发表于 2006-4-30 18:50:59 |显示全部楼层
不用谢
我给你顶一下吧。。。

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