Issue51 FLY AW作文组第二次作业

澄～清UID: 2215483

The statement above conceals the interesting contradictory between the ideal conception and realistic embodiment. The issue of the educational style and effectivity is the complex system, involving educators, educatees, and the intermediums which can be teachers and parents between them, not simply a debate over which courses should be offered.

As an ideal conception, the specially designed education for different individuals is greatly conducive to enhance the functions of education and the benefits each person obtained from it to the largest extent. On one hand, every one is biologically equal. That means the genes, determining our good and bad qualities, our features and characters inborn, is to some extent fair. Any one, owning some innate capacity in one aspect, would suffer the disadvantage in another. Every person is an apple bitten by God, who would not takes sides any of them. So the education conceived accurately for each one will take advantage of his innate beneficial factors, and avoid harmful ones. As Forest Gump, the leading actor in movie “Forest Gump”, is congenital mental deficiency, but also a genius at sports. Forest is a luck man for being found and developed to become famous athlete, no longer a disabled child laughed by his friends. The meaning of this conception presents fully in such case. On the other hand, ones’ interests, sometimes the same as inborn capacities, are more possible to be fostered to form successful careers. In my experience, we have internal impulses to deal with stuffs we are interested in, devote time to complete and try  our best to be expert. The specially designed education can seize such nature of human, making the educatee be taught with pleasure.

Not only individuals, but also the nation harvests fruit from this conception, for all citizens are most properly educated. If each one had received the most suitable education aiming at itself, the allocation of education resources would be optimized to the utmost. More important, the well educated people would make the country formidably strong and prosperous. It is undoubted the special education for individuals is admirable conception in terms of effectivity.

Under such aura of grandness, we can’t help to asking why we haven’t carried out this conception till now. In retrospect, you and I, our fathers, grandfathers, who enjoyed the benefits of it? Unfortunately none. What are we waiting for? So let us get down to possibility of realizing the ideal specially designed education.

The function of education is to teach one to think intensively and critically and save the man from the morass of errors. Based on our various personalities, which is changing and maturing as well while we grow up, there should be a special educator or expert who concentrate on acquainting with each of us (not our group), understanding what we need and interested in. It cannot be half-heartedly, but they have to put themselves in our position. Then they could design the variable educational methods fit each one of us. Is there enough educators, including all teachers, dedicate themselves to this so-called grand program? I doubt that even if someone really copes with this project, facing with millions of students, they can’t complete forever. Furthermore, the relationship between teachers and students is not like the one that retailer satisfying, even catering to the customers. It is the partnership of communication and cooperation, any side can’t predominate. We can imagine the difficulty in precisely scheming suitable education style for each student. Moreover, the variation of students’ personalities and inclinations will render one style invalid, giving rise to much more difficulties to actualize.

What aggregates its unrealistic currently is another problem, the expense of the government budget. If marvelously, we can find the way to benefit each educatee and optimize the educational resource to fully extent, can we afford the huge cost to achieve it? If only half or even less of it have been done, who will get access to the limited number? First come, first served? Or charging the payment, changing the education to the commodity?

Admittedly, education designed to meet individual needs and interests is effective, but it is not realistic, and not the only way to improve the efficiency of education. I promote, more realistically and appropriately, to construct the educational styles based on groups, not individuals, and to establish the spacious environment in which individual interest and creativity can be developed.

[ 本帖最后由 澄～清 于 2006-5-20 14:00 编辑 ]

honeyviolaUID: 2199703

The statement above conceals the interesting contradictory between the ideal conception and realistic embodiment. The issue of the educational style and effectivity is the complex system, involving educators, educatees, and the intermediums which can be teachers and parents between them, not simply a debate over which courses should be offered.

As an ideal conception, the specially designed education for different individuals is greatly conducive to enhance the functions of education and the benefits each person obtained from it to the largest extent. On one hand, every one is biologically equal. That means the genes, determining our good and bad qualities, our features and characters inborn, is are to some extent fair. Any one, owning some innate capacity  capacities in one aspect, would suffer the disadvantage in another. Every person is an apple bitten by God, who would not takes sides any of them. So the education conceived accurately for each one will take advantage of his innate beneficial factors, and avoid harmful ones. As Forest Gump, the leading actor in movie “Forest Gump”, is congenital mental deficiency, but also a genius at sports. Forest is a luck man for being found and developed to become famous athlete, no longer a disabled child laughed by his friends. The meaning of this conception presents fully in such case. On the other hand, ones’ interests, sometimes the same as inborn capacities, are more possible to be fostered to form successful careers. In my experience, we have internal impulses to deal with stuffs we are interested in, devote time to complete and try  our best to be expert. The specially designed education can seize such nature of human, making the educatee be taught with pleasure.

Not only individuals, but also the nation harvests fruit from this conception（挺好的）, for all citizens are most properly educated. If each one had received the most suitable education aiming at itself, the allocation of education resources would be optimized to the utmost. More important, the well educated people would make the country formidably strong and prosperous. It is undoubted the special education for individuals is admirable conception in terms of effectivity.

Under such aura of grandness, we can’t help to asking why we haven’t carried out this conception till now. In retrospect, you and I, our fathers, grandfathers, who enjoyed the benefits of it? Unfortunately none. What are we waiting for? So let us get down to possibility of realizing the ideal specially designed education.

The function of education is to teach one to think intensively and critically and save the man from the morass of errors. Based on our various personalities, which is changing and maturing as well while we grow up, there should be a special educator or expert who concentrate on acquainting with each of us (not our group), understanding what we need and interested in. It cannot be half-heartedly, but they have to put themselves in our position. Then they could design the variable educational methods fit each one of us. Is are there enough educators, including all teachers, dedicate themselves to this so-called grand program? I doubt that even if someone really copes with this project, facing with millions of students, they can’t complete forever. Furthermore, the relationship between teachers and students is not like the one that retailer satisfying, even catering to the customers. It is the partnership of communication and cooperation, any side can’t predominate. We can imagine the difficulty in precisely scheming suitable education style for each student. Moreover, the variation of students’ personalities and inclinations will render one style invalid, giving rise to much more difficulties to actualize.

What aggregates its unrealistic currently is another problem, the expense of the government budget. If marvelously, we can find the way to benefit each educatee and optimize the educational resource to fully extent, can we afford the huge cost to achieve it? If only half or even less of it have has been done, who will get access to the limited number? First come, first served? Or charging the payment, changing the education to the commodity? 有独立的想法

Admittedly, education designed to meet individual needs and interests is effective, but it is not realistic, and not the only way to improve the efficiency of education. I promote, more realistically and appropriately, to construct the educational styles based on groups, not individuals, and to establish the spacious environment in which individual interest and creativity can be developed.

以前觉得这个题目仅从教育的提供能力和功能角度说明，看了楼主的文章，又增进了对题目的理解和剖析。即The statement above conceals the interesting contradictory between the ideal conception and realistic embodiment. 楼主从此入手，另辟蹊径，进行论述。从句的运用很娴熟，词汇相当丰富，思维清晰，只是有些小错误。

风中尘埃UID: 164965

看了一遍，很受启发，小声说，有些地方还有些看不懂
没有想到从现实性上来论证其合理性，只想到了会缺少共同的道德观，审美，思考能力
恩，语言更是佩服

夜一UID: 2130338

The statement above conceals the interesting contradictory between the ideal conception and realistic embodiment. The issue of the educational style and effectivity is the complex system, involving educators, educatees, and the intermediums which can be teachers and parents between them, not simply a debate over which courses should be offered.

As an ideal conception, the specially designed education for different individuals is greatly conducive to enhance the functions of education and the benefits each person obtained from it to the largest extent. On one hand, every one is biologically equal. That means the genes, determining our good and bad qualities, our features and characters inborn, is to some extent fair. Any one, owning some innate capacity in one aspect, would suffer the disadvantage in another. Every person is an apple bitten by God, who would not takes sides any of them. So the education conceived accurately for each one will take advantage of his innate beneficial factors, and avoid harmful ones. As Forest Gump, the leading actor in movie “Forest Gump”, is congenital mental deficiency, but also a genius at sports. Forest is a luck man for being found and developed to become famous athlete, no longer a disabled child laughed by his friends. The meaning of this conception presents fully in such case. On the other hand, ones’ interests, sometimes the same as inborn capacities, are more possible to be fostered to form successful careers. In my experience, we have internal impulses to deal with stuffs we are interested in, devote time to complete and try  our best to be expert. The specially designed education can seize such nature of human, making the educatee be taught with pleasure.

Not only individuals, but also the nation harvests fruit from this conception, for all citizens are most properly educated. If each one had received the most suitable education aiming at itself, the allocation of education resources would be optimized to the utmost. More important, the well educated people would make the country formidably strong and prosperous. It is undoubted the special education for individuals is admirable conception in terms of effectivity.上面这两段论述得相当好呢

Under such aura of grandness, we can’t help to asking why we haven’t carried out this conception till now. In retrospect, you and I, our fathers, grandfathers, who enjoyed the benefits of it? Unfortunately none. What are we waiting for? So let us get down to possibility of realizing the ideal specially designed education.

The function of education is to teach one to think intensively and critically and save the man from the morass of errors. Based on our various personalities, which is changing and maturing as well while we grow up, there should be a special educator or expert who concentrate on acquainting with each of us (not our group), understanding what we need and interested in. It cannot be half-heartedly, but they have to put themselves in our position. Then they could design the variable educational methods fit each one of us. Is there enough educators, including all teachers, dedicate themselves to this so-called grand program? I doubt that even if someone really copes with this project, facing with millions of students, they can’t complete forever. Furthermore, the relationship between teachers and students is not like the one that retailer satisfying, even catering to the customers. It is the partnership of communication and cooperation, any side can’t predominate. We can imagine the difficulty in precisely scheming suitable education style for each student. Moreover, the variation of students’ personalities and inclinations will render one style invalid, giving rise to much more difficulties to actualize. 我对上面这两段抱有一定的疑问，诚然论述的语言很好，但是这个观点对于主题有帮助么？主题是要论述如果教育。。。就会是真正的effective，可是这两段却在论述为什么我们现在做不到，给出的结果是实现那样的教育很难，而并没有评价说那样的教育是否effective。我认为楼主既然写作时间不够，就把这两段删减吧。

What aggregates its unrealistic currently is another problem, the expense of the government budget. If marvelously, we can find the way to benefit each educatee and optimize the educational resource to fully extent, can we afford the huge cost to achieve it? If only half or even less of it have been done, who will get access to the limited number? First come, first served? Or charging the payment, changing the education to the commodity?这一段也是，其实跟是否effective是有关系的，但可惜楼主没有点明白

Admittedly, education designed to meet individual needs and interests is effective, but it is not realistic, and not the only way to improve the efficiency of education. I promote, more realistically and appropriately, to construct the educational styles based on groups, not individuals, and to establish the spacious environment in which individual interest and creativity can be developed.

honeyviolaUID: 2199703

小建议，附上提纲，这样更清楚些

zqznedUID: 2114587

写得好多啊，语言很值得学习！

xmbjowlUID: 2182375

这两段
As an ideal conception, the specially designed education for different individuals is greatly conducive to enhance the functions of education and the benefits each person obtained from it to the largest extent. On one hand, every one is biologically equal. That means the genes, determining our good and bad qualities, our features and characters inborn, is to some extent fair. Any one, owning some innate capacity in one aspect, would suffer the disadvantage in another. Every person is an apple bitten by God, who would not takes sides any of them. So the education conceived accurately for each one will take advantage of his innate beneficial factors, and avoid harmful ones. As Forest Gump, the leading actor in movie “Forest Gump”, is congenital mental deficiency(是不是应该用形容词啊？mentally deficient), but also a genius at sports. Forest is a luck man for being found and developed to become famous athlete, no longer a disabled child laughed by his friends. The meaning of this conception presents fully in such case. On the other hand, ones’ interests, sometimes the same as inborn capacities, are more possible to be fostered to form successful careers. In my experience, we have internal impulses to deal with stuffs we are interested in, devote time to complete(不通啊) and try  our best to be （应有定冠词）expert. The specially designed education can seize such nature of human, making the educatee be taught with pleasure.

Not only individuals, but also the nation harvests fruit from this conception, for all citizens are most properly educated. If each one had received the most suitable education aiming at itself, the allocation of education resources would be optimized to the utmost. More important, the well educated people would（少be动词） formidably strong and prosperous. It is undoubted the special education for individuals is admirable conception in terms of effectivity.

澄～清UID: 2215483

谢谢大家的修改：）
提纲一定会附上，以前没仔细注意组长的要求。
对于文章的后半段，感谢夜一的批改 :)

以下是个人对issue和此题目的看法：
issue考试的开头写到”present your perspective on the issue below,using relevent reasons and/or examples to support your views" 按我个人的理解，此要求并没有要求一定要写支持或者反对这个issue的观点，而是要阐述你对于此问题的看法，也就说确立一个自己的观点，用很好的论述和例证去支持，让人信服。至于说你的观点是什么，只要和此issue密切相关，既可以支持或反对，也可以由此引申进一步的讨论。

拿issue51来说，题目自身逻辑上很被动（只有specially design了…… 教育才真正effective……），个人觉得是典型的被批判的题目，试问，如果不这样，教育就不effective了么？有人抓住这一点，提出其他能使教育effective的观念（如大众化的教育）；也有人支出specially designed education本身就不effective，这样都能很好的反驳题目，前提是你的立论就是要说题目的观点不对，要驳斥它，证明它的错误。要是不提出直接反对的论点，就没有必要这样做了。就好象我们写中文作文，给一句名言让你自由发挥，大家的观点可以是多样化的，关健是能自圆其说。

我文章的观点：
Specially designed education是很理想的教育理念，也很effective（我支持),但此种教育理念在现实中不具有可行性，并由此产生一对矛盾。
1段中提出这个观点，并在后面的五段中分两部分论述。
2,3段从human和nation两个角度论述这种理念为什么好，为什么effective。
4段转折，提出这么好那我们为什么不去实现它？
5，6段支出教育功能的复杂性使得要实现此理念必然会有人力、财力两个无法解决的问题，从而论证其不可行性。
7段总结，指出specially designed education 不是唯一effective的方法，提出自己认为好的方案（个人觉得此段写的很失败，需要推倒重来）

我在论点中没有直接面对issue的题目，而是提出specially designed education 本身是很effective的，也是我很认同的教育理念，只可惜不可行，是一个矛盾。我只是在讨论这个矛盾，想把它说清楚。
可能我阐述的不好，没把问题讲明白，希望大家讨论！

夜一UID: 2130338

嗯，我说的就是从你的转折开始，个人认为基本上和题目没太大关系了，因为问题已经回答完了，而且时间是个大问题啊，至少楼住那么多字数，考试的时候是写不完的，不如删减吧

exp03UID: 2158827

其实很多人都想这样写。
比如owl第二段先写special eudcation在很多方面有效，然后第三段都在写它对社会和对个人的不利的地方，第四段写要用另一种教育模式来代替这种教育模式。也是没有明确观点的提出。给人的感觉是观点不清过渡很难，我也是看了你的分析回过头来才想起owl的这种写法原来是这么回事。希望我在这里这样说owl不要介意。
新东方的老师说issue是立论型的文章，像这样只讨论矛盾不说明自己的观点能被ets接受么？